I Just Wanted to Be Passive, so I Was Forced to Beat up the General.

It's very immature. I can really feel what you want to write, but your writing style is your shortcoming. For example, there is little foreshadowing in scenes similar to separation, and there is less memory when the character dies. For example, the paragraph written when Anna died at the beginning was too straightforward. You want to write too much and you don't pay attention to the details. This is a novice's fault, which will lead to future problems. There is no inspiration on the surface, which is also an advantage. Generally, old authors just write for the sake of writing novels, but newcomers are different. They really think about it and write what comes to mind. For example, an article based on an essay outline is not directly written with feelings. It can only be said that it is very simple to have an innocent heart, but very few are preserved. How to say that? Everyone has it, a sage should not lose his ears. Author, I am paying attention to you. If you can keep your innocent heart, I will be your loyal fan. If you lose it by then, I will not hesitate to cancel it. Come on ٩(๑^o^๑)۶

I have read a few chapters and found the writing to be very good and the content to be good. However, the pirate world still has devil fruit abilities, so the author can design a devil fruit for the protagonist that matches his own abilities. For example, the Momo fruit can directly improve the protagonist's physical fitness, and vampire fruits are also available.

It's one of the better pirate fanfics I've ever read.

Overall, I quite liked this book (five stars first), but it was a bit uncomfortable to read about the protagonist's progress in strength. It's good that the protagonist keeps growing, but once he encounters a well-known opponent, he will be forced to fight 50-50, and in most cases he will be seriously injured, putting him at a disadvantage. This actually gives me a sense of powerlessness that even if the protagonist cheats and works very hard, he cannot fight or surpass other strong players, so it feels a bit uncomfortable. I know this is written to be logical (after all, they are both geniuses in the world and have been practicing longer than the protagonist), and also to ensure that the combat power does not collapse, but it really does not give readers much sense of satisfaction, and it is difficult to have expectations for the battle. (Whenever there is a crisis battle, I am afraid that the protagonist will not be able to defeat him [laughs awkwardly]) I heard someone say before that good novels are more about sensory enjoyment than rigorous logic. Of course, I am not sure whether this theory is reasonable, so I just casually commented and provided the author with other ideas.

I gave it five stars so that everyone can see it, by the way, to avoid lightning, pure plot, no changes, except for the ending, which is pretentious, the rest is all the original plot. After a third of it, I have basically seen the end. Oden becomes a friend, Hiyori becomes an adopted daughter, Blackbeard continues to board the ship, Bundy continues to be unlucky, Roger continues to die, and suddenly I wonder, why do I want to read the novel, why don't I continue to watch the original anime,

It's perfect, beautiful, and in my 10 years of reading, it's in the top 5 of my fanfics! In no particular order, I read 300,000 words in one go. It feels so good and I'm keeping it.

The writing is very clear, the logic is very clear, not brainless, and the sense of character substitution is also very strong. It is concise and easy to understand, with rich plot levels. It is also a very good book, but the updates are too slow, and the production team don't dare to take such a rest.

It's really good. It's definitely more than 6.6 Points and 8.8 Should be the original score. There are basically no poison points. The early setting of the Heart Steel equipment at the beginning is very interesting, but later I seem to have forgotten that I mentioned 6 equipment slots before. Also, if the setting of deliberate punching is not good and can't be penetrated, it's not really hurt.

Not bad, a level above most other pirate stories! ! !

Chapter 154 comes with all the equipment, Blood Hand, Ice Fist, one glove in each hand, Thousand Changer, Force of Nature, Anti-Armor, all embodied and worn on the body, plus Heart Steel, there is no Jujiu and Ruin. The explanation given is that it is a weapon, he uses fists, and it is inappropriate to use weapons.

It feels like this one is quite similar to the one from Pirate 996. This is very well written. It ranks second among One Piece for me, and I only have one of them, One Piece 996. One this one. It's all about Whitebeard.

The writing is quite good, but the pace in the early stages is a bit slow. There is only one piece of equipment in more than a hundred chapters, but there is nothing I can do about it. The Heart of Steel is really too buggy. If you add a giant nine, it will be invincible. But I still wish the pace was faster

I think it's pretty good-looking, and the pace is good, but the growth in strength is a bit slow, and cheating can make you forget.

The writing is okay, except for the pure gold plot, nothing has changed until Oden arrives. The rhythm basically follows the original plot. If the plot is not changed, it will usually be over at a glance. The protagonist works hard to practice, with some monsters and twists and turns interspersed in the middle to upgrade, and then the plot is brought to the top, with a strong suppression and beating of the whole family.

Perfect without explanation, and another daddy waiting for my One Piece novel, I hope you will be the twin stars of the ceiling of One Piece. Brothers who like Baidan and Pirates can read it. It is really highly recommended. Those who like the navy can also read it.

It's okay, but the combat power is a bit confusing. The protagonist spends most of the time fighting with others at a 50-50 level.

Should I say it or not? The writing is pretty good and it stands out in Tomato. Those who like to read One Piece fan fiction can check it out.

Personally, I think this is a relatively high-quality pirate novel. As a fan of One Piece for many years, I still have a say. At the same time, I am also a player of League of Legends, so I can better understand the author's point of view on this topic. Marriott's setting does not need to be changed much, and it is very suitable for One Piece. The author blends the designs of the two worlds together, which I think is very clever. Moreover, the image of Marriott will honestly make readers smile. He is particularly suitable for One Piece's world view and temperament. Swordsmanship, bloodline, physical skills, domineering, devil fruit and the talents of the fur tribe, these things can be combined together in a not-too-obtrusive way. The author's idea is not too outrageous, but one strange thing is that the protagonist's strength is uncertain. The protagonist can be strong enough to compete with the generals, but weak enough to be unable to defeat players of the same age, so it can be seen that the author's early outline is a bit confusing, but this is not harmful. After about 100 pictures, the author's rhythm gradually got on the right track. This book is mainly about warmth, life, daily life and protection, and the struggle for hegemony for the purpose of protection, so the subject matter is still very comfortable. The author's writing does not carry a sword or shows any edge, which makes people feel comfortable reading without feeling physical discomfort. But there are many points in this that I think are rather far-fetched, especially the author's forced preservation of everyone in the white group, and his forced reversal of everyone's fate. There are some places where the logic of the plan does not flow smoothly, but it is just a minor flaw. You can only say that it is a bit forced, but the logic is not problematic. I still recommend everyone to read this book. The reading experience is really comfortable.

Not bad, it feels a little warm-blooded

It's just that the updates are too slow. One chapter every day is enough for anyone to read. .

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking, good-looking

It's really beautiful and it's on fire.

It's great. I haven't actually watched One Piece yet, but I'm willing to continue watching it! Finished reading!

It's really well written and the ideas are great. But the most disturbing thing for me was that Blackbeard let him go and poisoned me. That chapter is really poisonous, otherwise I would really want to continue reading.

Nothing to say, it looks good, and the space is delicate but not greasy.

So far, it's still very good. The description of the fighting scenes is also very exciting. The protagonist is not a brainless fool. The writing is also good. It's worth reading.

To be honest, I think this book is a bit good, and the ending is pretty good. How can I put it, although the content inevitably has some poisonous points, but overall it looks very good, and it is a rare fanfic.

Author, can you give me some help? My sister-in-law is so pitiful!

That's great, but has Luffy disappeared?

If you happen to like pirates and tycoons, then you are in for a treat.