When the snow fell on the rink railings on March 12, Lin Wan dug her nails deep into her palm. She had actually returned to this day. The System buzzed in her mind: “92 days until the rare disease takes hold (June 12). Physical functions repairing. Consciousness training space unlocked.”
In her previous life, that June diagnosis had left her bedridden for good. She had never even touched a pair of skates. Only in the consciousness missions before her death had she skated that competition on behalf of a figure skater.
In reality, she clung to the railing and tried to push off, falling until her elbow pads turned white. In the consciousness space, the stopwatch on the virtual rink ticked away as she studied the slow-motion breakdown of the 3Lz, etching “bend the knee to 130 degrees” into her muscles. The scraps of advice she had heard in her previous life became treasures: remembering “don’t let your weight shift to the right on a toe loop,” she fell hundreds of times in the consciousness space to get it right; recalling “sink into the waist during a spiral,” she practiced in front of a mirror until her lower back ached.
Her coach often called her “obsessed.” The rink was still frozen solid in March, yet she stayed from dawn until the lights went out, the ice on her knee pads melting and freezing again. No one knew that every extra set of jumps, every rotation she perfected in the consciousness space, was an effort to make up for her regrets and earn the chance to live again.
In the crisp scrape of her blades across the ice lay her secret: she wasn’t a prodigy. She just wanted to skate for herself, for real, at least once.
The writing is gentle and the pace is gentle. It has an earthy but reassuring flavor. It is recommended to add some climax points, otherwise the whole article will look like a narrative. In this way, the original intention of the story and world will be lost.
I saw Chapter 16, it was very touching
It's really good to watch. There are some minor flaws but they are not hidden. It uses mathematics to explain figure skating in a very novel way. The content is not bloody. It prefers to explain various scores and techniques in figure skating. After reading the following words, I feel that some ups and downs can be added appropriately. The lack of climax or conflict makes this book feel more like an expository essay or a diary. It is more difficult to read with concentration. In addition, the author uses more summary formulas. It feels like the method of writing an argumentative essay to summarize arguments has been adopted. This is just my personal suggestion. I feel that if I don't change it, the data may not be very good.