Malfoy Manor, in Wiltshire, England, was especially abuzz that day.
Lucius Malfoy paced anxiously outside a door. Before long, a baby’s cry rang out from within, and our young master, Draco Malfoy, came into the world.
But no one knew that inside Draco’s little body lived a soul from the modern world.
At the age of six, he awakened a golden finger that let him video-call people. On his very first call, he ran into Captain Jack Sparrow and was dumped into the world of Pirates of the Caribbean. Can you imagine a six-year-old being hunted by the Navy every day under Captain Jack’s leadership?
Starting in the Caribbean, he’ll roam across the heavens.
(Also, the protagonist is reborn, not possessing someone else’s body, so he may be a little childish when he’s young.)
Pirates of the Caribbean is too poorly written. What's the use of the protagonist being a witness? It's of no use at all and the sentences written in the novel don't make sense. It's so uncomfortable to watch. Please don't separate what the next person says from the actions he does next time. When the last person says something, the action is followed by the next person's action and then the next paragraph is what the next person says. How do you let people read this novel? What attracts readers is neither cool novels nor developmental novels, neither infinite flow nor behind-the-scenes novels, daily novels nor romance novels. I don't know what series you belong to. Did you create it first? Then I can say that it is useless at all. If you write it to attract readers, you just read it for yourself. It is uncomfortable to watch and it doesn't take a lot of thinking to watch. You don't have to think about the plot at all. Just looking at your grammar is already very uncomfortable and I can't stand it at all.
It feels a little messy in some places, and even confusing in some places. The subject matter is quite new, and I feel like the world view is too big and I don't have a good grasp of it.
It's so messy that it makes you feel uncomfortable
A bit missing
If you keep working hard to write a novel, just write it well. The plot is too messy and useless.