Doomsday Game: Beset by a Yandere Shota at the Beginning

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How should I put it? These four stars are for Lu Kong and Xingyin. As a fifth-grade student, this writing style is actually good, but for readers, the author's description is too brief. In fact, if you expand it, you can have more words and the reading experience will be better. There are too many things in the novel. West has no explanation, and the world view can still be written. The protagonist returns five days before the start of the game, and the time is too tight. In fact, you can choose to prepare earlier, slow down the pace, and make the character depiction richer and more complete. Of course, this is all my opinion. Good luck, author😊

It's so beautiful, especially the pairing of Xingyin and Lu Kong, they're so sweet! I'm so excited! I hope the author will not make them too sad [laughing][laughing][laughing][laughing][laughing][like][like][like][like][like][like]

I kind of don't understand what's going on. It's fine in the front and I don't understand why in the back.

That must be praised, I just hope there are more plots between Xingyin and Lu Kong, [laughing]

So beautiful. Hey hey hey.

I hope to be more perverted The abbreviation is not perverted enough. The author's imagination needs to be improved [laughter]

Thank you to the author for the wonderful novel

Very good, there is a lot of room for improvement

I'm a pervert and I feel perverted when I see it [laughs evilly] It's so awesome

Create another group of authors

So can the author send the q to the group?

Love it, love it, love it so much

Can you resend the group number?

Not bad, just a bit streamlined but overall it looks good. Good luck, author.