The Strongest Corruption System

Stop complaining, don't you know how you died? Why should we blame heaven and earth and blame our parents? Forget it, don't overdo it. Your shortcoming, author, is that you are not lyrical. You don't write too much where you should write more, and you write a lot of words where you shouldn't write too much. If you want to write about the protagonist's grievances, you should first write about his sufferings to find a sense of resonance, so that readers can have a sense of resonance and empathy. No matter how you write grievances, you can do it. Or simply don't write so many redundant words, first make the protagonist a person with great resentment, and don't complain too frequently, otherwise everyone will only see you complaining and forget that your main line is the feeling of satisfaction after becoming dark and strong, and then the protagonist's emotional range is too big. In this way, there will be some inexplicable dialogues and inexplicable descriptions. It is difficult for the corresponding emotions to exist before there is a sense of substitution. The description must be controlled evenly and clearly, otherwise you will be like me like me after reading three chapters and still not having a sense of substitution. If there is a heroine, there will be no heroine. Don't write the protagonist too infatuated. , You can go online to look up detailed descriptions and idioms, which can make your writing less rigid, and at the same time transition the grievances in the middle. This novel is not even one star in my mind now. It needs to be refined and improved. I will take a look at it from time to time, and I will change the rating when you feel better.

There is a heroine but the heroine is dead but there is no heroine. The first dozen or so chapters are too sad to watch.

Too much bullshit

Five-star praise arrangement