Apocalypse Survival: I’m an NPC

The writing style is okay, but the logic needs to be further strengthened. There must be foreshadowing before the emotional transition, otherwise it will appear too sudden. Try to describe the plot as concisely and clearly as possible, otherwise some readers will not understand it. Hope to keep working hard, come on!

Let's talk more and give some suggestions. The author writes books because of his hobby, not for money.