Lin Shiran accidentally transmigrated to a vast world of combined martial arts, where dynasties stood side by side and the forces of the martial world were tangled in a complex web.
Luckily, Lin Shiran awakened a System, though this System was a little unreliable.
"Ding dong! Congratulations, Host, on successfully completing your daily sign-in. You have received three days' worth of pure inner power..."
"Ding dong! Congratulations, Host, on successfully stealing Dongfang Bubai's panties. Reward: fifty years of inner power."
"Ding dong! Congratulations, Host, on successfully braising Jian Jiuhuang's old horse. Reward: Ghost Shadow Perplexing Steps."
"Ding dong! Congratulations, Host, on successfully stealing Xu Fengnian's maid, Hongshu. Reward: the Divine Sword Heavenly Execution."
With one bizarre mission after another, Lin Shiran was forced to go from an ordinary commoner to the most notorious man in the world.
Lin Shiran: I just love the way you all look like you want to beat me to death, but can't.
The writing style seems immature, and the setting is different from the original work. Shao Siming's character and Li Hanyi's character are completely new settings. The whole rhythm of the book is that the protagonist upgrades his skills along the way. The interaction is only related to women, which is a bit monotonous. Moreover, the so-called foreshadowing of your master and counter-disciple is that you stole underwear once. The progress is really fast, and the author of the martial arts skills and moves is unclear. The information on the panel appears too frequently. What is worth complaining about is the confusing punctuation. The dialogue quotation marks are only used in the first half of the sentence.
It's so pitiful. There are only a few comments, and there are two two-star ones. I will give five stars to encourage and encourage 🤦
In the world of comprehensive martial arts, one can clearly understand the three thousand avenues and can also rank them, 666
If you go into fantasy, at least there is a small world where you can bring your women with you. There is no need to let them ascend on their own [staring]
How many times have you used the colon correctly? The character traits and the like are wrong, but in one chapter, are the colons used half right? The description of the characters in the original fan novel is wrong, and the moves cannot be described. You don't even need to write the appearance of the moves. As a result, you can't write them and have to write them.
It's a decent and refreshing article, but it's too focused on cultivating immortality, and it's a bit confusing to read. Also, will the things given by the system be invincible? Xuanyuan Sword! What an artifact! Also, what you are combining with a mixed martial arts novel will make it a little confusing to cultivate immortality. Even if you cultivate immortality, you can't do it slowly. With such a fast pace, you can finish writing the lower world in one or two hundred chapters at most. You have to write the upper world, and can you enrich the emotional line? Is it so easy for Li Hanyi to give it to him for free?
The plot is incomprehensible. Wouldn't it be embarrassing when you watch it yourself? And if you want to use the double quotation marks, just use them. If you don't know how to use them, don't use them. They may appear sometimes and sometimes not.
Bring all the heroines back to Xueyue City. It's not good for you to leave them all outside. And there are too many heroines. I don't care if there are more heroines. Then don't give Xu Fengnian's to him. Bring them all back. Collect the rouge lists of each dynasty.
It feels like I'm reading a novel. I can't write about love and love, and I'm so disappointed in the girl. I fell asleep after drinking, and I fell in love with it after it was over. I can't even understand the punctuation marks, and many of the words I speak are not enclosed in double quotation marks! Just write it by machine! The fighting was also poorly depicted, with flowers flying around in the morning, evening, and night, and then disappearing, and the sword intention of Dahe was also magically changed! No character descriptions either! The song of a young man, in the snow, is all about one word, (handsome)!! The sword energy spreads across thirty thousand miles, and the cold light of the sword shines across Jiuzhou! Isn't he handsome when he says "Sword Comes"??? You didn't write anything! It's like reading an article! And it's still a primary school student's composition!!!!
Two top-notch sword intentions? What sword intention? Suggestion?