(Xiaobaiwen, 1V1)
One day when Mu Jiu was wandering around in the small world, she was touched by a little mythical beast. If she painted a cake for her and saved the villain, she could live forever. Mu Jiu thought it was interesting and went there. Unexpectedly, the villains he provoked were clingy and yandere.
Black bamboo horse: "Fall with me, or stay with me forever."
Crazy criticism boss: "Ajiu, you belong to me, you can't escape."
The yandere: "Sister, if you don't want me, okay, then let's die together."
The Cold Demon Lord: "Woman, you can't escape my grasp."
...
Until one day someone knelt down on Mu Jiu and said, "Yes, I designed all of this just for the baby to fall in love with me."
...
Mu Jiu: "You're used to it, get out!"
Reader comments
Overall it's pretty good, but not my type (it's a little bit similar to my type)
The first is that the writing is actually quite good and not as bad as the author himself said. The second is that unnecessary characters can be reduced to save chapters. Personally, I feel that a world should be limited to less than 20 chapters. If it is too much, it will easily cause impatience. Then try to update as much as possible in the early stage. (It doesn't matter if it is less in the later stage. The main thing is to retain people in the early stage.) Thirdly, you can still see that the writing style is relatively immature, but you can also see the progress. Although the progress is small, it is progressing fast enough. The fourth is that I hope there will be no Madonna, Little Theater, and mistress plots (these are considered by the book circles. They are not included in this book. It is just a reminder). If the male protagonist is a yandere, it is recommended to be more yandere, but it is best not to affect the female protagonist's task (many people abandon the book because the yandere does not trust the female protagonist too much). And that's all. Come on, author. It is best not to have any enemies from the original world (there is no need to lay such foreshadowing. In the past, this kind of foreshadowing was popular and could arouse readers' interest in reading, but now the first reaction when seeing this kind of foreshadowing is that it is very annoying and itchy, but I don't know the answer so I stopped reading.) There is nothing wrong with the book, it is well written.
Update soon. You are a model worker. I told you to read the book on raising children. The result was so little, oh oh oh [I almost cried]
I thought it was very interesting, but the final ending was very different from what I thought, and a bit sloppy. I originally thought that in the end I would see the author writing that the male and female protagonists were together, but it didn't happen. Finally... Um... Hehe, my brain is a little short (>^ω^<), there is only so much [If it offends you, say ( •̀∀•́ ), I will delete it ≧≦, just please don't say me ⊙⊙bhan]
It's okay, but the ending is a bit unclear, and there's no revenge on the enemies in the last world~
How long is life? Life is between you and me.
Come on!
What can I say, it shows that the author worked very hard. However, I still like some of the plots in it, but the relationship between the male and female protagonists comes too quickly.
It's okay. Written by a newbie.
Follow-up, I want a side story, the author's side, side, side, look at me, [cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry]
There is a lot of room for improvement, and I hope the author can write it completely. It's not good to have a beginning but no tail.
It's pretty good, but the ending is a bit rushed, but I still recommend watching it~
It's beautiful, but it ends suddenly
Ah, is this gone? I haven't written the ending yet. Is there another one? [Learned]
It's very well written, come on, author, I'm optimistic about you [laughs]
Overall it's pretty good, but not my type (it's a little bit similar to my type) The first is that the writing is actually quite good and not as bad as the author himself said. The second is that unnecessary characters can be reduced to save chapters. Personally, I feel that a world should be limited to less than 20 chapters. If it is too much, it will easily cause impatience. Then try to update as much as possible in the early stage. (It doesn't matter if it is less in the later stage. The main thing is to retain people in the early stage.) Thirdly, you can still see that the writing style is relatively immature, but you can also see the progress. Although the progress is small, it is progressing fast enough. The fourth is that I hope there will be no Madonna, Little Theater, and mistress plots (these are considered by the book circles. They are not included in this book. It is just a reminder). If the male protagonist is a yandere, it is recommended to be more yandere, but it is best not to affect the female protagonist's task (many people abandon the book because the yandere does not trust the female protagonist too much). And that's all. Come on, author. It is best not to have any enemies from the original world (there is no need to lay such foreshadowing. In the past, this kind of foreshadowing was popular and could arouse readers' interest in reading, but now the first reaction when seeing this kind of foreshadowing is that it is very annoying and itchy, but I don't know the answer so I stopped reading.) There is nothing wrong with the book, it is well written. Update soon. You are a model worker. I told you to read the book on raising children. The result was so little, oh oh oh [I almost cried]
I thought it was very interesting, but the final ending was very different from what I thought, and a bit sloppy. I originally thought that in the end I would see the author writing that the male and female protagonists were together, but it didn't happen. Finally... Um... Hehe, my brain is a little short (>^ω^<), there is only so much [If it offends you, say ( •̀∀•́ ), I will delete it ≧≦, just please don't say me ⊙⊙bhan]
It's okay, but the ending is a bit unclear, and there's no revenge on the enemies in the last world~
How long is life? Life is between you and me. Come on!
What can I say, it shows that the author worked very hard. However, I still like some of the plots in it, but the relationship between the male and female protagonists comes too quickly.
It's okay. Written by a newbie.
Follow-up, I want a side story, the author's side, side, side, look at me, [cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry]
There is a lot of room for improvement, and I hope the author can write it completely. It's not good to have a beginning but no tail.
It's pretty good, but the ending is a bit rushed, but I still recommend watching it~
It's beautiful, but it ends suddenly
Ah, is this gone? I haven't written the ending yet. Is there another one? [Learned]
It's very well written, come on, author, I'm optimistic about you [laughs]