Received the mission to rescue Naraku? When a 15-year-old quirky high school girl meets the big boss Naraku, what kind of story will happen between them?
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Very general, the author is a novice, right? Character dialogue is a bit like boiled water, just like the dialogue in stage play scripts. It is very straightforward and vernacular, and there is very little description. Other people's stage play scripts at least have some transition descriptions, but you don't have much? The extra chapter is better, and there are more descriptions. I suggest you polish this article first. [Hold face] The dialogue between the characters looks very noisy to the naked eye, and it will disturb the eyes. [Hold face] There is no interval, and the words come out all at once. [Hold face] It makes people not interested in reading [Hold face] (so I skipped to read)
Very general, the author is a novice, right? Character dialogue is a bit like boiled water, just like the dialogue in stage play scripts. It is very straightforward and vernacular, and there is very little description. Other people's stage play scripts at least have some transition descriptions, but you don't have much? The extra chapter is better, and there are more descriptions. I suggest you polish this article first. [Hold face] The dialogue between the characters looks very noisy to the naked eye, and it will disturb the eyes. [Hold face] There is no interval, and the words come out all at once. [Hold face] It makes people not interested in reading [Hold face] (so I skipped to read)
Looks good^ω^
: Super beautiful.