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Lily Sese, the author specified that he has a side job Another book locked in a dark room

It sounds good and looks good. Come on come on!

Wow, it's so good, the author must not stop updating it. Otherwise, I have no choice but to kill the author.

It's a pretty good book, but there are a few chapters. Also, when I was reading the last three or four chapters, I suddenly thought of the difference between literary works and online articles. There are always some uneasy feelings that ordinary people can relate to in literary works, but most online articles only think about the beautiful paragraphs. I don't know how to describe this kind of uneasy mood. For many people, the uneasy mood may be the beauty they missed, the relatives who passed away, and the beauty that they failed to feel. For me, the uneasy mood feels more like the perpetrator who did not get the punishment he deserved. Well, actually, I'm here to make suggestions. Whether you adopt them or not depends on how the author feels. Firstly, to be honest, there are too many sugars that are the same, but there is a knife hidden in the sugar, and then I give you another candy and stab it twice with two knives. I really can't give up the feeling of being healed and depressed at the same time! ! ! . Of course, I'm not saying that I can't stand the character who wants him to die, I'm just saying that having a knife mixed in the candy can make people want it more (some people may not like it). It can be a close friend or someone who has helped the protagonist, but it shouldn't be a relative of a friend or something. It's best to be a friend or the person who helped (it's just a light spray, but I haven't eaten a knife in a long time, and knives are too common for the sake of knives) The second is the interpersonal relationship. I personally don't feel very good about harem stories. I can say that I have always been disgusted with harem stories, but it makes me feel good no matter how girls post about them. But it's just the progress of the heroine and other characters. The supporting characters are all up and down. The heroine is still kississ. From the long-term perspective of the plot, it's okay. But when is it exposed? How can it be written without collapse after the exposure? I hope the author can think about it carefully. The third one is commonplace, reminder! ! ! Even the donkeys in the production team dare not rest like this! The fourth one is the whole activity. This whole activity can be the whole life of the protagonist in the game or the whole life of a comic exhibition or something. However, it is not recommended to have too many scenes in the comic exhibition. After all, how can there be so many comic exhibitions that hold activities continuously in a small area in a short period of time? , So the game can be more complete. Anyway, I have watched a lot of videos about Apex and Eternal Calamity and Tarkov's gameplay. My suggestion is to take a look at the game content you want to write and then make it less abrupt before writing it into the novel. It's almost 900 words. I've never written that many words in any subject I'm writing. Anyway, let me make it clear that I am not a slanderer or a slanderer, but a reader wants to complain after reading it. If the author sees that he wants to adopt it, I will be very happy and it will not be a big problem if he does not adopt it. Just read the book as usual. And if you want to bully me, then I will acquiesce, ah, yes, yes, ah, just show off. You have to ask me why I say this?

It's okay, it's pretty

Not bad, not bad, very punishing

This author may have a side job [laughing] [laughing]. Can the author share some "game" resources? I have a friend who wants it. I'm waiting online. Urgent [cool]

It's very beautiful. After the protagonist turned into a beautiful girl, she did something that my gender has never been able to do. I touched the thigh of the cosplay girl at the comic exhibition. It was really awesome, wasn't it? ! ! ! May the flawless people love and bless their bodies, and grant the return of the "true self" [How can it be cultivated! Can't post pictures! ! ! ]

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking [top post]

How many heroines are there?

Really six, very delicious

Super super super super good looking

It's beautiful, come on, come on＾0＾~

W is really good

Dapeng rises with the wind in one day and soars ninety thousand miles away

Found another novel I like

I feel like the author, you have a side job, or this is a side job [Thinking]

Very beautiful, very beautiful Is there too many female protagonists?

It's very beautiful, please increase your intensity, I want to see girls posting [laughing]

Chapter 16: That senior's clothes?

How many yanderes are there [laughing evilly] I found this book through a search. There are many recommended books but I don't want to read them [crazy]

Those who have an empty destiny come here to take a look and leave a five-star

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. Love it.

Very good-looking and to my liking

It's pretty good, good luck to the author

It's very beautiful. I hope it can be updated until they get married. By the way, send me some wedding candies [cool][cool][cool]

I've read a few chapters. The beginning is very cliche, but I like it very much. I would also like to give some advice to the author. Don't write too many things that imply x. It's easy to get banned [Blow kiss]

Really good, I drive it often

Report of hating birth

Not bad, not bad, I like it. Is this considered a harem?