I Read a Novel About Cultivating Immortals and Ended up Becoming the Male Protagonist's Younger Brother.

I hope the author can add a love line at the end (for two male protagonists) [smile][smile]

It looks good. The author should give it a try and make more updates [laughing evilly] [laughing evilly]

It's so beautiful, I hope the author will work hard! ! !

I can't say that the character of the protagonist is okay, but it is still within the acceptable range for me. The sentences in the article made me feel like I was forced to choke when I stopped mid-sentence (especially in the early stages, which was more frequent). And sometimes I felt that some words were not appropriate. The protagonist grew up slowly, and it felt like the book would be very long? (It makes no difference to me whether it's fast or slow. I'm just worried that the author is half-finished or even doesn't want to write it.) Currently, there is very little description of the protagonist's spiritual practice. In my opinion, the writing style is quite decent and not too naive. Generally speaking, it is quite satisfactory and there is still a lot of room for improvement. If I don't step on my fault (very few books will step on it, after all, I will pick it first when I read a book. The first time I stepped on my fault was Chi Feichi's [crying]), if nothing else, I will follow this book to the end.

It looks good, but she feels a bit suffocated because she is always compared to her brother. And the people in that college don't want the protagonist to come to their college, for fear of affecting the protagonist's brother.

Sorry, I very much support this orthopedic pair, even though it is without cp [face covering] [face covering] I look forward to the male protagonist dressing up as a woman to meet his brother

[Laughs] The plot is great, I'm looking forward to it. (Why do you add commas where commas don't need to be added? And those at the end of sentences, ah, ah, boys, ah, hey, it's a bit crazy [thinking])

I thought of something, whoever the protagonist marries is a fanfic. For example, if you marry a boy, right, then you have two male protagonists. If you marry a girl. That's two heroines. Because his soul is a girl, and his body is a boy. [Make faces]

I think it's generally good, but is Zhao Yunting's character a bit too simple? Even if he lives in modern times, he is not so simple. He is an adult. Nowadays, China's human society is more terrifying. And he behaves in the novel as if he is not secretive about the world.

If you like the author who is a fan, please give me more updates, this book is really great! This is my type. If the male protagonist is gentler, he should be gentler. I like this kind of elegant man~

I really like the relationship between brothers. Ao Lie's unstable character will be brought back bit by bit by Yunting in the future, right? Who else is a bully? He is too straight-tempered, always speaks out of his mind, and easily suffers big losses. Let Yunting help him correct it.

It's good-looking, but there's nothing wrong with liking good-looking clothes and jewelry, but I personally think that liking women's clothing is a poisonous point.

I like it very much. Everyone has their own ideas. Friendships between friends need to be maintained (someone finally wrote this). Interests cannot be lost. The direction is unexpected. The CP will be crazy, but there is no CP! Don't get me wrong. Recently, I asked the author to write a cp extra. Hahahahahahahahahahahahahaha (˵¯͒¯͒˵) It's not a brainless cool thing! Except for talent, everything else is obtained through hard work ᕙ(`▿´)ᕗI'm really attracted to it

The early writing is very childish! I hope I can go back and revise it later, otherwise impatient readers will be directly discouraged. The plot is good. The more I read, the more I became obsessed with it. I just ignored some minor flaws. I really love this kind of family-oriented double male protagonist. I really hope that the two protagonists will have no C P. I haven't found the next book to read yet. I have been reading it over and over again in the past two days to see if it has been updated. Please update the author soon. Give me a five-star encouragement so-so-huhu I read some comments saying that some people think the protagonist is too weak. I think this is good. This is the highlight of this book! It's not just that the protagonist is the most awesome when you first come up, there are all kinds of tricks and cheats, and all of them revolve around the protagonist to make it a good book. He grows up bit by bit until he is on par with his brother. The two of them can work together to uphold justice and protect the family. This is the best path.

Come on! The writing style of this book is actually a bit indecisive. I am a person who likes this style very much, but there are also people who are particularly attracted to this style. I plan to pick it up and skip to read the following fragments. And, to be precise, I hope it won't end unfinished! Come on, come on, come on, author, come on, Ollie [cool] [cool] [cool]

Aren't you afraid that the identity of the time traveler will be exposed and a thousand arrows will pierce your heart? Although this is impossible, I think your question is too modern for a business boss [Petrochemical]

A very beautiful and creative book. It is completely different from the ordinary routines. It is an alternative book with a story [shy]

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Maybe I have read too many novels about cultivating immortals. At present, it seems that the author's writing style is still a bit immature, especially the dialogues between the characters. There is a lot of nonsense. Some words may be better if they are more concise. After all, dialogue reflects the character's personality very well. The author's writing style was a bit childish when writing the dialogue, which made me feel that the protagonist's character was a bit surprising, and even felt a bit not very smart. But the plot is very good, thank you to the author! Looking forward to better works

Although the article is a bit stiff, the plot and character descriptions are very vivid. I wonder if you can be more careful when depicting the changes in the characters' mentality, so as to give people a very casual feeling.

The book is getting better and better, and the writing and description are also very good. The only drawback is that it is a bit slower [face covering] [face covering] I hope to speed up the coding speed [ Eat Melon ] [ Eat Melon ] [ Eat Melon ]

The overall appearance is good-looking, with clear logic and distinct characters. However, the expression of two fights is not good enough (one is with Liu Yao, and the other is Ao Lie and Guniu). It just gives me the feeling that the protagonist is a bit too kind. However, ignoring this problem, the others are pretty good. Then, apart from the expression, I have to praise the author. You are really active. You are replying to the paragraph comments. I originally just saved it on the bookshelf and left a claw in the first paragraph. Later, I found that the author actually replied to me. I was still quite shocked. So I came to read this book. It is a really good book. Apart from the shortcomings I mentioned earlier, the protagonist of this book has a very good personality. He is the kind of gentle and kind. His psychological activities are very rich and funny, hahaha. I like this book very much. Unlike some novels where the protagonist is decisive and decisive (I am not saying that other protagonists are bad, I am just making a comparison, there are no bad remarks or opinions). I like the growth-oriented protagonist [shy][shy]

The author is great, I really like the plot [Sending my heart][Sending my heart]

I really like reading it, and I would like more of my brother's role. If there are two perspectives, my heart will be biased, or it just doesn't work. The author marked both the brother's perspective and the younger brother's perspective, and only read one of them, otherwise it may be a bit uncomfortable [grievance] Overall, this book is still very good [laughing]

It looks good, it looks good, but Ao Lie is a deep-minded person, and he is a little worried about Yunting. I actually think that the three of them are a good group. I hope they can understand each other better. The author will give it a boost and update it.

Come on, come on, come on, come on, come on, come on, come on, come on, come on

Great author! ! ! ! I like you so much! ! ! (Healthy and moderately crawling) (actively wriggling) (sunny squirming) (healthy and moderately crawling) (frontal, upward) (healthy and moderately crawling) (healthy and moderately crawling) (healthy and moderately crawling) (wriggling)

Yeah, Gaga looks good and smells good The author will update it soon. I finally found what I like [send heart]

Big cheers for the author [Like][Like] Waiting for your updates every day is a bit painful

The writing style in the early stage is a bit immature, and there are also inexplicable sentence breaks. The plot flows smoothly, but the timeline and pronouns are a bit confusing, but it does not affect the reading very much. But the author is a person who listens to advice. If he continues to practice like this, he will have a bright future. Overall, I give it four stars and hope the author will continue to work hard!