When Bai Shuran woke up, he found that he was reborn and returned to the time when he was 11 years old. In his previous life, Bai Shuran had messed up the five countries of Wuhu Continent. With the economic lifeline of Wuhu Continent in their own hands, the leaders of the five countries wished her dead and tried every means to get rid of her, but they failed every time. She has been living in conspiracies and assassinations. It is not easy for her to die of old age, but she is reborn. It is so sad. Woohoo~ She decided to change her way of life, marry a young man, have a few babies, and live an ordinary life peacefully. She finally got married, but there were always some unsighted people who interfered with her and her husband's journey of creating a baby.
Reader comments
Come on ⊙▽⊙, it will definitely be popular
I like this very much, especially the heroine's beloved husband (๑♡ω♡๑), and the author is also great✧*｡٩(ˊᗜˋ*)و✧*｡
Overall, this book is only average, but it is relatively good for a novice writer, so I give the author five stars and hope that the author can continue to improve the shortcomings of this book. Secondly, I would like to make some comments that I hope the author can refer to:
①The character dialogue is too bland.
The dialogues in this book are either so-and-so talking or so-and-so laughing. They are too bland and lack the color of dialogue. Readers will gradually lose interest in reading. The author can add some descriptions of facial expressions during the dialogue. Words such as "happy, sad" are too general and cannot arouse the reader's mood. During the dialogue, you can also add actions, details and other descriptions to enrich the character dialogue.
②The psychological description is too little and not exciting.
For example, the psychological description of Qingyu's realization of her mistakes in the book is too bland, and it is difficult for readers to feel Qingyu's regret from it. Some word modification techniques can be used appropriately. For example, "He felt as if his heart had been pricked by needles hundreds of times, and tears of pain could not help but flow down." Wait.
③Things about the male and female protagonists
Among female protagonists, readers will pay more attention to the heroine's temperament and aura, such as domineering and cold, etc., Which can be shown by adding some profile descriptions and facial expressions. The heroine is pretty good so far.
Secondly, regarding the male protagonist, as a male protagonist in a female-dominated world, he can be softer, but not too stupid, and he can be sympathetic, but in moderation.
Okay, I hope the author will pay more attention to these few points. It doesn't matter if you don't see them. Finally, I sincerely wish the author "get better and better, become more popular, and the books he writes are very popular."
Thanks for reading
It's great, I like it so much... I hope more people will read this book, get more praise, and leave more messages... Author, I will always love you
The author's writing style is very good. This kind of sweet story about a heroine is simply amazing. It's very good.
Overall, the book is okay. It can be seen that the author is probably a novice. The content is too dull. The communication skills of the characters have been greatly improved. The content of the dialogue is very plain and intuitive, giving readers a feeling of awkward conversation. There are many typos and omissions. The use of punctuation marks also needs to be improved. The most important thing is that the book As for the setting of the overall structure, the article mentioned that there are a total of five countries. In three countries, women are superior to men, and in two countries, men are inferior to women. There is no problem with these. The problem is that the heroine's parents are from the Guxi Kingdom and the Fengqing Kingdom. One is a boy and the other is a girl. So how do these two have children? If the boy is born, the girl is born? The structure of the world in the book is not rigorous. These five countries are originally living in the same world. It cannot be because women are superior to men and men have children, and men are inferior to women and women have children. This will feel very chaotic. For example, if women are superior to men and are inferior to boys, but in the other two countries, men are superior to women, but it can also be boys, it is just male dominance, then it can also be women are superior to men, and girls are inferior, but women's rights are too strong. I don't know if this book is a novel about women's supremacy, but the novel about women's supremacy is a general term for a type of literary works in which the social status of women is higher than that of men. It is divided into the inversion school, the realism school, the fantasy school and the extreme school. You, the author, belong to the combination of the inversion school and the realism school.
The author above is my opinion on this book, and he also pointed out some shortcomings of the book. I hope it can be of great help to the author୧((•̀ꇴ•))૭⁺✧
Yes, yes, the main character of the heroine is plain and simple. I like articles like this. It is not abusive. The heroine protects her husband. The author writes well. Please update it soon.
Overall, it was okay. It looked very manual in the early stage, but it became much smoother later on. When I think back to when I was pregnant, one person had a pregnancy reaction and another person had a big belly. It makes me laugh to death! Maybe the author himself is confused, but the overall outline of the story is fine! If you don't dislike the writing style, you can read it. The short article doesn't have many branches, and it fills a little bit of holes, but I feel a bit like digging a bigger hole. Anyway, the story is not boring. Except for the early writing, which is a bit messy, I have no urge to abandon the article. I personally think it is worth reading.
Very good-looking, I envy Nanfeng so much. Her wife treats him well, I want one too 😂😂😂
The overall feeling of the book is good, but the characterization needs to be improved, but it can also be seen that the author should be a novice. As a novice, it is already good to write like this, keep up the good work!
Why is the heroine pregnant? Isn't this a boy?
This book is the kind of book that makes your heart ache when you don't read it, but your teeth hurt when you read it.
Marvelous.
There are a few articles.
I hope the author will continue to persevere.
It's so beautiful~ I feel like everyone's emotions are portrayed very delicately
Ahhhhhhhhh, super pretty
Since the man is pregnant? It's really difficult!
Very pretty! ! ! I really like 1V1. It's a woman who is pregnant, but the author made a lot of corrections and made some parts of the story about the man having a big belly, the man wearing loose clothes, and finally the baby being born by the heroine, so it looks a bit messy! Everything else is pretty good! ! !
I haven't finished watching it yet, but I'll give it a star first. (The writing of characters needs to be more stable. The character's personality is a bit wandering. The plot is quite good, but I am a bit chatty personally, so I ran to read other novels [face covering])
Highly recommended to those who are short of books
Not bad, okay, come on^_^
Overall, this book is quite good. The interesting part is in the first half. Personally, I feel the most regrettable part is that it's a girl.
The writing is great, I like it very much!
The author is so awesome. Come on! Support you 😘😘
Are they a pair for life?
*^_^* Super nice writing
Very beautiful, worth recommending
Super humane and good work
Not bad, good, good-looking, good-looking
The author did not indicate that he is a girl [face covering]
Come on ⊙▽⊙, it will definitely be popular
I like this very much, especially the heroine's beloved husband (๑♡ω♡๑), and the author is also great✧*｡٩(ˊᗜˋ*)و✧*｡
Overall, this book is only average, but it is relatively good for a novice writer, so I give the author five stars and hope that the author can continue to improve the shortcomings of this book. Secondly, I would like to make some comments that I hope the author can refer to: ①The character dialogue is too bland. The dialogues in this book are either so-and-so talking or so-and-so laughing. They are too bland and lack the color of dialogue. Readers will gradually lose interest in reading. The author can add some descriptions of facial expressions during the dialogue. Words such as "happy, sad" are too general and cannot arouse the reader's mood. During the dialogue, you can also add actions, details and other descriptions to enrich the character dialogue. ②The psychological description is too little and not exciting. For example, the psychological description of Qingyu's realization of her mistakes in the book is too bland, and it is difficult for readers to feel Qingyu's regret from it. Some word modification techniques can be used appropriately. For example, "He felt as if his heart had been pricked by needles hundreds of times, and tears of pain could not help but flow down." Wait. ③Things about the male and female protagonists Among female protagonists, readers will pay more attention to the heroine's temperament and aura, such as domineering and cold, etc., Which can be shown by adding some profile descriptions and facial expressions. The heroine is pretty good so far. Secondly, regarding the male protagonist, as a male protagonist in a female-dominated world, he can be softer, but not too stupid, and he can be sympathetic, but in moderation. Okay, I hope the author will pay more attention to these few points. It doesn't matter if you don't see them. Finally, I sincerely wish the author "get better and better, become more popular, and the books he writes are very popular." Thanks for reading
It's great, I like it so much... I hope more people will read this book, get more praise, and leave more messages... Author, I will always love you
The author's writing style is very good. This kind of sweet story about a heroine is simply amazing. It's very good.
Overall, the book is okay. It can be seen that the author is probably a novice. The content is too dull. The communication skills of the characters have been greatly improved. The content of the dialogue is very plain and intuitive, giving readers a feeling of awkward conversation. There are many typos and omissions. The use of punctuation marks also needs to be improved. The most important thing is that the book As for the setting of the overall structure, the article mentioned that there are a total of five countries. In three countries, women are superior to men, and in two countries, men are inferior to women. There is no problem with these. The problem is that the heroine's parents are from the Guxi Kingdom and the Fengqing Kingdom. One is a boy and the other is a girl. So how do these two have children? If the boy is born, the girl is born? The structure of the world in the book is not rigorous. These five countries are originally living in the same world. It cannot be because women are superior to men and men have children, and men are inferior to women and women have children. This will feel very chaotic. For example, if women are superior to men and are inferior to boys, but in the other two countries, men are superior to women, but it can also be boys, it is just male dominance, then it can also be women are superior to men, and girls are inferior, but women's rights are too strong. I don't know if this book is a novel about women's supremacy, but the novel about women's supremacy is a general term for a type of literary works in which the social status of women is higher than that of men. It is divided into the inversion school, the realism school, the fantasy school and the extreme school. You, the author, belong to the combination of the inversion school and the realism school. The author above is my opinion on this book, and he also pointed out some shortcomings of the book. I hope it can be of great help to the author୧((•̀ꇴ•))૭⁺✧
Yes, yes, the main character of the heroine is plain and simple. I like articles like this. It is not abusive. The heroine protects her husband. The author writes well. Please update it soon.
Overall, it was okay. It looked very manual in the early stage, but it became much smoother later on. When I think back to when I was pregnant, one person had a pregnancy reaction and another person had a big belly. It makes me laugh to death! Maybe the author himself is confused, but the overall outline of the story is fine! If you don't dislike the writing style, you can read it. The short article doesn't have many branches, and it fills a little bit of holes, but I feel a bit like digging a bigger hole. Anyway, the story is not boring. Except for the early writing, which is a bit messy, I have no urge to abandon the article. I personally think it is worth reading.
Very good-looking, I envy Nanfeng so much. Her wife treats him well, I want one too 😂😂😂
The overall feeling of the book is good, but the characterization needs to be improved, but it can also be seen that the author should be a novice. As a novice, it is already good to write like this, keep up the good work!
Why is the heroine pregnant? Isn't this a boy?
This book is the kind of book that makes your heart ache when you don't read it, but your teeth hurt when you read it.
Marvelous. There are a few articles. I hope the author will continue to persevere.
It's so beautiful~ I feel like everyone's emotions are portrayed very delicately
Ahhhhhhhhh, super pretty
Since the man is pregnant? It's really difficult!
Very pretty! ! ! I really like 1V1. It's a woman who is pregnant, but the author made a lot of corrections and made some parts of the story about the man having a big belly, the man wearing loose clothes, and finally the baby being born by the heroine, so it looks a bit messy! Everything else is pretty good! ! !
I haven't finished watching it yet, but I'll give it a star first. (The writing of characters needs to be more stable. The character's personality is a bit wandering. The plot is quite good, but I am a bit chatty personally, so I ran to read other novels [face covering])
Highly recommended to those who are short of books
Not bad, okay, come on^_^
Overall, this book is quite good. The interesting part is in the first half. Personally, I feel the most regrettable part is that it's a girl.
The writing is great, I like it very much!
The author is so awesome. Come on! Support you 😘😘
Are they a pair for life?
*^_^* Super nice writing
Very beautiful, worth recommending
Super humane and good work
Not bad, good, good-looking, good-looking
The author did not indicate that he is a girl [face covering]
Naixing, I will always accompany you (づ ωど)