[Two male leads] Su Mo transmigrates into the world of tomb raiding and discovers that he's lying inside a coffin!! A System appears out of nowhere, and he fuses with the Vermilion Bird bloodline to become a Faqiu Celestial Official!
[Ding-dong!]
[Congratulations, Host! You have successfully fused with the Vermilion Bird bloodline!]
[Congratulations, Host! You have obtained the Yin-Yang Divine Command Art!]
[Congratulations, Host! You have obtained the Faqiu Divine Seal!]
[Congratulations, Host! You have obtained the Qinglan Divine Sword!]
[Congratulations, Host...]
Su Mo had planned to cut a dashing figure on his own, but...
Zhang Qiling: A-Mo...together!
Wu Xie: Brother Mo! Stay with us!
Fatty: Master Mo! Wherever you're going, take me along!
I hope this novel won't be suddenly taken off the shelves in the future😔
It looks good, it looks good, it looks good. Please update it quickly, but don't be too tired, author.
There are some problems with the logic of this book, the writing style is very immature, and the connections in some places are not natural, such as:
① When the author wrote that Wu Erbai asked Wu Xie to participate in the forbidden area, the transition was not natural, and it felt like a mechanical application.
② Zhang and Mo are progressing a bit fast. Logically speaking, they should have a long and steady relationship, allowing them to develop feelings for each other during their adventures (going to the ground).
③The audience didn't have any doubts about Mo becoming smaller, and weren't the series of changes that happened when Mo merged with Qilin blood live broadcast? If not, at least write it down. For example, write that it will be automatically blocked when privacy is involved. I won't tell you how to write it specifically.
④ Are they so high-tech now? Live streaming bracelet? You can also say private, I won't say anything.
⑤This book is very much like a work that was written when the brain was hot. If you want to continue writing, I suggest the author write an outline.
The above statement is based on what I said after reading the author's current update to Chapter 8. The author may have posted it after finishing it. I suggest you check it again. The fast-paced style of novels is a common problem in current writing. The fast pace is very exciting, but at the same time it can also make you feel tired. Slowing down the pace appropriately may make the impression better.
Here's what it's really like to read a fast-paced novel:
I read a book a few days ago, but I won't mention its name here.
While reading that book, I felt okay, but once something distracts your attention, you will feel like you are holding your breath in your heart, which will affect your sense of immersion when you read the book again. Once you quit (for me), you will have the idea that you don't want to continue reading.
Personal opinion, don't comment if you don't like it
Dear author, your book will definitely become popular in the future, but have you not updated it for a long time? I see those comments are all saying you are lazy? But it's really good♡(*´∀`*)(*´∀`*)♡
It's pretty cool, but the update is too slow. Please give it a five-star review first!
Shouldn't it be Wang Yueban?
It looks good, but... It's just... It's... It's a hundred million points short. So... Author, you know what I mean😁
It's so beautiful. I like this book so much.
Author, you haven't updated for a long time. To be honest, I almost forgot about this book. If you update it so late, I won't pay attention. (Don't be lazy) But it's still good. (*^ω^*)
I hope this novel won't be suddenly taken off the shelves in the future😔
It looks good, it looks good, it looks good. Please update it quickly, but don't be too tired, author.
There are some problems with the logic of this book, the writing style is very immature, and the connections in some places are not natural, such as: ① When the author wrote that Wu Erbai asked Wu Xie to participate in the forbidden area, the transition was not natural, and it felt like a mechanical application. ② Zhang and Mo are progressing a bit fast. Logically speaking, they should have a long and steady relationship, allowing them to develop feelings for each other during their adventures (going to the ground). ③The audience didn't have any doubts about Mo becoming smaller, and weren't the series of changes that happened when Mo merged with Qilin blood live broadcast? If not, at least write it down. For example, write that it will be automatically blocked when privacy is involved. I won't tell you how to write it specifically. ④ Are they so high-tech now? Live streaming bracelet? You can also say private, I won't say anything. ⑤This book is very much like a work that was written when the brain was hot. If you want to continue writing, I suggest the author write an outline. The above statement is based on what I said after reading the author's current update to Chapter 8. The author may have posted it after finishing it. I suggest you check it again. The fast-paced style of novels is a common problem in current writing. The fast pace is very exciting, but at the same time it can also make you feel tired. Slowing down the pace appropriately may make the impression better. Here's what it's really like to read a fast-paced novel: I read a book a few days ago, but I won't mention its name here. While reading that book, I felt okay, but once something distracts your attention, you will feel like you are holding your breath in your heart, which will affect your sense of immersion when you read the book again. Once you quit (for me), you will have the idea that you don't want to continue reading. Personal opinion, don't comment if you don't like it
Dear author, your book will definitely become popular in the future, but have you not updated it for a long time? I see those comments are all saying you are lazy? But it's really good♡(*´∀`*)(*´∀`*)♡
It's pretty cool, but the update is too slow. Please give it a five-star review first!
Shouldn't it be Wang Yueban?
It looks good, but... It's just... It's... It's a hundred million points short. So... Author, you know what I mean😁
It's so beautiful. I like this book so much.
Author, you haven't updated for a long time. To be honest, I almost forgot about this book. If you update it so late, I won't pay attention. (Don't be lazy) But it's still good. (*^ω^*)
Good luck! ! ! ! ! !