After Rebirth, I Tease Myself

Pros: The copywriting is very good and very attractive to me. The plot has twists and turns, and it is not a mindless novel for the general public (for example, Duan's behavior and the protagonist's attitude), and the psychological description of himself falling in love with the protagonist in the second life is also good (although it is a bit fast). Needs improvement: At first glance, I have the feeling that the world view is very grand. The characteristics of the article about cultivating immortals make it difficult to become a short story. The reason why this article is so short may be that the author has too few descriptions. The extremely short length of this article gives me the feeling of a synopsis of the story, as if this is not a novel but an outline. A novel is not only about describing the plot of the story, but it is also important to depict the tasks and express the emotions. Specific suggestions: Too little description means more descriptive language and less descriptive language. Some storylines can be written in more detail, including story background, character emotions, scene descriptions, etc. [Note: The above are all personal opinions and may be biased. The author and book friends are welcome to correct or communicate. I am not writing a long review to criticize anyone or to show my superiority. I just feel that this article can be better and the author can be better. Reject personal attacks. You can argue with me. ]

There is always a feeling that it is both beautiful and interesting. But it should mostly look good. It's a bit regretful that I've finished reading this [face covering] I really didn't expect Duan Bowen at first... Oh, what a pity, what a pity Also, I always feel that Chu Suiyun sympathizes with Nian An. No love [Petrified] What a pity for Senior Brother Han You. Destined but not destined After reading the whole story, Duan Bowen seemed to be the most distressed [crying] so miserably. I hope you will be happy in the next life. Be with the people you love. Destined Taoist Companion.. The system is really bad [staring]

To be honest, the subject matter of this book is very novel. I haven't seen anything like this for a long time. Although some parts were weird when I read it, it was still acceptable. Overall, it's not bad. The emotional lines are very rich. I hope this book will become popular.

Although it is short, the storyline is exciting

This is a good book, I like it very much

It looks good, but Duan Bowen is really a pity...

Not bad, it feels like an outline hahaha

It's good, but it's too short. I want to read the modern chapter.

Their emotional line is very beautiful and the plot is also exciting

Pretty good, nice looking

This book is quite novel and okay

It's pretty, but a little short

The previous content is good

It's okay, the general context is smooth, but the plot is a bit rushed.

The author probably couldn't figure out the later plot or didn't outline it in advance. The timeline is confusing, but this novel is still worth reading.

To be honest, it's quite good-looking, but the endings of some characters are not explained. It's a pity that the grudge between Duan Bowen and the protagonist was just let go... I always feel a bit regretful, but I also think that such an ending is quite good.

I think the score is a bit low. I think it's pretty good-looking, a bit like a compressed package. If I wrote about catching monsters, I could write a lot more. The ending was indeed a bit rushed.

Very novel ending, I really didn't expect the system to be the villain I didn't pay attention to the number of chapters. When I got to the end, I realized that it was over so quickly and I couldn't get enough of it! ! It's just that the ending is sloppy. If I want to read the modern chapter, doesn't the author consider modern extras?

Very good, I like short novels like this. It's just that the subsequent development is unexpected and a bit strange.

I finished watching it, the ending was a bit sloppy, but it was quite interesting.

Not bad, just a bit short

Come on, come on, come on

After rebirth, I tease myself

It would be better if it were longer🥹

Maybe my point of view is different, and I didn't read the entire article, so I said some bad words. I apologize.

I hope the author writes more articles like this, I really like this kind of subject matter