Danzun

The plot is good, the content is good, everything is good, but I have three points to say: 1. The content is too cliche. The female protagonist is a powerful person like other novels, and then the male protagonist pursues it. I feel that it is too licking the dog. 2. The structure of the heroine's character is not very detailed. Let's sort out the plot. The small mountain village got in touch with Tilian due to chance, and then entered the lower realm sect, entered the epiphany and met the heroine in the inner sect, and then began to pursue her without even holding her hand. Then the heroine was taken to the upper realm by the sect master, and the memory was blocked, and then the male protagonist pursues without hesitation. Then the heroine's words in the article are of the kind of inaction, and the emotions are not very rich. When it comes to dual cultivation, there is not much emotion. 3. This is my personal feeling. The plot is too depressing, the time is too fast, the plot is tight, and the male protagonist has been chasing and finding the female protagonist. Personally, I think we can set aside some time to enrich the male protagonist's plot line, and recruit a male apprentice or something. I also hope that the female protagonist can be more emotional and not so ruthless and inactive. Overall, it's pretty good, except that the male protagonist and the female protagonist spend a little less time together, and when they are together, I feel that the female protagonist is not very emotional, and it feels like the male protagonist is licking her. Another point is to consider that the male protagonist has a brother or something. The kind of friendship between life and death. After all, the road to becoming an immortal is long. Grow together. Not so depressing. The suggestions given are also 3 points. The first female protagonist should be more emotional, the second male protagonist could consider taking on a male disciple or something, and the third male protagonist could have a brother who is a close friend of life and death to cultivate immortality together, hoping it would be less depressing. Of course, the author has written so much, and the plot is not bad, so follow your own ideas. This is also my personal opinion for everyone to read. If you have this type of novel, you can recommend it to me. , Alchemy, it is not necessary to have too many brothers who are life-or-death friends, and it is not necessary to have too many friends to have a lover, and it is not necessary to accept two apprentices. I am commenting as a reader, and the comments may not be very good. The author is upset when he sees it and doesn't like it. You can treat it as invisible, or think that what I said is fart. After all, I can't write novels. Personal comments do not mean that the work is not good. It is limited to everyone's discussion.

The plot of the story is compact, the language is concise, and it is very attractive. Worth a look.

It's a good and very interesting novel about mortals cultivating immortals.

It's so good, it's worth reading this novel

Very, very wonderful, it's the young master.

The plot is very compact and the writing is wonderful. The reason why the article is not long is that the experience in each place usually ends in five or six chapters, which is a bit unfinished! The male protagonist does not engage in ambiguity and has clear goals for the female protagonist. This is very nice! In addition, the setting of this article is also quite novel. I feel that this kind of article would be perfect for animation or TV! Come on, Da Da!

It's so beautiful, and it has a perfect ending. The male and female protagonists finally go to the fairy world together. The male protagonist was an orphan since childhood. He entered the Cangyuan Sect and met the female protagonist, and the gears of fate began to turn. From the beginning to the end of this book, the male protagonist pursues the female protagonist. The identities of the male and female protagonists are not simple, not sadistic, and very interesting. In the process of chasing, I encountered various secret realms and opportunities, improved my cultivation, and found my true identity. The first and middle stages are about chasing the heroine and working hard to improve her cultivation. The later stage is about fighting side by side with the heroine, defeating the evil monster, and then going to the fairy world. The most important thing is to have a perfect ending, which is much better than those endings that are unfinished, unfinished, and hastily ended.

It's pretty, not that mysterious

The writing is clear and the plot is refreshing. Super exciting!

Not bad, with clear layers and clear conditioning, 5 stars

The storyline is well constructed and the writing is good. It is worth recommending!

The story has ups and downs, twists and turns in the legend, interpreting the joys and sorrows of three thousand worlds, and inspiring growth.

Not bad, not bad, really good. I'm optimistic about you. Come on!

The plot is described fluently, and there is nothing wrong with reading it. Still very exciting. It belongs to the level of cool writing.

The writing is humorous and interesting, and the Ice Lord's emotions are subtle and ups and downs, leaving a lot of room for the rest of the story. The protagonist goes through many difficulties and dangers, overcomes obstacles on the road of cultivating immortality, gradually improves his skills, and makes difficult progress towards his goal.

The plot is compact and exciting, and the characters are vivid👍

This book is good, with a twists and turns and a bizarre plot. The protagonist hates evil as much as he hates it. He uses his love single-mindedly and achieves success in the end. It is worth reading.

Objectively speaking, the story in this book has charm, the writing is smooth, the plot is reasonable and smooth, and there is no deliberate attempt to overstate the word count or drag out the plot. Only a few have flaws, such as where did Xiao Hei go? It's basically a decent fantasy novel, and it's worth reading.

It would be nice if the relationship between the two could be described in a thicker way. It feels a bit monotonous, and the grievances and hardships of the difficult reunion are not expressed, but it is still a good novel. Praise

It's not bad, but the description of the male protagonist's love at first sight for the female protagonist is a bit off. Overall, it's not bad and worth watching.

The story is wonderful, the content is rich, the length is appropriate, the writing is fluent, and the concept is very novel. I like this kind of work very much! 👍👍👍👍👍👍🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹

Good book, written in a different way. Strange twists and turns. Come and see for yourself to understand.

Overall, it's okay. I read it in one sitting. Although the heroine doesn't describe too much, the author still describes it very delicately, and the description of her inner activities is also good. I give it five points.

Clear thinking, ups and downs, exciting, interesting, interesting

Very good, I like it very much and I am very satisfied. Thank you.

Danzun, this is indeed a very good article. Simple, neat and without any sloppiness. If it were made into an anime, it would definitely win over a lot of fans. Very cool! [Like][Like][Like]

The characters have distinct personalities and the plot is compact, worth watching

It's very good to watch. It's the first time I've seen a male protagonist studying immortality. It doesn't have so much harem, so it's good.

This is another immortal-cultivation book that can be compared to the immortal-cultivating biographies of mortals. They were all written in small villages, but the development directions are different. One focuses on cultivating immortals, and the other focuses on alchemy. It is one of the few books that I can read twice.

The step-by-step process is in place, exciting and eye-catching. I like it [like][like][like]