One Sword, One Sword, One Freedom

Let's talk about the advantages first. The plot is okay and quite interesting, the pacing is well-controlled, the characters are well-defined, and the details are reasonable. Overall, it's pretty good. Let's talk about the shortcomings, it's messy! Disorganized! Disorganized! The paragraph should not be divided into paragraphs, and the sentence should be broken into continuous sentences. Also, author, how many punctuation marks have you eaten? Many dialogues have no punctuation marks, at least ":", this colon must be there, and there are always some modern sentences. It makes sense that the protagonist is a time traveler, but the protagonist is an indigenous person, and the sudden introduction of modern words or words is too abrupt and can easily jump out of the drama. There's also the character's name. I've said it before without saying much. Then don't let the character keep saying things that don't fit the character's setting, otherwise it's easy to ruin the character's character! Finally, has the author signed a contract and been recommended? The 110,000-word debut should have been long ago. If it has been recommended, why is there still no one? Think carefully, the author should think twice! [Grievance] [grievance] [grievance]

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