Liu Yuan, an otaku, travels naked through a parallel world. In order to survive, he enters the generated copies of various scenes under the arrangement of the system. Fight and fight in the dungeon, and spend your free time leisurely in the parallel world, playing around.
Reader comments
That woman in Chapter 21 is quite vicious
She was in a daze for no reason, and she was bumped into for no reason. It couldn't have been directly injured, right? Did she hit it with a car? [Laughing awkwardly]
Everything else is good, but in Chapter 21, when the main character is in trouble, it's a bit pretentious to leave the one who is sad for spring and autumn.
The author made a lot of typos and wrote less about love, love, love, and the impression is not good.
, The female characters are not well written, and the powerful power is not described in time, Kongjia
Thinking about writing without bringing the character into the role, thinking from someone else's perspective
If you don't know how to write emotional scenes, then don't write them.
When a person or a character only has 7 yuan left and still spends 4 yuan on cigarettes, you deserve two stars from me, smoker.
It's quite interesting, but the author had better read other system documents.
That woman in Chapter 21 is quite vicious She was in a daze for no reason, and she was bumped into for no reason. It couldn't have been directly injured, right? Did she hit it with a car? [Laughing awkwardly]
Everything else is good, but in Chapter 21, when the main character is in trouble, it's a bit pretentious to leave the one who is sad for spring and autumn. The author made a lot of typos and wrote less about love, love, love, and the impression is not good.
, The female characters are not well written, and the powerful power is not described in time, Kongjia Thinking about writing without bringing the character into the role, thinking from someone else's perspective
If you don't know how to write emotional scenes, then don't write them.
When a person or a character only has 7 yuan left and still spends 4 yuan on cigarettes, you deserve two stars from me, smoker.
It's quite interesting, but the author had better read other system documents.