The Fool Xiu Changsheng, the Spirit Fox Demon Girl Comes to the Door at Night

I saw Suanbao personally recommending it, well, it's pretty well written. Come on! ! !

It's well written. Your rating is good. The pace could be slower. Also, your definition is not a cool article. Don't write it as a cool article. You can take on the role of Changsheng. What would you do if you were Changsheng? Don't be swayed by bad reviews. You are you, different fireworks. The rating is not that important. The main thing is to write well and we will support you. The so-called immortality is nothing more than loneliness, a symbol of loneliness. For mortals, it is just a drop in the ocean. For immortal cultivators with poor talent, it is an unattainable fantasy. For the male protagonist, it is the greatest pain. Smile as you watch the world of mortals pass through eternity, and meet the opportunity to become an immortal. From then on, there were deported immortals in the mortal world, who would protect a beautiful woman for the rest of her life.

It's very interesting and the plot is tight. When will the main character become immortal? I feel like the author wants to stab us first before he can cultivate [smile] Also, please update it faster😄It will be updated five times a day🔥[Blow kiss][Blow kiss][Blow kiss]

This book is well written, some suggestions (personal feelings): First, there can be knives on the road to immortality, but this kind of knife writing has appeared a lot. Most people only read this thing for entertainment, and try to use as few knives as possible. Secondly, the talent of the protagonist should not be too low. Of course, it does not have to be particularly good, just average. This is because I have read many such novels in which the characters are immortal but have very low qualifications, which results in the novel losing some of its flavor. Third, I finished reading this book in one sitting. Can you read more? [Please update]

The stars were sparse and the moon was bright, and the bright moonlight shone slightly through the gaps in the woods, and the moonlight was like frost. ——Pick You will feel very comfortable reading this book. His story is very novel. You never know where his next move will be. The author's writing style is very good. When reading this book, I feel like reading an essay. It is humorous yet interesting, elegant yet noble, and there is an otherworldly feeling when I am trapped in the world of mortals. The writing is beautiful, the article is beautiful, but the author is ugly. The reader is very handsome. I recommend everyone to read it.

It's a very good book, but the rating is so low. Here are some of my weak suggestions: I am now reading the end of the first volume. I used Nangong Wentian as an example. Although the author said that your empathy is not very good, the writing of that relationship is a bit stiff and does not allow the readers to get involved and empathize. This makes the readers feel like outsiders, which is very uncomfortable. Moreover, most readers who like this kind of book like the various aspects of life. If the empathy is not strong enough, many such readers will abandon the book or not like it. If the empathy could be better, the score might be much higher. Note: This is just my own understanding, I hope it can help the author. I hope the author will get better and better (✪▽✪).

From the writing point of view, it needs more practice. From the plot development point of view, the logic is clear. It would be better if the number of words could be increased by tens of thousands. I believe that all readers will also support my [smirk]

The outline of the story written by Mr. Xiaoqi is really good. The previous parents took care of Chang'an and how to make him grow up. It was really touching. The ending of Chang'an's transformation into immortality directly sublimates the theme. The portrayal of other characters and their endings are all summaries of the characters. The cruelty of the world of immortality and the invincible kindness of Chang'an are always supported. From it, many life principles can be seen in Wuhu. I hope that I can be safe and healthy, be brave enough to do what I feel is right, and cherish my time. I also wish that everyone can be happy and not be troubled by life. The foreshadowing at the end is also very 🐮 Come on, Mr. Xiaoqi TT! !

It's been a long time since I've read a book that was so touching and immersive. The characters of the protagonist and supporting characters are very vividly portrayed. I personally think that this kind of longevity novel may have more knives. After all, longevity is long. I have read more than 500 books on Tomato so far. This book is written sincerely. I hope the author can stick to it. I believe it will become a good book. Then there may be more foreshadowings in this book. Let me tell you my opinion: 1. Changsheng's mother said that she saw the jade pendant glowing. It is estimated that the "fake" immortal who gave the jade pendant will have something to do with Changsheng. 2. It is the heroine. This kind of longevity novel usually does not have a female protagonist. Mu Lingxi left Changsheng, maybe for the sake of immortality. It can be seen from her desperate return to save Changsheng. She should be the kind of person who leaves Changsheng out of necessity (if there is a heroine, I hope there won't be too many, just one. Maybe I've watched too many single heroines and am used to [crazy]) 3. Xiaobai and Xiaoqing, Xiaobai has more pitfalls, maybe she is the daughter of Jiuwei (many comments say she has something to do with Mu Lingxi, the spirit beast, it should be possible that she is one with Mu Lingxi) Xiaoqing may not have much to say. 4. The students in the school will also achieve something in the future. 5. This is the foreshadowing of the medicine boy. I hope I can be gentle during the surgery [I almost cried]. The above is my opinion, I hope it will be more kissable [laughing awkwardly] Generally speaking, the writing style is very delicate, and the pace is not easy to write too fast and collapse easily. If you write it well, I believe this book will be popular. (Also, pay attention to the author) [Send my heart][Send my heart][Send my heart]

The writing in the beginning is very delicate, and the emotions are very real and the pace is slow, but in the end, the distribution of content is uneven and unnecessary, and it is too dragging, but the ending is too hasty. But being able to write this article without making money and without objections from my parents is already very impressive, and it deserves five stars. If I have the conditions to support it, I believe this article will be well written, and it deserves five stars.

This book is one of the few good works in Tomato. This may be true from my perspective, but this book really made me empathize. Maybe it is because I miss Xu Changan, but I have no system, no Mu Lingxi of my own, and no good-looking skin. I only resemble Xu Changan who can giggle. The author's writing is really good. He is very young and has great achievements. At a similar age, you were my most desired goal [top post]

Thinking closely, the plot is looming, and the emotion expressed is only two words, longevity, savoring the emotions brought by it. Everyone longs for immortality, but if the protagonist is immortal, then the protagonist will experience a lot of mental pain. Maybe the ending of the story is not so happy, the protagonist is dead, or may live in seclusion in the world.

It is wonderful. The core idea of ​​martial arts is inferior to immortals and mortals have different paths, and human life is like grass and grass is summarized in just 60 chapters. What is even more amazing is that a series of thoughts about longevity are written in detail. There are too many opportunities in the later period and too many anchors in the early stage, resulting in a large loss of readers. However, the transition between the two paragraphs is smooth. In short, YYDS (very short)

It is plain yet charming, the plot is concise and the language is beautiful. It is refreshing to read. It has a kind of artistic conception of teaching life. The artistic conception is profound and long, which makes me unable to put it down. Big support for the author. Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

It is plain yet interesting, and allows people to taste the pain of loss and separation from another perspective. Although the pace is slow, the characters are very vivid. Although cool writing is the norm here, the surrounding environment does not represent the original intention of the heart. I felt that my emotions were very immersive when reading this book, to feel the pastoral scenery. My literary talent is limited and I can only say so much. I hope you will keep this mentality and thoughts and write the path of Yu Changsheng as you see it in your heart.

It is very tastefully written, and it is not a brainless novel. Some readers may have misunderstood it in the past, but I can see that Mu and so on have difficulties in leaving the protagonist (it feels like the evil god Xia Qingyue's immediate vision, helping the protagonist behind the scenes but not communicating with the protagonist is still a bit unpleasant, but the world view, plot, and characterization are still worth looking forward to). I recommend it to readers who like to read literary and youthful writing. There are indeed few such books, so read and cherish it.

Come on, there are very few storytelling writers, but the beginning is very exciting. Must surpass the sour treasure author. The novel is written in the same style as it was ten years ago. A modern person has traveled through time and has a free time. However, his IQ is not at all online. It is all in the simple and traditional style of cultivating immortals, without any bright spots.

It's a very nice book with a lot of foreshadowings. It's great to be able to write such a work in this era of fast food per capita. I hope the author can stick to himself and not be influenced by other people. Write a good book and do your best, author.

It's very interesting, but sometimes I get confused while watching it. I don't know where it is. It's a bit confusing, but I can understand it after seeing many problems at the end. It can also be regarded as a foreshadowing. Overall, it's still very interesting, but the update is a bit slow. [Send my heart][Send my heart][Send my heart]

The author should not pay attention to their rumors. This book is much better than those cool articles. There are not too many disgusting plots. Keep writing like this without ending it in advance. (ง •̀_•́)ง Come on!

First of all, the writing style is very in line with my heart. This kind of slow-paced and delicate writing style is great. It reminds me of the ancient Chinese novels I read when I was a child. There are really very few articles like this nowadays. I really miss it. The articles nowadays are too cliche and the writing style is not good. I still like this kind of article very much.

It's a very good longevity novel. It always has a feeling of being brought in. It's written with a bit of truth, conspiracy, and regret. There is no so-called halo of the protagonist. The only pain is that it was discovered too early, resulting in not many chapters. However, don't pursue speed, but quality. Come on, author.

The emotions are well grasped, the logic is clear, and it is not like some novels that suppress the protagonist everywhere. The protagonist is in the world, but he is not a thing in the pool. At the same time, he is also very humorous. I highly recommend it to you guys.

The writing is so good. My taste has been spoiled before, and I didn't want to read a book with a score below 9.5 Until I read this book. [Like] The story line is clear, there are foreshadowings, and the characters are described delicately. It is definitely a book with a score of 9.5 Or above. It may be because the writing is short and there is no traffic, so the score is low. I can see that you are writing the book seriously. I feel that there are not many authors in Tomato who use their foreshadowing and detailed outlines like you. [Like] This is so powerful.

It is indeed possible, and the sour vision is also correct. Good work on the writing! ! !

The writing style is very good, and the emotional description is very good. I am good at writing about knives, which is a very good advantage. Compared with the articles with knives that I have read before, the writing is really good. Even if there are only a few strokes, it can describe the author and what he wants to express. Sorry, I have to take back my comment. Your progress is too slow, right? Chapter 200 is still just about practicing Qi. Isn't it too stretchy?

Overall good, the ending was a little rushed. The early and middle stages of Mu Lingxi are really deeply rooted in the hearts of the people, pure love will never be a slave! It's a pity that the author seemed to have changed halfway through, and some holes were not completely filled in. The worldview changed too much in the later period. If the author was given more preparation time, he would definitely be able to write better! The writing style in the early stage is really humorous and exciting. It is one of the best among online articles!

I hope it won't be unfinished. It would be better if the word count could exceed 300,000 words, because I think this novel is worth at least a million words. The subject matter is very good and creative, and it is much better than some other longevity novels.

I added a bookshelf yesterday and finished reading it today. Overall, the plot and some foreshadowing are really good. If written well, it will be a good novel.

The emotional knife is very good, and the character creation is not bad. With the addition of the system part, the reading fluency seems stiffer and a bit out of place with the main content.