People in Fairy Tail: the Beginning of Awakening: Blade Like Fire

I have read Chapter 20 and will give a brief review. Seeing as the updates have been discontinued, I won't scold you. However, if you keep updating, who will stop updating? Chapter 20, the plot is fragmented to say the least. Every place feels like a big mountain. You read a little bit and don't read the rest. The same goes for the system, the golden finger, the main plot, and the characters' intentions. No, are you Hemingway? If you use the iceberg theory, do you use it in every chapter? Two stars top the sky. The protagonist is like an ignorant child, no, he is a child at his age. We can really lose our intelligence, right? Every character feels like a conspiracy theory, forget it, I've stopped updating them all. Summary, don't read, it's a waste of time

Shut it down, writing fan fiction like this is very confusing. Writing a system without levels means that it is not a system, at least it is not a normal system flow. If you write a Shinigami Zanpakutou, you don't continue the Shinigami hierarchy. What the hell are you adding a seal? It makes people feel very confused. Fan fiction is about emotions. Imagine yourself getting the abilities after traveling through time. It is best to add a cheat to cheat every second.

The protagonist doesn't even know what he is doing. Have you seen Fairy Tail? The first-generation president came out with such a powerful sword and even had twelve levels of restrictions to play with! I also didn't understand the plot.

It's really too poisonous. There's nothing about the system. Even if you talk about the Death System, it doesn't exist. If you talk about the Fairy Tail system, it doesn't exist. If you say it's stitched, just stitch it here and there, but it means there's no stitch. The preface and the follow-up are completely incomprehensible. . . .

I don't even know what you wrote, it's so confusing. , My brain is fried, it looks so weird. Indescribably awkward.

I actually read 10 chapters

The weapons you provided are very good, but the protagonist is like an idiot and can't use fighting, let alone there are so many things to complain about that I can't stand it anymore. You just don't understand where you went. Save it for the New Year.

I actually read 20 chapters of what the hell [what]

There is a reason why the rating is so low

I don't know what it means, originality is not like originality, there is a lot of nonsense

Good guy, this is too poisonous

Don't know what you're talking about

What are you writing about? You don't know anything about it.

Okay, GG, I really can't stand it anymore.

It's written inexplicably

Rubbish... Bah

What is this?

Good.

Not great, the writing is too messy

The protagonist is very useless

. . . . No evaluation

What are you writing about? I can't even understand it. A mess.

In a word, the donkey's lips are not the horse's mouth.

I really can't stand it anymore＼(◎o◎)／!

Author, please don't write nonsense if you haven't read the original work.

It can only be said to be a book.

So speechless!

This seems inexplicable, I can't understand it.

This author poisoned

Don't know what to say