Apocalypse: A Red Alert System from the Start

I hope you all will support me! I know there is something wrong with my book, but no readers have pointed it out to me. I really want to know where my problem lies? If readers of my book read the problems in my book, they can speak out boldly. If there are mistakes, they must be corrected. Otherwise, they will not be able to grow. I hope everyone will criticize me.

I think it's okay. It would be better if I could revise it and delete or change the bad parts. It seems like I'm a newbie, so I'll give the author a five-star rating.