After We Were Thrown into a Torturous Novel World, My Teammates and I Went on a Rampage

There is not much content to watch. If you look at it to the end, at best it sounds like a scumbag, but at worst it just means watching the protagonist bullying children. It's quite childlike. However, the structure of the quick game is good, and we can work hard on this aspect. It feels like these teammates have no sense of presence in the later stage. In fact, I know that writing a group show will be more difficult than a solo show, but there is no need to slow down the protagonist alone. Each character can have their own background "inner monologue", which can make the characters fuller and more emotional.

To be honest, it's interesting to get to the subject, and the plot description is also good. It is a subject that can easily attract traffic and attract people to watch. Except for the protagonist, the description of other characters is a bit thin. At the beginning, I was quite looking forward to how the author would grasp the multi-line parallel plot. After all, some readers really only try to read because of one plot line. What the author has to do is to use the plot line that the reader likes to hang on while guiding the reader to pay attention to more other lines. The result was a little disappointing... But the writing is really good! However, the excitement in the second half of the branch plot is not so good. The disgusting and obscene thoughts, or disgusting practices of some supporting characters are described in a large space in the front. In the end, the other party's ending is brought to the end in just a few sentences... I really hope to expand it or run it parallel to the main plot at the same time, or even cross it... Some of the pleasant exposures are actually a little, well... Not very pleasant. For example, for Mu Yan, I personally thought that there was so much foreshadowing to create a big scene, but in the end, it was still just a few hasty sentences, which was a bit confusing. At present, I have seen intermittently that several servant children deceive Mr. Hou and Mrs. Hou to frame the illegitimate child. Tell the truth yourself, two people who have been on the battlefield for so many years and have been in the officialdom, and who eat more salt than those slave children eat, can't they find out that the children are making up lies? Even if you write that the master and his wife found out that the child was lying, the illegitimate child went on a rampage and did not know how to refute. When he was deceived and framed, he became confused and stammered. Compared with that group of children, hey, after all, he still has blood in his family, but in the end he is no better than the children of a group of slaves. The master and his wife were even more disappointed with the illegitimate child. That's okay too. In short... These are some suggestions I gave to the author. It feels like the author is just starting out?? Some of the words and sentences are still very young, and there are a lot of repetitions, which makes the reading a bit unpleasant. But it's not bad written like this. If you don't have any big requirements and just read it as a purely entertaining article, it's worth your time.

This is the first time I read this kind of group time-travel story, and I was really amazed. I really like each person's single-line plot, and the rhythm is also very good. I really watched it and cherished it, and I was afraid that I couldn't find a meal replacement after reading it💕👍

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh> Why? Why? Why, after all, I finally saw this book I like? Why is it so short?

There are only 62 chapters now. I think it's pretty good and the writing is pretty good, but it has one biggest shortcoming, that is, there are often typos and sometimes missing words. But the overall story is good and the subject matter is quite novel. At least I have never seen such a setting. This article is good. Once it becomes popular, I will become a long-time fan [Please update] [Please update]

Yes, the subject matter is very novel. Although it is a quick travel show, it is rare for people to travel together and help each other. It is very good.

This poor language cannot describe the beauty of this book, so I pulled my friend over to read it~ [Read carefully]🤔😏 Big cheers for the author! Come on! Come on! 👍👍👍

Good-looking, super good-looking, and an eternal god who defies routine! It's just too little, not enough to watch.

Finally, the author has published a new book, and the writing style of this book is pretty good.

Author, what's wrong with you😢It's gone!!!