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It's both fake flour, so why not give it five stars? Although the writing style is a bit immature and there are quite a few parentheses at the beginning, it is still acceptable. Next, I will make some suggestions. First of all, don't collapse your character too much, as it will be easy to lose it. Secondly, the heroine's character should be given to the protagonist first. It should not be a popular character, but it should not be so abrupt. The third thing is that some of the inappropriately described passages can be imitated from similar passages in other books. Of course, don't imitate them all, just 20 to 30% is enough. Fourth, don't show the male protagonist in the early stage. What I mean is don't show the male protagonist in the early stage. That would be too abrupt. Fifth, you don't have much confidence in the early stage, so don't write emotional scenes. Otherwise, it will be awkward to write, and you will not be able to take it back later. Sixth, the word count can be high, but it must not be easily seen by everyone. Finally, the sign-in process needs to be presented smoothly, preferably in some details. Parentheses are always not good. I have only read the first few chapters. Maybe I have said too much in some of them, or you may have corrected some of them, or there may not be any of these problems at all, but I still hope you can read this comment, Ciao~

I am actually the first to review this book.

Dear author, this book is very well written, keep up the good work! [Send heart][Send heart][Send heart]

You may not believe it, but I once again aroused the idea of ​​writing a novel by reading the novel written by the author, and I became a lot more confident... The five stars are considered to be a thank you to the author.

This work is better, keep it up₍˄·͈༝·͈˄*₎◞ ̑̑

This book is quite nice.

Emmm... How to evaluate it? Very good

Hey ;-), come on, author! ! !

Author, if you have the ability to read novels, you must also have the ability to update them. Why are the words one, two, three and four not allowed to be lowercase?

It's pretty good. If the author works hard to improve it, it will be even better. Do you have a fan base? [I learned it]

What should I say... New author, please work hard

The author is great, he writes well, keep up the good work

The plot is okay, the action scenes are also good, but the words are a bit short, the summary is still okay, keep up the good work

Really strong

Come on, author, be more diligent!

I don't understand why the author deleted it [Thinking]