When I Broke into Shibuya at the Beginning, I Just Wanted to Run Away!

Generally speaking, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. I read the latest chapter from the first chapter in one breath. It feels good and is quite suitable for me. The writing is not bad and the plot rhythm is not sluggish. I hope the author can work hard and continue writing~ Well, let's talk about the not-so-good aspects of the senses. First of all, I am not very fond of system flow. I can't even stand a system that can interact freely with the protagonist. As for the reasons, there are just a few reasons: the protagonist is almost invincible, the plot is like running water, you can guess the ending when you see the beginning, and the existence of supporting characters is ignored. It is like an anti-Japanese drama, and the villains' IQs are collectively offline. Although this work itself has stepped on some of my fault points, I hope that it is also recommended that the author can add something of his own on the basis of the original work. After all, everyone who reads fan works has read the original work, and readers also hope to see different and exciting stories through fan works, rather than an iron-clad ending.

This book is great👍🏻, but it still lacks a love line. Since Chenyue is said to be his wife, he has to write a love line.

Okay, I've finished reading it. But there are some small shortcomings. Why are there no pictures of those beauties? Hopefully there will be more below, and I'm not talking about pictures, but beauties. [Understood]

So well written. There are always unexpected and wonderful plots. I wish the author will write better and better, come on, author!

It's still comfortable to read this book, at least it doesn't leave too many regrets. It's much better than the Xialan I've been looking for before. Those are either invincible at the beginning and finish the game with ten or twenty cards, or they are weak duck skins. They have no effect and can only follow the original plot. In the end, the regrets are all regrets. So what do I see him doing? I originally read fanfics to make up for the regrets. If it can't make up for the regrets, then I might as well read the original work. This is the only one that is good. At least the protagonist is not invincible at the beginning, nor is he a weak duck skin. I feel very comfortable with this slow-moving feeling. In fact, I feel that the author's setting is quite good. It will not make the protagonist directly become Wuji Xialan, nor will it make the protagonist have no room to fight back against the seven souls. He can defeat the seven souls without being invincible. He also changed some regrets in the original text to make Xiang Li Lao The master came back successfully, and the dragon did not die because of the separation. Although it is indeed quite heroic, I still want to say that I will die if I can, and my uncle Yao is back again. Really watching Xia Lan, what I feel most distressed about is Shan Guiyao. The boy defected. In addition to the leader who broke the formation, Zuo Shi and Xiang Li knew about it. No one knew about it. In the end, he personally killed his mentor who picked him up from the street and taught him his teachings. , Even though it was his mentor who asked him to do it, he was able to do it and still hold back and not let himself collapse. I admire him very much. , Because the kindness of being raised before he was born is very great, and from the original text of Shangui Yao, he does not seem to be an emotionless person, especially when no one understands him. The commander of the broken formation understands him, but he cannot tell the commander of the broken formation, because he is in Shibuya, and all the other Xialan, no one understands him, and I really admire him sometimes, so now that he is back, I feel good. As for this book, I actually recommend that people who like reading Xia Lan and want to make up for their regrets should read it. It is quite good. Although it will not directly become a masterpiece, I personally feel that it is quite refreshing.

I commented here, and I suggested writing about Kai Er, because of Ares' king-level armor Shura, Ares' armor forging technology, and Ares' Star Destroyer Cannon, Lufa once shot a planet, and then he could go to the world of the mythical beast King Kong, for example, in the first season, because in the The first season is about the Five Elements, and you can play with a mecha. After the end of Divine Beast King Kong, go to the world of the first season of Yuanqi Star Soul, feel the power of the earth, and create powerful mechas. The Ultraman world covers a wide range, and the multi-universe has been released, and there are only a few hundred chapters. I can't finish it, and it's not a problem to end it in Ultraman. Noah's power of time and space can also find the coordinates of the original universe, and Reggio's power of the universe can also guide me back. In fact, Star Travels can also be included in the Ultraman world, because the Ultraman universe is a complete universe. A complete universe, a very complete one, everything is very reasonable. Countless universes have been born in the big universe, and there will also be universes like Star Travels. After all, there are still gods in some worlds. It doesn't matter if they are not incorporated. In fact, Star Travels itself can write no less than Ultraman Universe.

I really like this kind of refreshing article, and I look forward to traveling through the extreme Yin world later.

It's very interesting. The author should update it as soon as possible, and the plot is also very interesting. It's not a mindless plot, it's more of a cool story, and it doesn't follow the protagonist the whole time. It has also made some changes, and has some of its own things. If the author finishes writing Xia Lan, he can write about painting the spiritual master of Jianghu.

I've lost my memory a bit, so I'll go back and watch the anime again.

Damn it, my likes are 520

The writing is very good, but there are pitfalls in the author Xia Lan. Can you fill it in? [Thinking][Thinking]

Yes, this is the first fan fiction about Xia Lan that I have read. I hope it won't be interrupted. Qiongqi. Taotie. Chaos.. I should stop writing about all the worlds. [Laughter] [Laughter] [Laughter] [Laughter] [Laughter] or novels about the world of Xialan will also work. [Laughing evilly][laughing evilly][laughing evilly]

This book is very interesting, but the author doesn't plan to update it for a long time [face covering]

The author is great. I feel good about reading it. I give you five stars [laughs][laughs][laughs][laughs]

It's really good. Don't end it so early, okay? The author is great

Great writing, please support it.

To be honest, I always feel like I have read a similar book in Tomato called "Traveling from Xialan"

Yes, it's good, but the author can open up his imagination, such as the space spirituality of Sanhun no Dai, to further develop it.

There are few books of this type, but they are quite good. Recommended

It's so beautiful, please give it a thumbs up, author! The rating dropped. Help the author give it another five stars.

A good book on the Internet

So cool, wow wow wow

I hope the author can write the two of them back to Xia Lan in the future, after all, there is a Taotie in the back

It's very beautiful. I hope the next world will be a wind curse.

There aren't many Tomato novels written about Xia Lan. The ones I've seen are all inappropriate for me. It's hard to find them [note]

It was well written, but I felt that the plot progressed a bit too fast (compared to the original plot)

Compared with the one I read before, your writing is very good. Can you add some fake leaves skills? He looks very handsome and has a command.

I hope the author can write well and don't finish it badly. It's full of memories.

This author is awesome, this is the best chivalrous novel I have ever read.

The writing is so good, the plot is reasonable, the combat power is reasonable, orderly and smooth, and not brainless. The best thing is the characterization. Just be careful not to collapse when writing next.