(Warm reminder, the first 29 chapters are difficult to read, it is better to start eating from chapter 30) (No system) (Non-death rebirth) (The strongest is always fate) (Slow down and enter with caution) On a rainy night, on the bone-cold rooftop, Qiao Lin witnessed the tragic death of his mother. After losing his mind and killing the murderer, he jumped off the high building and prepared to commit suicide. The spirit that resided in his body The evil spirit used his ability to tear apart time and space to save his master. The unstable time and space sent Qiao Lin to another world. This is a world where evil spirit messengers and magic exist. The enemies may be humans, but there are also various monsters. As an adventurer, he travels around the world. With this strongest evil spirit, he will uncover the truth of all conspiracies...
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@ItalyImportPurpleYan recommends you read the explanation of the sense of expectation in novels. I think the problems you are encountering when writing now are similar to mine. From beginning to end, I feel that the beginning and succession of the story you wrote have no sense of hierarchy. It gives the impression that it starts inexplicably and then ends straight away. It will not drag the reader's emotions and arrange the structure of the novel [face covering]. I still hope you will work hard [smile]
It feels pretty good, but it just feels a little jumpy. I could describe it in more detail [smile]
@ItalyImportPurpleYan recommends you read the explanation of the sense of expectation in novels. I think the problems you are encountering when writing now are similar to mine. From beginning to end, I feel that the beginning and succession of the story you wrote have no sense of hierarchy. It gives the impression that it starts inexplicably and then ends straight away. It will not drag the reader's emotions and arrange the structure of the novel [face covering]. I still hope you will work hard [smile]
It feels pretty good, but it just feels a little jumpy. I could describe it in more detail [smile]