She Refines Her Heart in the World of Mortals in the Otome Game

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In fact, the writing is good, but I personally think that there are too many emotionally intimate scenes in the snake demon, and it is not a problem of scarcity but unevenness. Since this is a novel with multiple male protagonists, it is best to have an even number of scenes, otherwise it will be very uncomfortable to watch. Here are some possible surprises. 1. The heroine's character is neither aggressive nor decisive, nor is she the kind of person who has no emotions in her heart. She will describe the hero as blushing and heartbeating, and the hero will become soft-hearted when she cries. There are many scenes in the article where the hero will feel sympathy and then compromise when he cries. 2. Some of the heroine's intimate behaviors are not under her control, but are coerced or she dare not resist. I can understand it, but this kind of plot is really frustrating. Maybe it's because the book hasn't reached its climax yet. The heroine doesn't have the strength and keeps compromising. The book is very good, but she doesn't get along with me, and she can only hold back when she's bullied. It's not very comfortable for readers. Maybe things will improve later when the heroine has her own strength. I hope the author will continue to work hard.

It's really good. The heroine is really lovable [admiration][admiration] And the master is so doting on the heroine! The male protagonist here likes Master the most. His love for the female protagonist is restrained and forbearing, and it comes naturally. But the remaining men are not bad hehehe [shy] But the female protagonist's previous life was really miserable. I feel sorry for the female protagonist [almost crying] [almost crying]

Great, please update, I read it all in one day. Hehe, the description of the heroine's fighting scenes is so handsome and detailed. Moreover, the heroine's mood changes are also very subtle. [Sending Hearts] What impressed me deeply was that the descriptions of the sacrifices and blessings, purple clothes, blue clothes, and red clothes, were all described in detail, and I wanted to see it too. It was updated very quickly [Sending Hearts], and the characters in it are quite bold and open-minded. I also saw a bit of admiration [shyness], unity and friendliness.

Well, I give five stars to the author for his hard work. One thing is that the heroine's character is too soft. It's my fault. I didn't read the copy carefully and it's not a strong female character. Since it is my own hobby, I can write whatever makes me happy. Thank you very much [Sending my heart] [Sending my heart]

It's a very good book that makes my love spin. The author must follow it to the end and don't stop updating it! ! ! The characters written by Da Da are quite vivid. The story may have some shortcomings, but the writing style is really good. The appropriate psychology of the characters, the appropriate language, and the appropriate change of perspective are all perfect (*ﾟ∀ﾟ*) I express my gratitude to the author.

It's beautiful and exciting, I especially like the unconscious heartthrob of the heroine. I particularly like Master and Rao Xi, and of course I also love the others. I hope to see the book finished this summer. [Adoration][Adoration][Admiration]

It looks good. I hope there won't be a male protagonist in the main text. It's good without cp.

Super pretty! ! ! Highly recommended! The character creation is very full. I like the character Yuekawa very much. Don't be dissuaded by the first chapter. I hope more people will discover this book, and I hope the author will update it more!

Beautiful! ! ! Love this unconscious heartthrob! ! !

I originally wanted to give it four stars, but the author is not easily [shy]. I would like to make a sincere suggestion, I hope it can be updated more, the number of chapters is too few, and the relationship between the heroine and the hero is also small, I hope it can be adopted [Blow kiss]

It's pretty cool. I really like Yuekawa right now. It's the heroine. Although I know she has such a character, and there's nothing wrong with her, maybe she just hates the iron, she's a little angry, and she's just like teaching a child to do homework, she's stubborn and won't change. After reading Chapter 74, I don't know what the rest of the plot will be. Maybe I'll continue reading when I feel calmer.

Super nice, hope no cp

The writing is great. I look forward to the future plot. I would like to ask DaDa by the way (can there be a non-CP extra chapter at the end? 😍😍😍)

It's so beautiful, it's very productive [sending my heart] [sending my heart]

Very well written, great!

Author, what kind of treasure are you? I hope I can see the ending of this book before I get married o( ❛ᴗ❛ )o Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I came back to read this book again and I still think it's good. I like the male mother and there are a lot of little snake scenes.

The plot is very exciting. I hope there will be more updates and the ending will be cp-free.

It's very beautiful, I hope it doesn't end badly. There should be more authors, I can't get enough of this concubine [crying]

It's quite good-looking. I think it's to my liking and I'm not aggrieved. Although I hated Jingmo at first, I later found it okay. Anyway, it's quite good-looking. Also, the author should not stop updating. [Learned] [learned] [learned] [learned] [eat melon] [eat melon] [eat melon] And the name of Raoxi is nice

Quite pretty. Confession

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking, good-looking

Super sexy, hehehe

Ah, I stopped updating for two months [cover face][cover face][cover face][cover face]

Damn it, Master, let's become the male protagonist

Author, is this a trap🕳️? Consider filling it out? In fact, I am still looking forward to it [shy][thinking][sending heart]

Very well written The details of the plot can be carefully considered, the writing is also good, and the characters are quite crowded. It's also fun to watch the heroine's emotions change.

It's very well written, I'm looking forward to the next episode.

It's really beautiful, very exciting, different from ordinary roads

A book I really like [Adore][Adore]