(All members are yandere ➕ Husband-chasing crematorium ➕ Multiple reversals ➕ High-IQ male protagonist ➕ High sugar polysaccharide ➕ Qingmei abuses the male protagonist, big sister's redemption)
(The male protagonist does not rely on his looks, but if he is a yandere just because he is good-looking, I think it is pure nonsense. There is a reason to love someone. If you like someone just because of his looks, it is not love. I hope that those who are not good-looking can also be liked by yandere)
Do you treat my love as child's play? So good! I will love everyone except you!
(The new author is studying hard, and I will encourage you to adopt any suggestions you make!)
Reader comments
Well, the author, well, although I have never written a novel, I can explain the novel in a little more detail. Otherwise, it would always be summarized in just a few sentences. It would be quite uncomfortable to read the novel like this. I think it can be more descriptive of the environment and the story of the novel. Well, the inner psychological activities of the corner are slightly better this way, and the number of words is larger. Although I can understand what you are writing, some sentences may not be so beautiful or coherent, so um, I hope the author can work a little harder on this aspect, um, come on
Well, to be honest, the author, although I know you have just opened a new book and are a new author, I can give you some suggestions.
First of all, the first emotional line should not be so confusing and complicated. Secondly, when you describe a person or the plot between a heroine and the protagonist, you should describe it carefully.
Second, what you write is too cumbersome and noisy, and people will already know that it is very incoherent or not fluent just by looking at it. This is a logical problem, which can only be checked by yourself, or to improve your writing style.
Third, your various renderings are not enough. The rendering of the environment and the description of the character's personality are not perfect without language.
Fourth, your description of the protagonist's line is too poor. It is difficult to distinguish the importance of writing and ink. You even have more emphasis on supporting characters than on the protagonist. This makes your article top-heavy and the logic is very confusing.
Fifth, after reading it, I can only say that it is particularly poisonous, because you have touched upon one of the biggest characteristics of this type of novels, which is that harem novels are generally relatively pure, rather than messy like yours.
Generally speaking, it is difficult for a new author to write this kind of book. I suggest you write a book with a single female protagonist first to practice. Don't be too high-minded right from the beginning. Then, I hope you will read more Chinese and foreign famous works and analyze your own writing style. I suggest you read authors such as Fenghuo and Tiancan. Well, I also hope that you can write better in the future.
What should I say, the emotional line is a bit too long, the main character stands out and the female main character is yandere and is criticized like crazy, and will the male main character accept the female main character and start a harem? It seems that it is not good to choose Mu or Liu alone, after all, the male protagonist and Mu are both [laughing]. If Liu is chosen alone, I feel a little sorry for Mu. I suggest the author write about Mu's psychological changes to make it easier for us to accept. If it doesn't work, just foreshadow the pregnancy in the front and let the male protagonist accept it. Let's keep the little Mu in the two-parter. This is the plot that I can accept now. The author's writing is pretty good, come on, please consider my suggestions. I think readers can accept them all. There is another heroine. After all, other readers are scolding you. I am the only one who thinks your writing is quite good.
Support the author, come on
It feels pretty good, novice author, keep it up, you can still feel it after reading the latest chapter.
Very well written, good luck to the author
Not bad, I like to watch it
Looking forward to the next plot
Not bad, I think
Very interesting, love watching it
Also very good.
It's just an ordinary article, but I still cheer for a five-star author.
Not bad, I hope to be with Sister Liu
It's pretty good, but it could be more "detailed" [laughing]
Yes, I love it, it's my type
It's very beautiful, I finished watching it straight away, it's so sexy, hh
Well, the author, well, although I have never written a novel, I can explain the novel in a little more detail. Otherwise, it would always be summarized in just a few sentences. It would be quite uncomfortable to read the novel like this. I think it can be more descriptive of the environment and the story of the novel. Well, the inner psychological activities of the corner are slightly better this way, and the number of words is larger. Although I can understand what you are writing, some sentences may not be so beautiful or coherent, so um, I hope the author can work a little harder on this aspect, um, come on Well, to be honest, the author, although I know you have just opened a new book and are a new author, I can give you some suggestions. First of all, the first emotional line should not be so confusing and complicated. Secondly, when you describe a person or the plot between a heroine and the protagonist, you should describe it carefully. Second, what you write is too cumbersome and noisy, and people will already know that it is very incoherent or not fluent just by looking at it. This is a logical problem, which can only be checked by yourself, or to improve your writing style. Third, your various renderings are not enough. The rendering of the environment and the description of the character's personality are not perfect without language. Fourth, your description of the protagonist's line is too poor. It is difficult to distinguish the importance of writing and ink. You even have more emphasis on supporting characters than on the protagonist. This makes your article top-heavy and the logic is very confusing. Fifth, after reading it, I can only say that it is particularly poisonous, because you have touched upon one of the biggest characteristics of this type of novels, which is that harem novels are generally relatively pure, rather than messy like yours. Generally speaking, it is difficult for a new author to write this kind of book. I suggest you write a book with a single female protagonist first to practice. Don't be too high-minded right from the beginning. Then, I hope you will read more Chinese and foreign famous works and analyze your own writing style. I suggest you read authors such as Fenghuo and Tiancan. Well, I also hope that you can write better in the future.
What should I say, the emotional line is a bit too long, the main character stands out and the female main character is yandere and is criticized like crazy, and will the male main character accept the female main character and start a harem? It seems that it is not good to choose Mu or Liu alone, after all, the male protagonist and Mu are both [laughing]. If Liu is chosen alone, I feel a little sorry for Mu. I suggest the author write about Mu's psychological changes to make it easier for us to accept. If it doesn't work, just foreshadow the pregnancy in the front and let the male protagonist accept it. Let's keep the little Mu in the two-parter. This is the plot that I can accept now. The author's writing is pretty good, come on, please consider my suggestions. I think readers can accept them all. There is another heroine. After all, other readers are scolding you. I am the only one who thinks your writing is quite good.
Support the author, come on
It feels pretty good, novice author, keep it up, you can still feel it after reading the latest chapter.
Very well written, good luck to the author
Not bad, I like to watch it
Looking forward to the next plot
Not bad, I think
Very interesting, love watching it
Also very good.
It's just an ordinary article, but I still cheer for a five-star author.
Not bad, I hope to be with Sister Liu
It's pretty good, but it could be more "detailed" [laughing]
Yes, I love it, it's my type
It's very beautiful, I finished watching it straight away, it's so sexy, hh