Another World: Awakening Top Talents at the Beginning

So far, the writing is generally good. After seeing what the author said is the first time to write, my personal feeling is still good. Although the plot is not full of ups and downs, it is also well-founded. The villain is also cautious, and to be more realistic, the male protagonist dotes on the female protagonist, and the female protagonist protects her husband like crazy, but it's a bit too sweet. Summarized a few points. The first point: The plot is currently developing slowly, after all, it is only in the early stages. The fighting aspect is relatively intuitive and not sloppy. The writing is not particularly numerical, and it is not a one-panel chapter. There is a small hole in it, which is why my lightning power was exposed. There will definitely be an answer later. Second point: Only a few characters have been expressed, and the writing is basically close to the facts. It would be better if some passers-by could be added, or as a partner team once or twice, instead of just being a five-person team, or a two-person team would make the senses better. The protagonist's parents are still two good people, but they are by no means ordinary! The starting point is that the protagonist's mother looks very young and good-looking, and the heroine's mother is the same, but the heroine's father is the richest man, so the male protagonist is still a mystery, and the Chinese God of War has not introduced it in detail. From this starting point, it can be seen that the hero's father not only opened a company, but the probability of becoming the God of War is 60%. Forty percent are foreign civilizations (for a better world view). If the male and female protagonists break up (meaning that the female protagonist knows that she is low-dimensional and does not want to restrict the male protagonist because of herself, and then the protagonist grows up because of this inner demon, and then learns...), Then the connection with the outside world can be seamless without being so awkward. The protagonist's good roommate is also a relatively cute child. The number of pictures is too few to express. We can learn from Swallow's overall view and world view. Science fiction still needs to have a worldview. The third point is that the characterization of the protagonist still hasn't grown up so far. After all, he is still young. I haven't experienced the storm yet, but the part where I almost died trying to save the heroine was quite embarrassing. This is a "young" author after all. The heroine's character portrayal is "younger" than the male protagonist. You can also learn from the three years and six months of Devouring. (Sci-fi study of Devouring, Taxing is also good) (Character appearance, clothing, and atmosphere can be borrowed from Jianlai and Xuezhong). This is not plagiarism. You are borrowing rhetorical techniques and scene descriptions. You can only rely on yourself to determine the direction of the plot. This cannot be learned from. (Why learn from others? Because what others write is good. Taking the strengths of hundreds of schools of thought and taking advantage of their shortcomings is not called plagiarism, it is called learning.) (Don't give me a pen to write such trolling words. Since I can publish these methods, I can also do it. But I don't have the intention to write. After all, I am very tired from going to work every day.) I originally wanted to give it four stars, but thinking about it being the author's first time writing, it was really good to write it like this. Five stars. No matter how many comments I make, I will always write down the reasons, and I won't be bragging without thinking.

The book is very good. This is the only cool novel I have read so far that has a heroine and does not collapse. It is not a harem, but it is better than a harem. Especially since this is the author's first time writing, the results are very good.

So far, this article is quite satisfactory and has no poisonous points. However, the author said that it was his first time writing and it gave me a good impression. Come on!

It's pretty good. The male protagonist is dark and warm, and the female protagonist is sweet, clingy, and protective of her husband. I love it. I hope the author doesn't want to be a eunuch (chopper warning)

Ok, very good, come on, work hard, author, come on, I am optimistic about you, pay attention to your health, I wish the author all the best, good health, good luck every year, stay safe, come on, work hard

The dog-food part is okay, but there are too many plots between the male and female protagonists. Here is a plot/dog head of Xu Man and Ye Tian.

The works written by the author are really good, containing both reality and room for fictional imagination. There is a lot more fun and determination in the ethereal world. The theme and the setting of the general environment are what I like. Come on＾0＾~, I hope the update will be faster. Two chapters a day is too little. The author's imagination is OK. Come on baby, I need you.

This is my favorite book. I just hope that the male protagonist can have more powers, otherwise it will be too simple to operate. There is not enough detail in the fighting. After all, this book is about superpowers and nothing else.

The writing is very good, but it's a bit cramped. The rhythm line could be made longer. The system's scenes feel a bit lacking. It is recommended to turn on some functions appropriately. This is already very good for a novice novel. Keep up the good work.

The plot is very good, and the relationship between the male and female protagonists is so good that I am envious of it.

When I saw this book at TM Shuhuang Square, I first saw the cover and thought, what a book. On second thought, it might be a red cover. At first glance, well, it should be. Looking at the introduction again, hey, this name can't be super. Looking at the catalog again, oh, probably not. After taking a look at the plot, I saw a very familiar villain. I turned to the table of contents and looked carefully. This is the book! I looked at the name again and recalled it carefully. Well, that's it.

It's a good watch, I like it. The male protagonist can be both funny and lethal. The heroine is not too lazy, and the royal sister Loli and the beast-eared girl are three times as happy as one wife! Yes, yes, yes, if the author persists, his liver will be finished.

Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง This is my first time writing, so there will inevitably be some shortcomings, but it's already pretty good. If I were to write it, it would probably be even worse hehe😊

The author, the writing of the martial arts drama was not very good in the beginning, but in the later period, I obviously feel that the martial arts drama and the martial arts drama both have good points and shining points. It feels very good-looking and the rhythm of watching is relatively refreshing, because it is not like the original one that talks about escaping from death and then quickly escalates. This one does not have that, it just escalates slowly, and it is not dangerous anyway? It's not like the protagonist is a savior, right? Personal understanding is not to spray!

(⊙O⊙)Wow, this novel is great and fits my taste perfectly. I hope the author can update 100 chapters a day, no, just two chapters. Don't get exhausted. We are still waiting to see the author's novel being serialized in his later years (˘ ³˘)❤

There will be more updates, and five stars will be assigned directly. You can write more about daily life, such as sweet

It looks good, I like Yandere Snow, I hope to get more dog food and daily life

I really like this novel, especially the heroine. After reading so many books, you are the most innovative so far, but the names of the realms are a bit awkward. The others are pretty good.

How can I put it, it is a good book and I like it very much. The heroine has a good image. There is also a fighting scene. I hope the author can write a little more about the protagonist's space ability. I hope it is not just for escape. I hope it can have some attacks. After all, it is space. I hope the author can refer to the skills of spells to fight back. Gojo Satoru. I really like this book. I hope the author will work hard to write it down.

Cheers to new authors. If you have no inspiration, you can take a look at Versatile Mage. The protagonist grows up step by step through adventure. The plot connections are also intertwined. This way readers won't be lost easily. If it's a love story, you can read pure romance novels. Hope it will be helpful to you. Come on! Your book is still great

Great, it takes readers' feelings into consideration. The writing is also very good, but sometimes there are typos. 😂😂😂😂

I have read dozens of chapters, and I feel very good so far. It has the flavor of Long Aotian animation. If this is adapted into animation, I feel it will be no less than some Japanese animations.

This book is still good, and because I have been disgusted by some Genshin Impact players before, so when I see Genshin Impact now, I will think of that person's face. I can't read it, but this book is still good. I gave four stars because the author deleted one in the middle and I really can't understand it.

Good guy, this is a complete change. It's completely different from what I saw before. The change is very good. The Xu Man before made me feel disgusted. He has obviously betrayed the protagonist, but he still shamelessly wants to be forgiven by the protagonist. It's disgusting.

I like your writing style and technique. I find it very comfortable. There are just some minor problems in some places. I hope you will continue writing after the final period. I am a die-hard fan.

Delicate description, the author's writing skills are not weak, and his imagination is wide open. A resolute mother gives birth to a resolute child. The ugly mother is very majestic and admirable. Unconsciously want to know the protagonist's past life, present life and next life

Yes, it's pretty good-looking, but it's just not strong enough in terms of superpowers. It doesn't have any domineering skills or exciting battle scenes. The description isn't outstanding enough. It would be perfect if this aspect could be strengthened. Other points are pretty good.

Remember to put my name on it. It can be called Bai Tianling, Baitian Xuan or Bai Wuya. After writing it down, I will give you a thumbs up. Also, come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

If you keep updating, I will add [like] [like] [like] Come on, come on

The book is very appetizing, but you read too slowly, so I give you five stars, please hurry up╰(‵□′)╯