I Have a Collection System in Another World

It looks pretty good so far. I hope the heroine will become more and more smart and sensible in the future. Now it gives the impression that she is incompetent but still likes to join in the fun, overestimating her own abilities. I hope she can just tolerate it for now. The author needs to work harder to update it, and it is best to make her a god. Then there will be 2 million words to chase.

Not bad, the heroine is very compassionate and loves to join in the fun. Whenever something happens, she wants to go see her. Grandma can't hold her back, but this is also a way to understand the world. It's just that the heroine's mind is a bit too busy, and she has a lot to think about. It is recommended that you write less about the heroine's psychological activities, so that it is easier to maintain a sense of mystery, because I feel that the more psychological activities there are, and the more readers understand, the more they feel that the heroine is not very smart... Grandma was so kind to her. She only took out a few eggs from what she collected along the way. Grandma only ate half of them. She gave the crying child just a piece of candy at first, and later gave her a watermelon? I feel a little unworthy of my grandma.

The heroine travels through ancient times, but it is a world where there are ghosts and a little bit of immortality. I feel that the plot is good, but the golden finger is too big. The heroine has a shopping system. The things in it are cheap and very powerful. I buy them all every time. After watching too much, I feel that it is not interesting. Some of the content is also brushed off [face covering]. She should be the heroine of Shuangwen

Give yourself a five-star, encourage and give yourself some motivation, hehe I write it somewhere else for fear that people won't see it! Just write it here! The protagonist is indeed not a child who lacks love, but the family environment deliberately cultivates the heroine to be very righteous. After all, in my setting, she is the bridge between the three worlds. Her destiny is determined, and her soul and body are clearly used. Bai (of course, I'm not a stepmother)... At present, she has a big heart, looks innocent in everything, and has a stupid brain (because her soul is damaged). But in fact, she understands it most of the time, but she knows that she can't think too much, so many treasures are very angry when they see it! Well! Let me explain it here first. It is true that a lot of holes have been dug, but they have not been filled in. Everyone may be confused, and many treasures are too lazy to read... I have no confidence to continue writing. I was ill some time ago (visited the doctor frequently), and then broke my leg (now I am jumping on one leg with crutches). It is estimated that there will be no updates for a long time. I would like to say sorry to everyone here. I have failed to live up to the trust of the treasures left behind... With tears...

The more I read, the less I see. Is it because I'm looking at the author in the front and the author is spreading out in the back?

Very nice, recommended