Rebirth**********

Is anyone really watching? I'm going crazy writing this on a standalone computer. Thank you very much for your patience in watching it. Because of the name, there is no spiritual energy recovery at the beginning, which makes everyone uncomfortable. It is my problem, and I would like to apologize to everyone! But I really don't want to give up this book, and I won't dare to do it again!

Serious suggestion: The sense of immersion in Reborn as a Snake is really bad. Few people click in to watch it, and even fewer people can stay. Let's reopen it. First, find some popular anime and write fan stories. It will be easier to come by than such original works, and more people will accept it. In addition, I scanned the entire book, and it was not smooth to read. The key scenes were not described enough, and the progress bar often jumped over at once. If you don't want to write down the parts in detail, explain them in a few sentences, and focus on the scenes you want to write about, with more details and less adjectives. The most important thing in an online article is to raise expectations. You are so lacking in this. For example, the title of your book talks about turning into a snake. You don't need to write about the reason for the change, because everyone who comes in knows it. You might as well write about the novelty of turning into a snake. In addition, it involves the recovery of spiritual energy. Then the recovery is at the beginning. Don't delay it so far. The focus is on raising expectations. Readers all know that becoming a snake requires revenge. What kind of novel revenge do you want to focus on? You are weak and were picked up by someone and then became a bubble. When the snake of wine was struggling, he heard that the wine was given to the enemy, so he planned to fake his death and assassinate. This way, it is more expected than a direct hard steel like you. Kill the enemy and then be found and hunted by foreigners. What he ate after being injured awakened the system, and then found that the system fragments were on the foreigners. Isn't this reasonable to chase after him? Then write about how difficult it is for a snake to go to a foreign country. On the way, you can also make animal friends, hunt for treasures, and be attracted by female snakes... There is more. My opinion after scanning it is a small support.

It's worth a read, the subject matter is novel, and the cover is really outrageous. I've never seen a snake in Tomato. The shortcomings are the author's introduction and pacing. The few chapters after the revival of spiritual energy are quite funny. To be honest, your introduction is not worthy of the cover. Overall, I have to work hard, the sense of immersion is relatively not that strong. Five-star support.

The content is quite good. Can the author include Chen Bowen? He was a good friend of mine and was cheated on by his girlfriend before. I hope the author will open a harem for him!

Let me give you a Samsung encouragement. The data panel starting from Chapter 2 was forced to quit when I saw Chapter 4. The data panel was shown to me 10 times in Chapter 3 and I was really speechless. Stop writing the plot and just write the data panel. The word count data panel in Chapter 3 accounts for one-third. It's weird that I can continue to read it.

It looks good. I hope Tomato can give me a recommendation, otherwise I'm afraid the author will be a eunuch.

Sorry! I can't say it doesn't look good, but I don't think it looks good either… Haha, maybe I don't like it, but I think I really don't know how to read it…

Not pretty::

Cool article, focusing on fun

When will you turn into a dragon?