Three Essentials for a Deserted Island: A System, a Dog, and Wood Mama

I'll check the reviews... You can't see the comments on the mobile phone right now. If you think there's something toxic, you can just @ me or comment directly to criticize me. But don't scold me for not accepting girls, then I might scold me back. After all, this book is not originally an article about accepting girls. Everything goes with the flow, and everything else can be discussed in a reasonable way. Well, those who scold me and those who want to leave suggestions can go to the book circle. I opened two posts...

It's good-looking, the world view is huge and novel, and the character of the protagonist is very suitable for me. All the adults and children in the family love it, and the kids next door are so greedy that they cry [sneaky laugh] [sneaky laugh]

The author himself cannot remember the rules he wrote! Okay, how did the protagonist survive after eating only potatoes, fish, and milk for the past few months? There was no life crystal before, so how could its body still be the same as a normal person? Moreover, the protagonist has not seen human beings for several months. How can he hold back when he sees a woman who has traveled from another world and has super powers without any legal restrictions? Nothing like an ordinary person's thoughts

Brother, the rest of your book is useless and the themes are mixed. Some readers have a strong sense of the boundaries of the themes and are unwilling to read it. From desert island survival to multi-world integration, the span of themes and styles is so drastic that it is difficult for anyone to accept this change. Let's start a new book. I'll read this book's early style and plug-in settings.

The surprise is not bad, but I still recommend changing the title of the book. After all, with the current development trend, it will not be about surviving on a desert island, but more like raising a civilization. In the future, there may be some racial wars and battles between "gods" and "gods". Another thing is to write down the protagonist's fighting ability and common fighting methods. Just like the battle with the fungus tribe, there is no real sense. I just saw the text, but I couldn't imagine the picture.

I would like to give you some advice. The author's previous plot was a bit too jumpy, causing readers to lose a lot of time. It has gotten better now, but it still needs to be improved. For example, the description of the City of Miracles is too little, and a big change has occurred just by looking at it. I think it is possible to write a small character and use his eyes to present the City of Miracles. By the way, write about some things that happened to him. This can not only describe the background, but also write one more character, which can make the whole book fuller. Of course, don't put the cart before the horse, just insert one or two occasionally. Personally, I feel that the main line is progressing too fast now, so I can slow it down appropriately and don't write too hastily. And because the protagonist upgrades too quickly, the entire power system is a bit vague, and can be completed by writing about subordinates. To sum up, I feel that this book was written too fast. The author should not be too anxious. The rapid leap in the early stage will lead to a large loss of readers. The characters and background can be enriched. Having said that, give me a five-star encouragement.

The first part is a bit interesting, but the second part is especially when I reflect on the fact that I have enough NT, and someone wants to kill the protagonist's family member. Then when the protagonist possessed his family members and wanted to kill those people, the family members were a little entangled in whether to kill them or not. Then the protagonist said that he wanted to kill them to eradicate the roots, and then they began to reflect on themselves. Why did I start to ignore life? What are you talking about?

Whether it is detailed description or general structure, this novel has no obvious flaws. Moreover, the plot is interesting and rich, and the protagonist's team style also tends to be cautious and joyful, without any disappointing elements.

It's a pity. It's not that I'm not writing well now. It's too fast, even faster than Zhang Mama's. The key is to take risks in the early stage. If the people coming from the metaworld suddenly disappear, what's the point of leaving two men and one woman? What's written here. You can infinitely resurrect and go on adventures. Wouldn't it be nice to leave three women behind and describe the beauty as starting a harem? What I am writing now, the content does not match the title of the novel. The three elements of survival on a desert island are dogs, birds and women, and all the other desert islands are gone. The key point is that the protagonist is a human being. In the novel, various intelligent races have knowledge, civilization and creativity. What is the difference between humans and other races? I think it is the seven emotions and six desires. Like Greek mythology, is that a god? More human than human

Creativity and stuff are okay, but. Did the author drink the fake wine and write it later? The perspective jumps so much. The first paragraph is talking about one world, and the next paragraph is another world. There is no explanation at all, and I can't understand which one it corresponds to. Written for yourself?