The Long Road to Immortality

It is the first time for a newbie to write a book, so it is inevitable that there will be inadequacies. If there are any shortcomings, you are welcome to point them out and I will improve them. However, it is difficult to agree with everyone, and it is inevitable that some book friends still don't like it. If you don't like it, please show your respect. This book was written by the author for his childhood dream, so he will stick to it. Finally, thank you to all the book friends for their support and encouragement 🙂!

At present, I have read sixty chapters. The author is still very careful and writing is not easy. Some suggestions: The details of this book lack roundness, the conception of the jade pendant is too simple, the protagonist and Wang Xue's Qi training period are upgraded too quickly, lack of details, the foundation building at the age of sixteen is unreliable, the protagonist upgrades with the help of the jade pendant, the idea is too simple, the magical effect of the jade pendant should be gradually reflected with the protagonist's cultivation, the book on cultivating immortals is not The ellipsis is used instead, which is different from the myth. The plot progresses slowly and becomes interesting, like killing monsters to obtain beast elixirs and useful materials. The more detailed the elixir training technique, the more difficult it is to reflect the alchemist's difficulty. If you don't practice for three or five years during the Qi training period, you will not be able to produce high-grade elixirs. This is still the case if you have talent. If cultivating immortals was so easy, then we would stop working and everyone would just go cultivate to immortals. You can become a martial arts master without spiritual roots, what do you think? Encourage authors to write with heart and bring readers more favorite works, five-star encouragement! Let me add that the author uses less modern vocabulary in his article, such as meters, hours, kilometers, and popular pronunciations. That shouldn't appear in a fairy tale.

I'm optimistic about you. When will the protagonist learn more skills? I hope the author doesn't write a female protagonist.

Oh, it's okay. I finished it by accident. I look forward to the author's continued support and updates.

The writing is good, the thinking is clear, and the golden finger of the jade pendant is very popular.

Is the girl in the author the heroine?

Okay, why is the score so low?

One volume of book, I don't know the taste of meat in March

It's okay, just don't write about being obsessed.

May I ask, is it a single heroine or two heroines?