Star Dome Railway: When I Become Siren

Four stars are all given for the theme and setting, and I can only give one star for the plot. How is the character of the protagonist set? Why is the plot arrangement so wonderful? In fact, some places can be omitted, and some places can be written more. The plot can not be advanced entirely around the protagonist. Write about other behind-the-scenes roles in more detail. The real-life plot I saw was the one that took off. Let's just say that the core of Herrscher shouldn't have a queen. The protagonist is connected to Honkai. It's not too much to have a Honkai protagonist. Isn't it awkward to have a male body and a female character? Let's just say, isn't it awkward when you write it? The description of the protagonist's sister is good. It can be seen that the author can write a character well, and it is an original character, which makes readers feel more comfortable. In the early stages of the book, try to avoid some strange plots as much as possible. You can bring the perspective into the reader's perspective, think about it from another person's perspective, and review the content you have written. Of course, there are not many words at the moment, otherwise I would just skip ahead. In short, when writing a book on Tomato, I am just a subjective personal opinion. Generally speaking, I hope the author can write better. After all, there are a lot of books, and there are no good books. The subject matter is not bad, and the setting is also good. I really hope that the writing can be better. Come on, author.

I hope that the protagonist will be corrupted and only protect his loved ones. What does the life and death of other people have to do with the protagonist? Hahahahahahaha Honkai Honkai destroys it.

The work is very good, come on, it is a book with great potential. Come on, author, this book will definitely become popular. It feels uncomfortable to look at me. I felt very comfortable watching his sister, but the protagonist was too restrained.

It's not as unbearable as the reviews say, it's just that the protagonist has the mentality of an ordinary person. He has gained power and wants to save the world. The world is getting more and more chaotic and he doesn't know what to do. On a certain level, it is very real. It is true that some places are quite contradictory. The previous text does not match the following text and is self-contradictory, but it is not harmful. Overall, the logic is self-consistent and it is a good book.

I believe you can write better. You can write a lot on this subject.

What can I say about this book? The protagonist is too indecisive and has a strong sense of justice. Well, I have to say here that I don't know what special meaning the author intentionally emphasizes on the issue of 18 years old. In fact, in this era of information explosion, 18-year-olds may not necessarily have a strong sense of justice. The things on the Internet are really mixed, especially for people born two thousand years later. The desire to be recognized should be around 12 to 15 years old. In fact, regardless of these things, this book is still okay, but the ending seems quite rushed. I always feel that the author still has a lot of holes to fill in. My idea is that the author will never go for the ending of a big dream, at least not at the beginning. If I could, I would give this book 90 points, four and a half stars. I hope the author can work hard!

I think if this continues, both sides will be destroyed. A little frustrated

It's a very good book, but I think Honkai's combat power is a bit low. Theoretically, Honkai depends on the strength of civilization. The stronger the civilization, the stronger Honkai. The destiny of Star God can be seen as an energy system, so it can also be seen as a civilization. Moreover, Honkai was born between the Tree of Void and the Quantum Sea, and Star God is just at the top of the Tree of Void, so I personally think Honkai should be stronger than Star God.

It's not particularly good-looking, and the protagonist's character is hard to describe in one sentence, but the subject matter the author writes about is quite good. It looks so frustrating

Can you stop being a nanny?

It's not bad, it's just uncomfortable to watch for other people. Maybe you don't want to write cool articles per se Contradiction is portrayed, good

The subject matter is very new, but the author is not diligent. Why does it feel like it's getting worse and worse? The main character's character is to save the world from beginning to end. It feels weird.

The work is very interesting, but the character of the protagonist is a bit awkward.

I look forward to seeing the destruction of humanity one day

Bronia's genes, well, Kaslana's genes are similar or opposite. My appearance is silver hair and silver eyes. Very similar, hey, I'm talking about the one in Beng Er. That is Niat's genes plus the genes of the Herrscher of the Sky that we have seen. When the three types of elites work together to dominate, Bronia is in a dominant position. Genes can be born, haha, good guy. Polonia completely has her own brain, but she's a bit too big-brained. Polonia has her own sister. Our Banya must have a sister, and later it was a Banya Herrscher version of Shaniyat or can you do it? Do you dare to sit down? Do you dare? Just sit down. Author, do you dare?

The writing is better than other novels I have read. Don't break the chapter.

I don't know how to rate it. It's very comfortable to watch. It's a bit regretful that the ending is hasty... It's a good story.

I have an idea, what will happen if the protagonist's sister is killed by a human [Thinking]

The protagonist's soul passes through and Xilin becomes one. The protagonist's soul can travel back and forth between the three worlds and the Blue Star, and the world-splitting monsters in the Star Dome Railway invade the Blue Star. Very new subject matter. (I haven't found anything like this anyway) But this book was sent. The author is no longer updated.

Just write it carefully and don't send it.

A very nice book.

You can work hard on writing

Well written (The Queen is proud)

Come on, I'm a bit confused as to what this timeline is [Chigua][Chigua]

Try to improve your rating

I gave this score for Xilin.

It would be better if they could meet the train crew, but the silver wolf has appeared before, so it should be okay. I just hope that both Sirins can have a bright future.

What the protagonist did made me feel aggrieved, but it was well written and I hope it can change the protagonist's character.

Author, please don't stop updating! Do you dare to tell me that there are 10,000 aha crawling on my body😭😭

As the title says, it definitely looks good.