Calamity: I Have Nine Lives, and I’ll Become a God in the End

There is a lot of room for improvement. The wording is inappropriate, superfluous, and the plot is abrupt. There is no clear explanation of the system and world view. It will only make people confused and unable to understand it. Start calmly and explain well. Lay a good foundation. It's not that your descriptive words are unnecessary in writing, because either the meaning is repeated or the description is wrong. The author should think carefully about the division of the power system. This is also a relatively novel setting. After reading it, I found that if you don't think about it, I have absolutely no idea what happened. If you look carefully at a lot of questions and still don't know what happened,

The beginning is directly in the dungeon, which directly makes the situation very tense, but there are no ups and downs in the later part, which is too bland and procrastinating. Then the dungeon directly talks about what kind of training camp we are going to and that Chief Sun is in the name of the leader of the national genius training camp. It is very abrupt and inexplicable. I really can't stand it when I see this 🤦 Your suggestion is to expand the worldview in Chapter 2 and Chapter 3, and then slowly add to it later, and write around the worldview. Otherwise, you will not be able to grasp the rhythm of the whole book. Also, each chapter should be broken more crisply. There is no big problem with the writing. If you adjust the rhythm and worldview well, Tomato will be at least an average level.

It's not too much to give yourself a five-star rating. Need a big change

Come on, it's really good for a newcomer to write at this level.