By Saint****************

The fighting plot of the five-star protagonist is a bit lacking and does not reflect the essence of cultivating immortals.

It's okay now, but there are no highlights. Although my understanding of this book is very shallow, I can make some suggestions. Judging from the title, the theme of this work should highlight the characteristics of the protagonist as a cultivator of immortality, and describe it in terms of clothing, items, personality, language, etc. ① From the analysis of the protagonist's items, it is highlighted that he does not bring anything. Personally, I think this is a failure (it is not a big problem). After all, bringing some specialties from the world of immortality can highlight the characteristics of the world of immortality to a greater extent and can collide with the magic theme of the moon world to create different sparks. Appropriately adding some magic weapons and mechanical gadgets will be the icing on the cake. ② From the perspective of appearance, the author did not provide an orderly and detailed description of the protagonist's face, demeanor, and clothing. If some appropriate descriptions were added, would it improve the reader's reading experience? ③My personal suggestion is to introduce some classical Chinese and ancient poems to improve the protagonist's cultivation. Although the protagonist is set as a young man who has been in seclusion for two hundred years, after reading the book for such a long time, he should be somewhat settled\( ͯω ͯ)/ ④ You can also add some battle scenes appropriately. Of course, this depends on the author's own performance. In fact, it is also good to write about daily life. I still like this book very much. There are some similar books on Tomato, but most of them are discontinued. I hope the author can continue to work hard. These suggestions are not criticisms, but just some thoughts after reading them.

The protagonist is so kind, as kind as a fool.

The protagonist is the kind of person who is very talented. He has never gone out to fight with anyone in seclusion in the sect. His adaptability and vigilance are extremely low. In the world of immortality, he is the kind of person who has strong cultivation but has not kept up with his character.

Come on! If you write this down, it will become popular

I've read a few chapters and it's very interesting. This will happen if you keep in retreat.

This is one of the most well-written books I have seen so far. The material selection is also very good. It breaks the tradition. The protagonists, supporting characters and villains are all intelligent, which truly respects the readers. Although it has been blocked due to social environment, I will still look forward to other new books by the author. Come on!

In fact, it should be five stars. I think this is really good, great, and it belongs to a series that is both good and not bad. The only shortcoming is that the protagonist's combat power is too low, which is a bit sorry for this level. But, this is acceptable for individual books.

Are these lich rules too simple? 1. Magic is infinite. Does the author know what infinity is? It is infinite and can continuously release magic. Countless dragon tooth soldiers can destroy the universe, right? 2. Is it easy to gather unlimited magic power and destroy the planet with one blow? 3. It's always the rule. Isn't it too easy to become a lich? Are all the creations of gods used? 4. There are also rules that I am really speechless about. The protagonist is already beating the gods and has not yet understood the rules! The Holy Grail spirit didn't understand the rules either. A lich, a piece of garbage under a god, had rules instead, and was speechless. So speechless 5. This is to casually strengthen the heroine. Later, I must want to make the heroine a lich immortal and become a being that only the hero can kill! Because only the protagonist can change the rules of immortality, and then the heroine can wander around as she wants, while others pursue the immortality that cannot be achieved for thousands of years, and are obtained by the heroine so hastily. I can only say that this is the treatment of the heroine.

Five stars are given, but I have to leave as well, just to encourage the author! I'm wondering what the purpose of pig's feet is?

It looks good, don't ask, just take a look.

The writing is quite good, but the combat power performance is not in line with the current state. Of course, it would be quite normal if it is compared to the low-end version of the Saint with the combat power of the Yuan Ying stage.

Although there's not much to see about the Holy Grail War, it's well written.

The last few pictures in the second volume, 66, 67, 68, 70, and 72, are what make me give five stars. It would be better if Tomato could thank these stories with interesting concepts.

The subject matter is very novel, but the writing style needs to be strengthened. Alas, it's still unfinished, it's a pity

[Thinking] The new book must support it. [Laugh]

It's ok, come on, author

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking

Well written and clear in ideas.

It's over, give me a final score

I saw Chapter 102, so far it's pretty good and interesting.

Very good

Not bad, I haven't read a book like this for a long time

Well written, good luck to the author! Looking forward to (๑˙ー˙๑)

I like this book very much. The themes are rich and diverse. I enjoyed reading it.

The logic is rigorous, the article is humorous, and the writing is relatively good. Highly recommended! ! ! Come on, author Thanks to the author, see you in the world! [Cry][cry][cry]

Can I say that I want to get into fgo because of this book? [Laughing evilly] Maybe it's a bit strange, but it's true that this book aroused my interest.

That's pretty good, come on.

Not annoying to watch. Not bad . I don't understand. It just looks good. What's the point of having to bring over settings from other books? I'm too lazy to look it up, it's baffling

The subject matter is very interesting, keep it up [thinking]