I Just Wanted to Be a Passerby but Became the First Disciple of the Sword Ancestor

Both the setting and the storyline are very reasonable and great. It's just that the lyrical part is a bit too much, and it seems a bit awkward. The purpose of narrating the article from a third-person perspective is to facilitate the rationalization of the spatial structure and make the story arrangement easier to control. If you don't want to lose money from this perspective, a more reasonable approach should be to show various details instead of giving a straightforward description: how unfortunate Lanzhou is, how lacking of love she is psychologically, and how lonely the master is. One or two straightforward statements can play a role in exaggerating, but if you talk too much, you will easily feel embarrassed. Emotional changes directly expressed by the author like this are more suitable for the first perspective, such as: "They are as pure and warm as the sun. I am so despicable... Am I really suitable to stand with them?" Lanzhou self-denied time and time again, and friends and masters slowly penetrated him. Finally, Lanzhou reached a process of denial, anger, negotiation, compromise, acceptance and tolerance of his own shortcomings. Logically speaking, using the first person can better achieve emotional output and allow readers to experience empathy. If you want to use the third person, a better method would be to control the details. For example, "Seeing the happy scene of her friends, Lanzhou unconsciously tightened her fingers. When someone noticed Lanzhou's silence, she quickly put on a suitable smile." It may be better to use more descriptions like this in my opinion.

I really like the relationship between Qing Yan and Lan Zhou. This book is completely written on my heart [blowing kiss]

Overall, the detailed handling of an intuitive emotional description is great, and I rarely cry because of the emotional description. Ah, it's really rare. Anyway, I quite like this one, even though I'm originally more of a cute double male protagonist. Of course, I don't hate the love between a man and a woman. It's just that when I read Bunker, I usually read comics and rarely read novels, but this one is an exception. I was able to finish it. Come on, keep writing, I love you. (*๓´╰╯`๓)♡

The writing is very good, why are there no book reviews? The general plot is: the heroine died in modern times due to a serious illness. She traveled to the world of immortal cultivation. The original owner was Tu Cun, and then died, and then a series of stories unfolded. The villains in the article should be the radicals of Tianyimen and the new aristocrats of the demon clan. They are a master-disciple relationship, a shy teacher with a male mother + a frivolous and high-IQ protagonist (not that frivolous) No loss in investment

I was attracted by the catalog. How should I put it? The writing style needs to be improved [exploration] [exploration] [exploration]. The description of emotions and the portrayal of characters are still not delicate enough [thinking]. Then there is the problem of environmental description. The writing style is... Rough? Not too mature? A success. The description of the environment should give people a vivid effect on the paper, but the description of the environment in this article makes it impossible for me to construct a specific picture in my mind... There is also the master's feelings for Lan Zhou, which is also a personal issue of mine. I think people cannot at least not like the children raised by themselves. Son [palms face], not to mention the master and the apprentice, aren't they going against Tiangang? There are many elders who support or even bring it together [what], the world of cultivation is open... As for their relationship... Emm I don't know where it started? Will it end in one go? Hiss... So I'm here to leave a footprint, and I don't intend to. I've continued reading, but some people like to read it. I respect their preferences and won't make too many comments... I'm not saying that the writing is not good, it's just a matter of personal acceptance [face covering]... I don't understand anything, so I won't make any comments anymore. I hope the author can write better and better, please come on [Sending Hearts]

I really like Master so much. This is one of my favorite books about cultivating immortals. I love you so much, Master. Boy mom, the character of the protagonist really touched my heart. Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh no I love it so much. I can't express my inner excitement even if I give it five stars.

The parts I saw were pretty good, though. I love Ju Lei master and apprentice, especially the girl is smaller and the boy is bigger. It gave me such a strong sense of déjà vu that I fell in love with my adoptive father. Apart from this, I don't have any highlights at the moment. It seems like a group portrait? Generally speaking, the team members seem to be group portraits, and it just so happens that your side is also updating. When I stop falling in love with master and apprentice, I can still read this book. I guess it will be finished just in time, and I will be so happy. When there is a tweet, I will help push it, at least. Except that Master is the male protagonist. I don't have any clues. I am willing to be happy! By the way, just keep writing, just at the current pace. As long as it doesn't collapse in the later writing. 9.6+ Is not a problem.

It's okay, very realistic. The heroine is cold and wise, and many social realities are shown in many places in the novel. Compared with most mindless love stories in female videos, this book is obviously more practical and rational. Life is not love. Compared with feelings, the interests behind the relationship between two people are more important. Approaching based on interests is obviously to be more responsible for oneself, make risk assessments, and know how to advance and retreat, which will bring great benefits to oneself. Anyway, it is both rational and emotional. However, I think the bigger problem is that the emotional transition in the article is a bit abrupt, the plot arrangement is a bit messy, and there are too many lyrical words, which makes it feel like it is just on the surface. The more lyrical thing is to pay attention to the details, which is just an auxiliary and needs a little icing on the cake.

After reading it for a few days, I finally finished it. Although there are not many emotional lines, the heroine is absolutely rational and sober. Some parts of it made me burst into tears. Especially the heroes who sacrificed their lives during the war between immortals and demons. It made me know that the world of immortal cultivators is not as shameless as most of the subjects. The cultivators here are full of righteousness for the people behind them, all living beings. I circle Master Xu. It is so touching. From the young boy Long Aotian at the beginning, he transformed into a hero who fights for the sect and for the weak people behind him. Everyone has their own experience and growth. It's so touching. Although I really want him to survive, maybe that is the best destination for Master Xu. He firmly accomplished what he wanted in his heart [I almost cried]

Because it is a group portrait sweet article, but it turned out to be a dagger 😭 I had a cardiac arrest when senior sister was stabbed. I like senior brother Yan Xu very much. He is super reliable and can make jokes with Lan Zhou. Lan Zhou's extreme rationality will also be worn out by everyone's love. Xu Qing is an awkward little cute hahahaha. The one who is upset must be Xu Yuetian... The high-spirited young man died on the eve of Lan Zhou's return. It's still so sad! ! I think he doesn't need to die, but he also let everyone's opinions about the sect dissipate... He is finally free, the young man, the wife is awesome. Lan Zhou may have given a little boost to the growth of my friends. Is it to make them better face her departure? The love line can be poked and poked, and the long flow of water is also happiness, so everyone can always see each other.

After reading it, I can really make a male-mother-type male protagonist. After reading the whole story, the female protagonist is taking the initiative and the male protagonist is shy. After watching too many male protagonists taking the initiative and the female protagonist being shy, I said, "Haha, I really love this setting." There are not many regrets. The only one is Xu Yuetian. He evolved from a love brain to a more mature version of himself. I thought he could have a better ending and be open-minded, but he died when fighting the demons [almost crying]. However, his sacrifice was not in vain. He made Tianyimen recognized again. I was a little confused when I saw the words "completed the book" and I really couldn't bear to part with it. The writing style is very good, well written and the subject matter is novel.

How can I put it, the imagination is quite good, I feel that the author really wants to break away from the routine of conventional fantasy romance novels, and the analysis of certain social phenomena is also very exciting, but the character setting feels rather abrupt (only my personal opinion). The heroine was a miserable social beast in her previous life, and has long been numb to life. She is very smooth in dealing with the sophistication of people. It feels like a relatively mature and stable setting. However, she often does some more innocent and lively actions such as sticking out her tongue and other unsteady behaviors, which feels a bit disconnected. And as the heroine described in her previous life, people who put up a "smiling face" mask to everyone generally do not easily make deep connections with others and will subconsciously keep a certain distance from others. Most of them are just acquaintances? Although the author has been emphasizing the heroine's strategizing and being vigilant about the world, the heroine's words and deeds make me feel more like an innocent girl with a happy family, a little timid but full of energy. Then what do you say about the male protagonist? The author should have set up a master who has been practicing for a long time and is powerful, but the article gave me the impression that he is a relatively ignorant and young senior brother. It cannot reflect the image of a thousand-year-old monster who has practiced calmly. He is also not mature enough. Unless he has been practicing in seclusion since childhood, it is really difficult to explain why the male protagonist is still a very young boy after so many years of experience (thinking) In short, the actual description of the characters does not fit well with the given character settings, and it is difficult to substitute, but everything else is good. Abandoned, marked. This is just my personal opinion and does not represent the views of others. (Stacked armor) Finally, I wish you all a happy reading [Sending Hearts]

The master is very gentle to the heroine, and she is a perfect match [sending my heart]

The cover is very nice and the plot is also very good. [Send heart][Send heart] I have been saving this article for who knows how many days, and I finished it in one go [face covering] [face covering]

Really like it very much! The character's description and personality are very attractive to me, so please work hard to update it! !

Hey hey hey hey male mother [admiration] [admiration] Hey hey Master is so simple, Lanzhou, hurry up and do it [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [flying kiss]

The logic is good, the holes that need to be filled in are filled in, and the character setting is also very good. There is no knife. At least I, a fragile little girl who never reads abuse literature, feels good. In short, the shortcomings do not hide the good points, but it cannot be regarded as a traditional immortality novel. Let me tell my book friends first. After the golden elixir, the heroine became the ruler of the six realms - the new god. The middle part about life and death, rationality and sensibility is quite interesting, but the upgrading in the social game is because the restrictions of "rationality" have become slightly narrower, because the heroine does not understand what "rest/fishing" is, and she has no desire. Otherwise, she can save money and go to a "paradise" for retirement. As long as the insurance is good, the youth's retirement is guaranteed.

I thought this was an ordinary group portrait article, but to be honest it's really brain-burning. I feel like I'm going to need more brains. I just want to add more flesh. But it's really good-looking. [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Heart] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking [Love] Good-looking Sometimes I will explain it later, because this is a bit brain-burning. There are not many emotional scenes in the text, and I think this is mainly about real society, and it also has an understanding of rationality and sensibility. It seems that I need to grow my brain.

It's very interesting. Can the author update it quickly? It's really beautiful. I like it very much.

It's really great. I strongly recommend everyone to read it. Believe me, as a person who has been there, I will never lie to others. This book is really effortless and very interesting. Believe me, I will never lie to you. Well, there are at least two or three super irritating parts in my opinion. The extras are very interesting and I strongly recommend everyone to read it. Secondly, I would like to emphasize again that this book is really not brain-breaking. Hehe

I think it's pretty good, but I don't know why the rating is so low. I really like the character design of Lanzhou, and there are some things in it that are not found in other fairy tales. I also really like Qingyan @

I really like this kind of short novel, and it's not too annoying to follow. Moreover, the author writes it very well, and the whole process is very sweet. Sisters who like sweet stories can start it, especially those who are impatient like me can try it. The male and female protagonists are very proactive, and even the male protagonist is not coy in the beginning. Anyway, it is very beautiful, babies! Get it now! ! !

A Different Master is pretty good to watch, and the extras are even better. It's just a pity. It would be great if the people in Xinghua Village could be resurrected, even if they were ghost cultivators! Then it's a pity that Xu Yuetian is such a good person.

I really like DaDa's writing style, and everyone's characteristics are clear, and there is even a sense of contrast. Especially Chapter 45 Lu Yao really surprised me. He is usually so shy and cute, and even a little timid. In order to practice medicine, it's like a different person. I also like the protagonist Lan Zhou, Wu Ming, Jiuxin, Chi Yan, etc. I hope DaDa will continue to work hard and update well. I can become an old fan after I follow him hahaha

I'm going to give you a good review for now, and I'll comment in detail in a few days (I'm bringing my phone back!). Also, the book is very nice (it's a strong female character). The author is very active, so I won't lose money if I invest [love][love][love] @Herriliuhui

It's super good-looking. It's micro-sharp. The heroine is a chess watcher and also writes scripts, but she's not the protagonist in her own drama. The female protagonist is rational, her IQ is online all the time, and the male mother is super innocent Although she is a master and apprentice, she cannot be considered a nurturing system. The heroine has a dull personality, a super mature mind, and the most powerful brain in the whole story. Finally, ignore the fact that the author's name is invalid

Well, the content of the article is very strange, the story is full of twists and turns, vivid and very eye-catching. The article, especially the description of Lan Zhou when he was a child, was particularly touching. I cried just reading it.

This book is very good, but it's a bit like a GB novel. It's two strong characters. The plot is reasonable and not procrastinating. The heroine is not delicate. I like the setting of the male protagonist. He is curious about new things. He is motivated and works hard. It's good to read. [Thoughts]

This book is very good. What can I say about Lanzhou's performance? He just feels as proud as his master.

It's good to watch, the plot is very good, but can you please give me back the kind, cute and shy Lulu from before? My Lulu, oh oh oh oh~