Don't Hit on Despairing Girls on the Rooftop

This book is a rare traditional Japanese novel written by Tomato. The writing style is very good, and although the emotions cannot be said to be perfect, they are relatively in place. The only problem is the occasional Internet buzzwords, which is not bad. Although the emergence of buzzwords in Riqing can give people a refreshing feeling, if the connection is not done well, it will be slightly abrupt. This is mainly because the frequency of occurrence is too low. Every time it suddenly appears when you forget it, you can cover it up by increasing the frequency appropriately. Overall it's pretty good. By the way, another point is that the plot is a bit too cliche. The plot is relatively simple, and you can see the secrets hidden behind it at a glance. I hope it can be more novel and anti-routine. Also, the rendering of the scenes and the names of each volume are really good and gorgeous, giving it an aesthetic feel!

On the road, I ran into Guo Qing, who was as strong as a monster and couldn't defeat him despite trying his best. (The ending is back, but I don't want to change it. I was too excited so I wrote it in a flattering way. I'm not a sailor. I swear that I will never draw Skadi and Bai Zi as the price of my mother. Just watch it and have fun. I'll give it a try by the way.) As a person who writes OCs, I felt a kind of crushing after reading it. The creative ideas, writing style, and character creation were all crushed. The only thing I can work hard on is the writing style. At least I have learned a little bit about it now. If you ask me, a light novel of this level is more than enough to be adapted into animation. It is at a high level among the novels I have seen (all major platforms, light novels in China and Japan, and niche ones for the general public). The smooth yet artistic writing style stands out among the rest, and the character creation and creativity are unique. The slightly fantasy level in the creation is well controlled, and the plot does not have the cliché feeling of various light novels that I have read. All characters have a set of inner core driving forces. OC people are already in admiration. This requires the author to have a high literary level and control over the characters, otherwise it will easily become flat. I dare to say that in the next at least three years, I will not see anything better than this. (Although I have read at least 20 to 30 light series and at least 200 online articles in the past three years). And the setting of this pocket watch is simply great. The four different volumes are all very good and perfect. I just can't think of it. The degree of this fantasy is very well controlled, and the foreshadowing is buried from beginning to end. The author has probably written at least one draft of this novel. If not, the serial draft is of this level... The author submitted this light novel to Japan. It is really amazing! I will definitely vote for it! And the last time I felt this way after reading it was my stay-at-home novel, Three Doomsday Questions, in 2016 (those who have read it must know the value of this film, and it is also a stay-at-home novel. The movies and TV shows I watched before were all things that the public said were not literary). I have to say that the opening section of Summer Flower is a bit cliched in light novels. In fact, this is nothing. Even though this volume is the worst written, it can be ranked in the top 30% of the light novels I have read, but it has a dismal performance because of it. It is a pity. How should I put it, I actually read a very light story-telling flavor from the author's writing style. Is it an illusion? When it comes to a literary work, apart from the writing style, there are also the feelings it gave me after reading it. There are many classics that I grew up with, such as David, Kafka (the work, the protagonist killed his father and violated his mother and sister, not the writer), Resurrection, Norwegian Forest, Rashomon, The Plague, Snow Country, Red Sorghum, Me and the Earth Of course, it may be too much to say that it is compared with these classics, but after reading this book, I feel the most profound, because this is what is missing in our era today - true love, desperate salvation, understanding between people, I can see it in this - it is still a light novel. Even among light novels (manga), among the novels such as Harmono, Green Pig, The Last Lost Dog, Onward Story, and daily romance novels, there are very few that are all masterpieces - the writing, plot, characters, creativity, and thinking are all excellent without any faults. The attitude adopted by the author is also commendable. It is about saving and changing, rather than surrendering and obeying. For example, the housekeeper of the Hiiragi family made me gnash my teeth when I saw it, and I felt angry on the spot. Here I name and criticize the weak character Tomozaki-kun. Do you like Japan's stressful social life so much? What Mr. Duhang said is so right, its success is only a commercial success. If the author can write in his own style without being moved by the readers, this will bring about literary success, although there is some controversy about how to achieve success. The above may be a bit over-interpreted. My classmates also read my OC the same way. Let me talk about the ending, "000 must be smiling in his sleep at this time." (I think so?) I really like this writing method. It uses a monologue to express the joy of 000 at this time, and This moment is used to emphasize the present, showing the difference between 000's past and present situations, expressing her current happiness and the author's best wishes for her, as well as the important role of entering the river in 000's life, and expressing the author's hope that all lovers in the world will eventually get married and everyone will be harmonious. Often animations or comics are good. The animations are good, such as 86 (The Non-Existent War Zone, not 86 Falling in Love with the Train, although I also like it), but its novels are relatively inferior. The comics are good, such as Douluo, the ancestor of our online novel, San Shao. There are very few excellent works that can be used as bases for adaptations. The second part of my Doomsday Questions novel, which I wrote at home, is no longer good. It also changed the heroine and should have been completed directly. But the animation is really good - it was ranked second among the cute kings in 2016 without being released on Bilibili! Even in Nook, there are very few good writers, such as Yuzu Ye Sheep, Lose, Key, etc., Chinese Bone Nail (House God), and the one who forgot the name of the studio but died of hunger, often the characters are poorly developed. However, my writing style is not creative enough (except for Hungry Death, Lao Zero's writing style is too horrible) (Yes, I'm talking about you! Without writing style, there is only the useless Yuzi Chef! Although my steam avatar is Cong Yu, Ciallo~(∠ω< )⌒★) Why do you feel like I'm flattering you? Why does it feel like my Sima's two-dimensional nature has been exposed? I won't be charged, right? Do you want me to go back to the beginning and stack armor now? As expected, let's talk about it after I finish writing. I hope the author can try to submit this novel to a publishing house. I believe the quality will not be a problem (but don't listen to the editor's words, you know the work best). If it is published, be sure to tell me. I will buy three copies, one for collection, one for reading, and one for preaching. So who will be the best heroine? It must be 000 (I want green plums falling from the sky)? Shenyue also deserves the title (she is so gentle and I like her so much), Hua is actually okay (I like her too), Xiahua is a bit reluctant (a popular girl on campus), what? Who is the fortune teller? What a bad tga joke. I really like this pure love ending and the if line. I'm looking forward to the next book. It doesn't matter if you have a harem. In short, as an OC person, with great admiration for the author's literary level, I filled these 2,000 words. Here, I will spend all my money to give my first Xiuer gift to the author. I have the utmost respect, sincerity and fear, and praise the times and the prosperity of the military. Sincerely. This is a casually written text. As I said before, the author has written at least one draft, which is probably good. According to my experience, if you have a good grasp of the novel, you will finish the first draft, change the plot and characters in the second draft, and optimize the third draft. I feel like the author should have reached three drafts before publishing the book. Comparing the original world line and the main text line, we can clearly see the plot development nodes of the novel. For example, Xia Hua is the rooftop persuader, and Shenyue is the stray whale. Just like the moon, different props, different choices, and different endings. There is also a sense of fate. Irie is destined to meet the Readers Association and Takeuchi, using the deaths of other female protagonists to reflect 0's happiness. That is, I exchanged them for my own happiness. Moreover, 0 will commit suicide repeatedly - it is not easy to organize a novel into nodes, because it is written by one person, which takes a lot of time. Another example is the title of the original world line chapter, which looks like a poem or an inner monologue. It can also be regarded as a vague development outline of the story. Very few people work on this aspect. It is not difficult to arrange a clue from beginning to end, but it is difficult to arrange it well, and it is even harder to fit the character. For example, Hua is a star. To make this clue and image appropriate, it requires repeated adjustments. I admire the author's efforts and intentions. Moreover, changing the character's name may seem like just a few words, but it actually involves the inner change of the character, the change in the relationship between the protagonists, and the opportunities involved. How this change is not abrupt, reasonable, and can withstand scrutiny requires a lot of ability. If I were asked to write about the encounter between Hua and my own OC protagonist with a bad character, it would probably be like this (you can compare it with Chapter 2, just change it in my own way): "Isn't it time to eat yet?" Her tone seemed a little soft and her voice lowered slightly, "I've been here for a while, and no one has called me to eat." The girl twirled a strand of hair near her face and swirled it skillfully. Then her strand of hair flew up, changing and dancing under the moonlight, leaving an intertwining of light and shadow. Soon, her swirling speed gradually slowed down, and she just stared at her slender fingers. "It's being cooked in the kitchen, it will take a while." I looked away in silence and looked in the direction of the banquet. I felt that she and I had said everything we needed to say, so I closed my mouth and stared at the slightly flashing neon lights in the distance. I wanted to capture their specific shapes under the scattered light, but I was interrupted by Minghua Hiiragi before I even started. "Really?" She stretched out her hand to me again, gently pinched a corner of my sleeve, and pulled it coquettishly, "Then I want to be with you, so that when someone comes to call you, you can take me back with you." "You can eat earlier if you go to the restaurant now." I protected my sleeves calmly, and at the same time I thought it was wise to ignore her situation. "No, adults' conversations are the most boring," she said, deftly avoiding my sleeve protection, "I would rather be hungry than sit alone in that situation." After grabbing my sleeve, she smiled at me triumphantly and pulled me towards her. "It doesn't matter, I didn't have a sweet dream after all," she held on to the railing and looked down, "and I should have woken up long ago." "For the sake of sweet dreams, sometimes it's better to fall asleep." "..." Silence. Hiiragi Minghua was silent after all. She just looked at me, and after a while she moved her gaze to Neon. "Viewed from above, even the faint lights in human eyes look like stars." "Stars?" She seemed to be really trying to see the lights as stars. "Do you also like to look down?" After a long time, she seemed to give up. "There's nothing to like or dislike." "Look down, just because there is something you care about there." I no longer looked at the lights, but turned to look at the noisy banquet. In comparison, this was very quiet and much more lonely. "Then why don't you look up?" She raised her head. The thick clouds tried to cover people's sight. The bright moon had no brightness, so the fireflies became starlight. Hiiragi Minghua's eyes were filled with dark clouds. "I don't like it." I shook my head. "It's too far in the sky and too cold, and it's hard to get light. It's too dazzling during the day. Besides, not only can't you get enough when you keep looking up, but your neck will get sore." Hiiragi Minghua looked back at me. "Wait a minute," the girl pulled me over excitedly, "Look, isn't there a star?" I followed her line of sight and with difficulty found a star from the corner of my eye. Stars that are fleeting and will be lost soon. "It is indeed a star." I unnaturally wanted to get rid of her pull on me, "but in the eyes of some people, your stars are far inferior to the knives and forks in their hands." As I said that, I looked in the direction of the banquet, which was as noisy as ever. My level hasn't deteriorated over the years, which is pretty good. So you can see the rich subtext and hints (I mean the author), whether it is stars or dreams. I modified it to suit my style. It can be seen that the author likes to do this as much as I do. I recommend the author to watch dramas, such as "Thunderstorm", which has rich subtext. It's just that I prefer to express the psychological changes of characters through their movements. When I was in high school, I dreamed about what the storyboards would look like if my OC were animated, so I thought of capturing movements. From different professional perspectives, writing can also make unique progress. In fact, I am better at writing psychological descriptions and the world observed by the protagonist. Because I am a dissociated person, and I especially like to analyze myself and others, so-called human observation. So I like Hua quite a lot because I feel the same way. If only I had the author's concentration and perseverance, the disastrous three years of high school left me in a bad state of mind. Now my thoughts have been disconnected, and it's hard to remember things from the past. Speaking of which, I remembered that I was always scolded at the end of my freshman year in high school, so I wrote a character. Her name is Fu, which means floating and sinking, and she is the representative of my nihilism. She is still in my wps. Although I haven't opened it for a long time, I always think of her. I remember that I only wrote more than 30,000 words about Disaster High School because of the reasons above. Fifteen thousand was scraped together, and what was left was a new hole that only started with a maximum of 2,000 words, and there was no way to start writing later. I was probably in my second year of high school. Based on my analysis of myself and my observations of my classmates, I wanted to write something that reflected society. Fu is the heroine. I hope that one day my state will allow me to finish writing. But now the structure has been solved thanks to the author. Although the outline has already been drawn up. I will definitely thank the author when I publish a book, although it may not happen that day.

It is very standard and very delicate. The only reason why Nikki is not popular is probably because in Tomato and the current Internet environment, there are fewer and fewer readers of light novels. Slow pace is a common problem with light novels, but in this slow pace it is better polished. If you like light novels, you should like this book. The only drawback is that there are too few updates.

The rating is low, it's really good to watch, the male and female protagonists redeem each other. The author writes the characters' images and emotional changes very delicately, and foreshadows Rin's every move and facial expression changes which are explained later. The author has definitely put a lot of thought into it, and the details are great, such as: the title of each chapter in the fourth volume is a paragraph, the chapter title of the first volume ""True Despair Girl" Kamigawa Natsuka" was only understood after reading the quotation marks, and some chapters even have 10,000 words in order to be the same in each volume. To me, this book is like a work of art and a time machine. It makes me feel like I was back in school when I encountered a book that I couldn't put down and couldn't bear to finish reading it. Looking forward to the author's next work, this book is very good!

It's very interesting. I particularly like the author's narrative style, especially the second volume. It would be even better if the author writes the book out of interest, because this way he won't be too influenced by others. I think a wonderful novel must have the author's own emotions and inspiration in addition to good writing. Of course, authors should listen to good advice.

I have finished reading it. Except for the content of the first volume, which feels a little immature, it gets better and better later on. Having read a lot of conspiracy theories, I thought a lot when I read the first volume, such as "It can't be Yumeng, it must be someone else." "This Miya is too good. The more she acts like a good person, the more problems she has." Bad people are bad people, and good people are really angels 🤦 [OK] The author's writing has improved significantly since the second volume. My favorite character, Senior, has a slightly messy ending. I personally don't like to read this kind of time review, but Qingmei Ying is indeed what everyone expects. You did a good job, author.

After reading it, I was really shocked beyond words to find such a high-quality book from Tomato. I read it from two accounts, so the reading time of this account will be shorter than others, but I did read it word for word (not a favor). This book gave me the idea to read it again, which is a feeling I have never had from other online books. (I will definitely read it again after I pass the college entrance examination. I am also looking forward to the author's new book. The main text, both in terms of foreshadowing and writing style, are top-notch, and even gave me the feeling of a stone door. At first, I thought that the first volume was not as well written as the other three volumes, but I no longer thought so after reading it. Although I have to admit that the author's writing skills are improving in each volume, the first volume laid a great foundation for the foreshadowing of this book and the advancement of the subsequent chapters. Not to mention the other three volumes, the writing is exquisite and the characters are full-bodied. After reading it, I really feel unsatisfied. The fourth volume can be said to be the most brain-burning part of the whole text. It not only fills in the previous pits, but also completes the world background. Especially when I saw the psychological hint that Long Yi gave me at the end not to call her "000" Rin, and when Wen Long Yi couldn't call her "Rin" without any confusion, I got goosebumps all over. There's so much to say about the plot, but I won't spoil it for anyone else who's just reading it. I have been recommending this novel to people around me since I first read it. I really hope more and more people can discover this good book! This is the first time I have written such a long book review, but ordinary words can no longer convey my joy and shock. I want to share it with more people and let everyone pay attention to this good book (it is a pity that typos cannot be corrected after the completion, otherwise this book will be even more perfect)

The book that I have been raising for a long time is finally being slaughtered today. After finishing it, I can only say that it is very good. Friends who want to see how to praise it should read the comments of other big guys. I also watched other friends who gave low stars. Some of them who watched it for less than 30 minutes thought the protagonist was a turtle man, but I didn't feel much about this (you're right). There were also some who thought the plot was classic and only listened to half of the classics. I don't think this is normal? After all, if it were all up to you how you wanted people to handle it, would you pretend to be stupid or refuse? Still agree? How can I write it down later? Of course these are just my humble opinions, so again, you are right. Finally, what I personally want to say to the author is: You damn well wrote it, just keep writing it like this, don't worry about other people, just enjoy yourself, your writing is so awesome, I'm so stupid.

The first volume is slightly lacking, the performance of the male protagonist, Kamikawa's love has some flaws when thinking about it. The quality of the second volume soars, the symbolism of the moon, and the white whale, the alarm clock reflects the closeness of the relationship between the two, the two-way redemption of Ikumi and Shirai, and when the male protagonist says "Leave the Shirai from 9 years ago", he is a real god. Finally, I hope that the author can write a small side story after the ending. After all, I am a little curious about how the male protagonist gets along with the redeemed female protagonists (laughter)

Full marks, only the description of the heroine's emotional change towards the hero in the first volume is not delicate and smooth enough, but it is very reasonable, so it is not a big problem. The highlight is that the author really wrote the plot with a beautiful feeling of destiny instead of making the readers feel that it is the author's big hand. Then I have read the second volume now. The first volume is quite satisfactory, but the narrative of the second volume really has a gorgeous beauty. A picture will always appear in my mind. The dark night sky is lit up by the stars, and the beautiful shrine maiden is attracted by the beluga whale swimming in the blue sea, enjoying this world. There are a lot of foreshadowings at the moment, but some of them are too deliberate. You can delete one or two and it will not be easy to play. After all, it is foreshadowing. Too many will become obvious 😳 In summary, I love it so far, and it's a perfect masterpiece. If the quality of the rest remains unchanged, in my opinion, it's completely capable of publishing a physical book.