Xu Feng had just opened Back to the Future 1999, which had just launched. When he clicked on the game, a dazzling white light flashed by.
Xu Feng opened his eyes again, and Sonnet stood in front of his bed.
There was a stinging pain in his right hand, and the Nixie tube had been embedded into Xu Feng's right hand.
"Ahhh! Why am I forced to be Si Chen!"
Vertin held Xu Feng's hand.
"Hello! Nice to meet you, masculine me."
Reader comments
To be honest, I shouldn't be reading fan fiction at this time when the server has just been launched.
At your speed, the main plot will be finished in no time.
As Tomato's first Back to the Future book, the author tried his best to fit each character's character in the game without any image collapse (at least not now, and hopefully never). If the author can keep going, I can only say, Thai pants are hot!
The plot is innovative, the main plot is taking off quickly, and the author is quickly adding his own things. So far, it seems to be okay, and there is no breakdown or broken settings. The only fly in the ointment is that the characters' reactions and the scenes at that time are all based on my own imagination. I hope the original colleagues are still there, and the author works hard.
The first person to try something new, he used a novel writing style to generate fan articles. Although the plot was a bit fast, it satisfied the desire of most players for Snyder to survive. Secondly, the author does not describe the characters much, making it difficult for readers to have a sense of involvement. I hope the author can revise it well. The new book is easy to revise.
Come on
What I want to say is: the author pushed the plot too quickly, and did not describe the characters in any detail. He relied on his own imagination to figure out the expressions and emotions. The heroine is not known yet, but the author is the first person who dares to eat mushrooms. Five stars for his support.
So far I have only read the first few chapters, which are quite well written. I'm not very good at compliments so allow me to jump right to the advice. I'm also not very good at speaking and creating a friendly tone so please forgive me.
Emphasis: Although I have a lot of suggestions, it is only because I am worried that the explanation is not good, not because the book or the author is not good.
I suggest writing more about the protagonist instead of just the plot, because many people here know the plot, and the current form is basically to directly copy all the lines from the game. You can write the plot for people who don't know the plot of 1999, but it's best not to just write the lines of the characters, because the game also has tone, graphics, music, and some other descriptions, so people who haven't played 1999 may be confused and have no sense of the picture. The first chapter is relatively well written, but the style changes in the second half of the third chapter and the fourth chapter, becoming "role: lines", tending to retell the story or the content of the script. Compared with other stories, novels can only be expressed in words, so strong description is needed to show the same visual sense. However, the advantage is that readers can add their own understanding and imagination on the basis of words, making well-described novels even more exciting than games.
In addition, the author can describe the characters more, because some people come in and don't know what the characters look like and what their personalities are like. Also, maybe it's because I didn't watch the back part, because the protagonist's role was a bit less. You can summarize the plot in a few places and add details that the protagonist noticed to complete the scene.
Summary: It is recommended to add some screen descriptions, character descriptions, and plot summaries. What I see now is a bit dependent on the player's own understanding of the characters and the scene.
I'm not an author and don't know the difficulties of writing, so feel free to ignore my advice if it seems a bit overwhelming. I'm just giving some suggestions based on my thoughts. No offense intended. Thank you for reading such a long paragraph of mine (I just checked the time and found that I spent more than half an hour typing on my mobile phone, which may be longer than the time it took me to read this novel...)
It's easy to say whether Snyder dies or not.
Good book, but has an ominous feeling
The plot is mostly the same as the game
But it's good that Snyder is still alive.
I don't know what to say, but I'll just encourage you. [Eat melon]
Tomato's first book, thumbs up
Those who have courage and dare to write leek fans
Whatever, give it some encouragement.
The first few chapters are very good.
The writing is good, but the protagonist's combat power is a bit unstable. I hope he can have his own abilities.
I like Vertin [Admiration] I hope the author can continue to work hard [laughs]
Emmm, is there a female protagonist in this book? I can't see it now [face covering]
Didn't Vertin and his group come from the future?
Very good, but the plot is too fast
Come on, great author
Generally speaking, the writing is quite good. As the first person to eat crabs, it has brought a lot of inspiration to future generations.
To be honest, I shouldn't be reading fan fiction at this time when the server has just been launched.
At your speed, the main plot will be finished in no time.
As Tomato's first Back to the Future book, the author tried his best to fit each character's character in the game without any image collapse (at least not now, and hopefully never). If the author can keep going, I can only say, Thai pants are hot!
The plot is innovative, the main plot is taking off quickly, and the author is quickly adding his own things. So far, it seems to be okay, and there is no breakdown or broken settings. The only fly in the ointment is that the characters' reactions and the scenes at that time are all based on my own imagination. I hope the original colleagues are still there, and the author works hard.
The first person to try something new, he used a novel writing style to generate fan articles. Although the plot was a bit fast, it satisfied the desire of most players for Snyder to survive. Secondly, the author does not describe the characters much, making it difficult for readers to have a sense of involvement. I hope the author can revise it well. The new book is easy to revise. Come on
What I want to say is: the author pushed the plot too quickly, and did not describe the characters in any detail. He relied on his own imagination to figure out the expressions and emotions. The heroine is not known yet, but the author is the first person who dares to eat mushrooms. Five stars for his support.
So far I have only read the first few chapters, which are quite well written. I'm not very good at compliments so allow me to jump right to the advice. I'm also not very good at speaking and creating a friendly tone so please forgive me. Emphasis: Although I have a lot of suggestions, it is only because I am worried that the explanation is not good, not because the book or the author is not good. I suggest writing more about the protagonist instead of just the plot, because many people here know the plot, and the current form is basically to directly copy all the lines from the game. You can write the plot for people who don't know the plot of 1999, but it's best not to just write the lines of the characters, because the game also has tone, graphics, music, and some other descriptions, so people who haven't played 1999 may be confused and have no sense of the picture. The first chapter is relatively well written, but the style changes in the second half of the third chapter and the fourth chapter, becoming "role: lines", tending to retell the story or the content of the script. Compared with other stories, novels can only be expressed in words, so strong description is needed to show the same visual sense. However, the advantage is that readers can add their own understanding and imagination on the basis of words, making well-described novels even more exciting than games. In addition, the author can describe the characters more, because some people come in and don't know what the characters look like and what their personalities are like. Also, maybe it's because I didn't watch the back part, because the protagonist's role was a bit less. You can summarize the plot in a few places and add details that the protagonist noticed to complete the scene. Summary: It is recommended to add some screen descriptions, character descriptions, and plot summaries. What I see now is a bit dependent on the player's own understanding of the characters and the scene. I'm not an author and don't know the difficulties of writing, so feel free to ignore my advice if it seems a bit overwhelming. I'm just giving some suggestions based on my thoughts. No offense intended. Thank you for reading such a long paragraph of mine (I just checked the time and found that I spent more than half an hour typing on my mobile phone, which may be longer than the time it took me to read this novel...)
It's easy to say whether Snyder dies or not.
Good book, but has an ominous feeling
The plot is mostly the same as the game But it's good that Snyder is still alive.
I don't know what to say, but I'll just encourage you. [Eat melon]
Tomato's first book, thumbs up
Those who have courage and dare to write leek fans
Whatever, give it some encouragement.
The first few chapters are very good.
The writing is good, but the protagonist's combat power is a bit unstable. I hope he can have his own abilities.
I like Vertin [Admiration] I hope the author can continue to work hard [laughs]
Emmm, is there a female protagonist in this book? I can't see it now [face covering]
Didn't Vertin and his group come from the future?
Very good, but the plot is too fast
Come on, great author
Generally speaking, the writing is quite good. As the first person to eat crabs, it has brought a lot of inspiration to future generations.