Five Immortals*

The author's conception is very logical, and it is only slightly inferior to the biography of a mortal cultivating immortality. The difference is that it is a little wordy, and there are many irrelevant or passing details written too much. Sincere words, I hope it will be helpful to the author.

I like it very much, this book is good

Five Stars is somewhat similar to Ergen's writing style, so it should be imitated. The plot and writing are very good, and it is definitely a refreshing novel in Tomato! It's just that too much writing is wasted in many places. If we continue writing it like this, from Nascent Soul, Transformation to God, and then to the fairy world, we will probably write 3,000 chapters. There is too much foreshadowing in the early stage, which will give people a headache! In addition, the paragraph format is too long, and sometimes there is too much text in one paragraph, so it is divided into shorter paragraphs. Just have more paragraphs, and it will not be so tiring to read! Novels Novels are concise and concise, and enjoyable! Such a long paragraph is as tiring as reading a long composition! I can't stand it! This is the third time I have browsed this novel. The first two times I discarded it because of the large paragraphs and long text, which made browsing too laborious. Fortunately, I finally finished watching it for the third time. I really liked it, to be honest! The author's writing is very good and the story is well described! Compared to the crowd of followers in Tomato, it is simply so much better. I just hope that the author will streamline it. I have read 900 chapters and still have no clue. Just thinking about it gives me a headache! I can guarantee that if the author doesn't finish the book, it will be around 3,000 chapters! Even the fairy world has this narrative, 5,000 is not enough. I also hope that no matter how the author writes, he must finish it! I will come back to continue chasing in the future, come on, author! You are a potential stock, and you are expected to become a god

Yes, traditional mortals practice immortal literature. Regardless of the content, at least there are no major logical problems, and the villain's IQ is normal. Compared with the current Xiaobai articles, fast food articles and studio articles, it is more than a little better. Just don't compete with those platinum bosses. There are too many narrations in the middle of the dialogue, too many unnecessary explanations, and the plot development is too "copied".

This is a very good novel. As long as I have been reading books for so many years, there are not many novels that I can read. Apart from the two books about cultivating immortals, this is the only one.

It is more readable than most novels of the same type. It has no pretense, the story is logically analyzed, the language is fluent, and the author has a profound literary background. A lot better than that Ergen and his ilk, but the rating is so low? Can't understand.

Does the author have any other works? Really well written

Such a beautiful book, why is it only rated 5.6?

I think it looks good

I hope that the protagonist will find his master early. When writing about the Five Immortals Sect and the Chaos Sect later, he can write that the techniques of both sects are suitable for the protagonist. After all, didn't I say before that the Five Immortals Sect and the Chaos Sect are equally matched. They have been fighting for many years and both have not been destroyed. It can be seen that the Chaos Sect is also powerful, but the author has better ideas. I hope the author can come up with something better than this [Sending Hearts]

The plot of this book is very good. Whether it is the cultivation logic or the plot logic, it is quite reasonable. What I like most is the description of the plot. The language is meticulous and reasonable. The character of the protagonist is still suitable for the evolution of the plot of the novel.

Two, two, two, how to use these words, the author has to add up.

This book is quite good. Whether it is the character's personality, family, growth, cultivation, strategy, or love, it is all written with flesh and blood. The plot has ups and downs and the characters are lifelike! It is true that it is difficult to become an immortal than to reach the sky. Great book!

This book is good. I feel that the author is building a big world of cultivation. I hope the author can build a world like Jin Yong. Li Yan now has two children. There will be cultivation stories about these two children in the future. It can be more bloody. I have read an online novel about modern gangsters, and it also builds a gangster world. Suddenly I can't remember who wrote it. It was Zhao Chenghu, followed by The Wolf Wang Lang, and behind it, Tiger Roaring and Wu Xiaobei.

It's a really good book. Immortality novels become more and more difficult to write as you go to the end. This book as a whole has maintained a very high standard. It has more than a thousand chapters and is still very exciting.

It's pretty good. The first copy is very good. It's slow to warm up and the language is not verbose. There may be a bit too much background. The rest of the story is really hard to describe in one sentence. It is written very diligently and is not vulgar, but it is really boring. The other characters are all created by narration and direct characterization. The protagonist uses poison and poison. The key is to use poison even if he kills people. Everyone in the sect knows about the fragmented poison body, and the outside world does not even speculate. The skills are even more awesome. The sect is either cultivating immortals or inheriting it. It has been inherited for millions of years. Making money depends entirely on killing people and selling goods. All abilities are born and practiced. You can calculate with a flash of your mind. Except for the first few copies, there is really no ups and downs. It is really tasteless to eat and a pity to throw away. The protagonist relies entirely on martial arts and poisoning his body, which is monotonous and boring. In addition, the narration is super lengthy, for fear that readers will not understand it or find loopholes. Another thing I dislike is Haoran Zhengqi, uh, Ge Ying.

Write a paragraph that can explain three chapters [laughing and crying]

This book has connotation, inheritance, excitement, and emotion (not the kind of love between men and women, the old and the new, the love of master and disciple, and the love of brotherhood) Like it 👍🏻

This book should be rated 9.5 Or above. It would be better to update more chapters.

The rating is low. The writing is good.

The writing is good. I suggest that the author should pay attention to the wording. For example, if the teacher is a modern word, try to use words such as master or master to have a stronger sense of substitution. Try to use as few modern words as possible. Using too many modern words will give people a nondescript feeling!

I pulled the novel from another website, but the author is not there [laughing and crying]

The whole day is fine, but why does Pig's Knuckle basically rely on poison or physical training every time to win? Such a powerful Five Elements Kung Fu is basically not used, except for the characteristic of pure mana? What would happen to pig's feet without this poisonous body?

Full of life! Nice writing!

Looking forward to the encounter between Mu Guyue and Li Yan Can you update a few more chapters a day? You are the one I have seen who updates the least every day. Don't let me scold you.

Wonderful, rigorous plot

You can't post ten or eight chapters at a time

It's not finished yet, otherwise there would be no problem with the five-star rating. It's a good book that you should read immediately.

The scenes are grand and the thinking is meticulous. It is an upgraded version of the old-school martial arts books, and the pace is slower than the current Shuangwen.

This book is quite exciting. The progress of the plot is relatively slow. It often uses a third perspective to describe the story. Although it seems slow in some places, it also makes the whole story fuller. Compared with Han Li in the mortal world, Li Yan in the book is closer to human nature. He not only takes care of his parents and relatives, but also has richer experiences with the heroines and supports each other. This is true. I hope the author can work hard and don't let such a good book stop being updated [Like][Like][Like]