My Proficiency in the Doomsday Game

After reading it, the comment was that the author thought too much, which made it boring and unreadable. If you are a novice writing a book, you only need to be careful not to be addicted, and the plot should be roughly reasonable. You don't need to think about anything else, as long as it is enjoyable. Other things need to be considered only after you have written two or three books. The most important thing for a novice writing book is that there are always people reading it.

It looks good for now

One is good-looking, the other is good-looking.

The content is a bit dry but readable

It's pretty good for a newcomer to write like this. There are a few minor issues but it's innocuous. The outline is fine. Anyway, I quite like it.