Tian Lin's innocent little rabbit is attacked by VS's later blackened love and jealous Yang Xin
Let's see how Tian Lin tamed Yang Xin
"Honey~ I was wrong, kiss~"
"Wife, do you love me?"
After blackening
"Wife, you are mine, don't look at others. Otherwise, you will be locked up in a dark room, be good." Yang Xin said with a half-smile but not a smile.
1. The story line is very messy. I hope the homework can be sorted out [Thinking]
2. There are a lot of typos... [He/She] Especially this one makes me a little concerned. It's okay if I make a mistake once... I make a mistake several times... I hope the author can pay attention to this problem [shy] [blowing kiss]
3. Is Gong's character design serious [almost crying]? It's a bit wrong [Petrochemical]! I hope it can be changed
4. Although I like to watch a little bit of cars, there is really no need! In my opinion, when Gong kicked Shou out of the house, Shou had already broken up by default, so what Gong said when he went to the bar wasn't appropriate [laughs awkwardly]
5. What I can't stand the most is attacking! I don't actually feel disgusted with those words and the like, and then swearing. After all, I still say them sometimes, but! I feel like Gong's constant swearing is just not very good...
I hope the author can make some slight changes without [sending heart] [love] [covering face]
In fact, the introduction is pretty good! It's very novel, you can change the details and so on.
The author is very polite and listens to advice! Hahaha! Hope it gets better and better!
1. The story line is very messy. I hope the homework can be sorted out [Thinking] 2. There are a lot of typos... [He/She] Especially this one makes me a little concerned. It's okay if I make a mistake once... I make a mistake several times... I hope the author can pay attention to this problem [shy] [blowing kiss] 3. Is Gong's character design serious [almost crying]? It's a bit wrong [Petrochemical]! I hope it can be changed 4. Although I like to watch a little bit of cars, there is really no need! In my opinion, when Gong kicked Shou out of the house, Shou had already broken up by default, so what Gong said when he went to the bar wasn't appropriate [laughs awkwardly] 5. What I can't stand the most is attacking! I don't actually feel disgusted with those words and the like, and then swearing. After all, I still say them sometimes, but! I feel like Gong's constant swearing is just not very good... I hope the author can make some slight changes without [sending heart] [love] [covering face] In fact, the introduction is pretty good! It's very novel, you can change the details and so on. The author is very polite and listens to advice! Hahaha! Hope it gets better and better!