Original God: I'm Here to Protect You

Come on, author, I'm reading this because it's my first time writing a novel, and I'm here to give you some suggestions. The emotional descriptions and expressions of the characters in the novel need to be strengthened. Here is a suggestion for authors to read other people's novels to look for descriptions of characters' emotional descriptions, appearance descriptions, and action performances. I really can't think of anything else that needs to be strengthened. I'll think of it later and I'll add it.

Fill in one more word after "Goddess Pi Guan" and put it later, because the story line of the traveler hasn't started yet, so it would be too abrupt to put it in the front. (I hope the author can adopt the opinion)

Exploiting the mineral deposits of human intelligence is indispensable to be promoted by adversity. ——"The Count of Monte Cristo"

As the first person to post a book review, I give you five stars.

Come on, great author

Writing a novel is really difficult. It took me a long time to write more than 3,000 words. 😭

It's beautiful, please give it a thumbs up to the author, Aoli

Come on, great author

Five-star review presented

Everything is good, just a little bit lacking

It's well written, but a little lacking.

From a newbie's perspective, you did a good job.

The writing is wonderful, I hope you will continue to write.

In fact, the plot can be slower and more about daily life. You can also write some side plots, such as going out for adventures and so on. Come on.