(No system + fantasy + funny and relaxed + slow burning + group portrait)
Ye Liuyun traveled to the world of immortality. After confirming that he had no destiny, he originally wanted to live peacefully.
It turned out that his second junior sister was a daughter who had been secretly engaged for many years, his third junior brother was the childhood sweetheart of the Saint of Bihua Palace, and his younger junior brother's parents were both dead, and there was still a powerful force buried in his body.
And his master ran away at this critical stage. What's even more terrifying is, my God, why is the entire sect hiding its strength!
This article is relatively slow-moving. The master runs away around chapter 80, and the plot of the junior sister has not yet arrived. The protagonist is just an ordinary person who likes fast-paced and accidentally enters.
Reader comments
It's unremarkable yet natural. It's so well written. God!
Not bad, but a pity, come on.
How can I put it, the biggest highlight of this book is the protagonist, who perfectly runs through the sentence "Heehee covering Wei Junjie" [Funny JPG·] The plot is exciting, but the characterization is not enough. I believe it will be improved in subsequent writings.
To be precise, the plot is not slow, but the process of getting closer to the title is a bit long, probably because this has persuaded many people to turn away. It is undeniable that this is indeed a good book, and it is a pity for readers to tell this.
I can't stand it anymore. Although the writing was cumbersome at first, it still flows smoothly. Especially after Xuan Chengzi came back, this feeling became more obvious. For example, if two people enter the ring, just the two of them enter the ring. Most of the people watching the ring want to see you fight. There is no need for so many cumbersome physical and psychological descriptions.
New author, understandable. But if you feel pressured to write this novel, I suggest you take it easy first. I definitely had some expectations when I started writing, and the writing became smoother. Later on, I could clearly feel the author's pressure. Slow down, just relax
My suggestion is that you try to create a good image of the protagonist first. Don't bite off more than you can chew, take care of the protagonist first, and then slowly get involved with other characters. After all, it is still very difficult for newcomers to write serious group portraits.
That's it
Not bad, it's rare to see such refreshing senior writing.
I feel like there are many female protagonists, but don't, the author, pure love is invincible! [Cry][cry][cry]
It looks good, but it's gone. It's a pity.
After reading the part about Jiang Xin's rebirth, I couldn't help but comment.
I guess the author must have read a lot of novels before writing. Even if something is wrong, he wrote it carefully.
Every character's experience in the book is the protagonist in any book.
Interesting,
Great article, brother, very good
Not bad, but a pity
Real and objective multi-dimensional description with clear structure
It's interesting, I like it. Although five stars cannot be reached, I'll give it to you [I understand]
It's pretty good-looking, and I think it's OK
It's really good to read. The senior brother in it is really hard to be a good person. It's really interesting. You can come in and take a look. If you are short of books, finally, give the author a big boost.
Very good, very interesting
It's pretty good and interesting. It's a novel.
This sword sect continues to work hard
Okay, encourage me
If you still have patience
I hope the book doesn't get cold
This book is very well written
It's an encouragement point, right?
Cow, cow, brother, cow, see more
But the only drawback is that I don't know how realms are divided.
I still quite like this style
Please hurry up, author, how can you have three meals a day. I only had one meal and will update with the rest.
Come on, come on, come on, come on
I almost finished reading it before I realized that I had cut it and the author would come back and update it [smile]
It's pretty good, but I don't know why the data just doesn't work.
Looks good, but the ingredients are a bit complicated
It looks pretty good so far, and there are no major flaws.
It's unremarkable yet natural. It's so well written. God!
Not bad, but a pity, come on.
How can I put it, the biggest highlight of this book is the protagonist, who perfectly runs through the sentence "Heehee covering Wei Junjie" [Funny JPG·] The plot is exciting, but the characterization is not enough. I believe it will be improved in subsequent writings. To be precise, the plot is not slow, but the process of getting closer to the title is a bit long, probably because this has persuaded many people to turn away. It is undeniable that this is indeed a good book, and it is a pity for readers to tell this. I can't stand it anymore. Although the writing was cumbersome at first, it still flows smoothly. Especially after Xuan Chengzi came back, this feeling became more obvious. For example, if two people enter the ring, just the two of them enter the ring. Most of the people watching the ring want to see you fight. There is no need for so many cumbersome physical and psychological descriptions. New author, understandable. But if you feel pressured to write this novel, I suggest you take it easy first. I definitely had some expectations when I started writing, and the writing became smoother. Later on, I could clearly feel the author's pressure. Slow down, just relax My suggestion is that you try to create a good image of the protagonist first. Don't bite off more than you can chew, take care of the protagonist first, and then slowly get involved with other characters. After all, it is still very difficult for newcomers to write serious group portraits. That's it
Not bad, it's rare to see such refreshing senior writing.
I feel like there are many female protagonists, but don't, the author, pure love is invincible! [Cry][cry][cry]
It looks good, but it's gone. It's a pity.
After reading the part about Jiang Xin's rebirth, I couldn't help but comment. I guess the author must have read a lot of novels before writing. Even if something is wrong, he wrote it carefully. Every character's experience in the book is the protagonist in any book. Interesting,
Great article, brother, very good
Not bad, but a pity
Real and objective multi-dimensional description with clear structure
It's interesting, I like it. Although five stars cannot be reached, I'll give it to you [I understand]
It's pretty good-looking, and I think it's OK
It's really good to read. The senior brother in it is really hard to be a good person. It's really interesting. You can come in and take a look. If you are short of books, finally, give the author a big boost.
Very good, very interesting
It's pretty good and interesting. It's a novel.
This sword sect continues to work hard
Okay, encourage me
If you still have patience
I hope the book doesn't get cold
This book is very well written
It's an encouragement point, right?
Cow, cow, brother, cow, see more
But the only drawback is that I don't know how realms are divided.
I still quite like this style
Please hurry up, author, how can you have three meals a day. I only had one meal and will update with the rest.
Come on, come on, come on, come on
I almost finished reading it before I realized that I had cut it and the author would come back and update it [smile]
It's pretty good, but I don't know why the data just doesn't work.
Looks good, but the ingredients are a bit complicated
It looks pretty good so far, and there are no major flaws.