Spirit*

It can be seen that there is a large world view, but the map is too small, the protagonist does not have flying spiritual beasts, and fights all the way, and then reaches the next "realm" within a few days. I can't remember the name of the third "city" after reading the book. In addition to the birthplace of the protagonist, even the Dark Emperor City is just a secret realm, not counting the "city" in the map. You fight all the way and rush to the destination, but it doesn't mean you haven't been to the city a lot, right? Survive in the wilderness. Also, the front is too messy. It can be seen that the author wants to write two or even three things on the same timeline, but the expression is not clear, and the change of perspective is sudden and jumpy. If one thing is 123... The other thing is abc... The author wrote 1, a, 2, b, 3, c... But it is clear that the order of 12, ab or 123 followed by abc will look smoother. Maybe the author feels that describing one thing too much is a waste of word count? Personally, I think it will be easier for readers to understand something if it is expressed more clearly.

The progress ahead is a bit confusing

Not bad, keep writing

It's so tiring to watch, the story line and plot, location, and character descriptions are messy

Keep it first, look at it later