Comprehensive Comics**********

It is much better than most other comprehensive comics, and the emotional aspect is handled very well. Although it is in a semi-invincible state, there are no plots where unreasonable characters maliciously slap people in the face. It gives people a very comfortable and warm feeling. If there is a problem, it is whether the update can be faster. Sometimes I wonder if the author is going to run away.

Not bad. For amateur writing and playing, it is already very good. However, you can consider sewing less worlds. After all, the more worlds there are, the more heroines there are, and it is easy to be overwhelmed. There are also different types of worlds that are best not to be sewn in. For example, Ultraman, this thing is completely two world views, but it can be written as a copy world for the protagonist to experience and so on. The protagonist There is no need to write it perfectly. In addition to combat ability and money, other abilities such as cooking, painting, novels, etc. Can allow him to learn, progress and grow with the heroine. After all, childhood sweethearts making progress together is still very interesting. If you have a harem since you were young, you don't need to consider that there will be a Shura field when you grow up, [laughter]

Come up with an outline, otherwise you won't have a few big scenes, no passion, no love and hate, and you won't be able to drive. It's a bit difficult [eating melon] Why don't you go to a certain sound source to study boys' speed bumps to find inspiration [laughs]

The author is great, I think we can add Thor and Connor, as well as Chocolate and Vanilla to accompany Xiao Qiong. Xiao Qiong is always at home alone, so Thor can teach Xiao Qiong magic and protect her. Chocolate and Vanilla can also accompany Xiao Qiong. Come on, great author I hope the author can adopt it.

The writing is pretty good, but the author, please don't say that your writing is not good. There are some shortcomings that we didn't notice until you mentioned them. We found out that it affects the perception a bit. There are not many people writing in this type. As long as you write, someone will definitely read it. As long as you don't have problems with your three views, you can basically survive. Come on, author.

Come on, author, the writing is very nice, come on

The writing is pretty good, there are some magical modifications, but they don't have much impact. It reads quite smoothly. There are many characters appearing, so it is not recommended to add characters randomly. If there are too many characters, it will be difficult to grasp the plot. It's easy to overlook a character, or simply marginalize it as a passer-by. If there is no outline, you can follow some plot developments of the original work and see what changes will be brought about by adding the protagonist. Personally, I don't think there are any poisonous points. There may have been some in the past, but the author has revised them a lot.

Not bad, personally, I like it very much

Although the emotional scene is awkward, I can also tell that the author has put a lot of thought into it. Different people have different versions of Hamlet when they read the book. I will not comment on how good this book is. I can only say that the author should not be discouraged and keep working hard to lay the foundation for your next book. Come on, Oli! [Laughing][laughing][laughing][laughing][laughing][laughing][laughing] Don't worry about the results of continuous updates for your first book. When writing the plot, you have to polish it carefully and accumulate experience. Don't rush the work because of quick updates. You can't just write this one book, right?

Although the boundaries are blurred, I can really read it without thinking very much. Whether it is inserting or anything else, it is still a bit difficult for a novice novelist, but this is one of the few small articles that can be updated all the time. I support it very much. [Smile]

One of the few manga comics that I can watch. Although there are a lot of minor points, this is the first time the author is writing and I can understand it. It would be better if you could make an outline when you start the book. Also, it depends on the theme you want to write in. Don't add some off-topic worlds. For example, this book is more daily, but when you add Shinomiya Kaguya, I feel that it will not be more daily after that, but more passionate. After thinking about it, it seems to be a bit passionate after adding the Double Star Onmyoji [face covering]. How can I put it? In the fourth house, someone used surveillance to see the male protagonist. That person must be trying to get the male protagonist or the people around the male protagonist, so it is really poisonous in this daily variety manga (personal opinion)

It's good, but there are a lot of people of the same age who call the protagonist brother. Let's have some female protagonists call the protagonist brother, otherwise it would be a bit weird to call them all younger sisters [Chigua][Chigua]

Well, it's the first time I've written it. It's already very good. I give you four points. If you write a new book later, you can consider the details and integrate some similar worlds. If it's too outrageous, it will still give people the feeling of what I'm reading. In short, come on＾0＾~

This is the first time I've ever given a perfect score. It's okay. The author got my first full score. Just based on the chapter 220 you wrote, you nailed it. It's perfect. The writing is better than that written by an experienced writer. I highly recommend it. This book is good and the content is well written. To read this kind of comprehensive comics, you have to read this kind of daily stuff, right? Highly recommend this book, very good

Personally, I think the characters are a bit messy, but I still like this kind of thing. I really can't stand the kind of story that follows the plot. Finally, it would be great if Mahiru Shiina from Angel Next Door could be included. Come on author, I still like this book very much and hope to see the ending of this book [smile][smile][like]

The author should not feel too inferior. I think your writing is very good, and I am very surprised that there are red threads in it. But I hope to write about Thor from Kobayashi's Dragon Maid later, I like her very much

It's pretty good-looking, although the female characters are a bit outdated and easy to forget, but overall it looks pretty comfortable. But who are those Rin and Yuna? I really can't find these two people [face covering]

Although it's not well written, the characters in it are all my favorites. It's a good-looking novel and it costs money [crying] [crying], so please don't stop and keep updating. Although it's not pretty, I can't stand it. I like the characters in it.

Not bad. Although the author said there is no outline, it doesn't look messy. It's better than most comprehensive comics.

I saw the end of Chapter 72. If you, the author, want a five-star review, then I will give you one. Don't make it short. [Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss]

Not bad, you, such a good citizen

There is a paragraph in Chapter 12 that is very good, I like it very much😏

Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง, personally, it's pretty good, I'll work hard to get more updates [Like]

Although there were some pitfalls in the early stages, the author is making rapid progress. Overall, as long as you don't use your brain too seriously, it's a very good novel.

It's very good for newcomers. It can be written as two or three books. There are too many female protagonists and there are too few scenes for each person. I won't talk about the logic of mixing various superpowers with daily life. It has a strong sense of fragmentation. Although there is a setting of three wives and four concubines... I hope that the next book can specialize in one or a few, and it doesn't have to be about love. The daily life of the younger sister is also quite good.

Things like the end of the world can be written using copy volumes.

Personally, I think it's okay, but the author is not very confident. I don't comment because I can't find many faults. Plus, knowing that your abilities have limits, I'm more relaxed. But when will the five sisters appear? Long time no see. If possible, can you join some of Sword Art Online? After all, it is a very classic work. The author has added too many things. The theory is fine, but you can't take care of it.

It's been a while since I've seen a good review of "Double Stars: Onmyoji"

Author, can you please add spaces and spaces? @ Strange Yang Yuan

It's very interesting, so I hope the author will continue writing it [shy]