I Really Never Meant to Be a Jerk

This is my first book, and I am not very satisfied with it myself. I didn't do enough homework because I wrote this novel on a whim at the beginning. Whether it is the plot rhythm or the character creation, I have explored it myself. Please bear with me if I have many mistakes. I will try my best to write better. I am not qualified to ask readers to accompany me in growing up, but there are indeed many people who are willing to read my books, and I am very happy. I will not let down everyone who has grown up with me. Many people say that I have many typos. In fact, because I don't have enough time, I can't find the time to check them, but I will still try my best to improve them. Finally, give yourself a three-star rating. It's too high and I don't deserve it. Three stars can be considered an encouragement to myself.

Well, the author, well, although I have never written a novel, I can explain the novel in a little more detail. Otherwise, it would always be summarized in just a few sentences. It would be quite uncomfortable to read the novel like this. I think it can be more descriptive of the environment and the story of the novel. Well, the inner psychological activities of the corner are slightly better this way, and the number of words is larger. Although I can understand what you are writing, some sentences may not be so beautiful or coherent, so um, I hope the author can work a little harder on this aspect, um, come on Well, to be honest, the author, although I know you have just opened a new book and are a new author, I can give you some suggestions. First of all, the first emotional line should not be so confusing and complicated. Secondly, when you describe a person or the plot between a heroine and the protagonist, you should describe it carefully. Second, what you write is too cumbersome and noisy, and people will already know that it is very incoherent or not fluent just by looking at it. This is a logical problem, which can only be checked by yourself, or to improve your writing style. Third, your various renderings are not enough. The rendering of the environment and the description of the character's personality are not perfect without language. Fourth, your description of the protagonist's line is too poor. It is difficult to distinguish the importance of writing and ink. You even have more emphasis on supporting characters than on the protagonist. This makes your article top-heavy and the logic is very confusing. Fifth, after reading it, I can only say that it is particularly poisonous, because you have touched upon one of the biggest characteristics of this type of novels, which is that harem novels are generally relatively pure, rather than messy like yours. Generally speaking, it is difficult for a new author to write this kind of book. I suggest you write a book with a single female protagonist first to practice. Don't be too high-minded and low-key. Then, I hope you will read more Chinese and foreign famous works and analyze your own writing style. I suggest you read authors such as Fenghuo and Tiancan. Well, I also hope that you can write better in the future.

What should I say, the emotional line is a bit too long, the main character stands out and the female main character is yandere and is criticized like crazy, and will the male main character accept the female main character and start a harem? It seems that it is not good to choose Mu or Liu alone, after all, the male protagonist and Mu are both [laughing]. If Liu is chosen alone, I feel a little sorry for Mu. I suggest the author write about Mu's psychological changes to make it easier for us to accept. If it doesn't work, just foreshadow the pregnancy in the front and let the male protagonist accept it. Let's keep the little Mu in the two-parter. This is the plot that I can accept now. The author's writing is pretty good, come on, please consider my suggestions. I think readers can accept them all. There is another heroine. After all, other readers are scolding you. I am the only one who thinks your writing is quite good.

This is a piece of coke, brothers, avoid the pit

Forget it if you want a harem, why do you want other people to play with the rest? It disgusts me to death.

Support the author, come on

Sick, sick, dead, super boiling sheep, no matter how licking they are, whoever sees it will be unlucky. Who would have thought that the system would actually force the male protagonist to get back together with his ex-girlfriend and break up. They gave in without saying a few words without a sense of boundaries. One heart is really too much!!

I know it's not easy for you, but I really don't recommend that a novice write such a complicated plot line. It's too messy. If it's written well, it's okay. If it's not written well, it will just be a rundown. It looks really uncomfortable.

I just want to know if the beginning is the ending? 🤔 Then I was curious about how the author made readers accept Mu? Of course I didn't finish reading it. But I'm still curious. After all, the heroine is quite shocking.

It's a good yandere novel, with a happy ending, and the writing is okay, but the plot connection is a bit poor. I never get tired of reading the plot of Qingmei chasing her husband and turning into a yandere [laughing]. Maybe it's because I'm a bit chauvinistic, and I don't really like Liu's doting on the male protagonist. The writing is a bit like a little naughty girl.