Apocalypse

I agree with the two senior drug testers. This thing is not something that ordinary people can read. What I have written is better than this thing. 1. The sentences are not fluent, and there are always some problems when reading. 2. Some brackets will appear inexplicably in the paragraph. Such as: (Sunny) Thunderbolt from the sky. 3. The plot is inexplicable. 4. Take a look at an excerpt that is inexplicable. But he was stopped by Lin Fei. For a moment, Yuerguan wanted to be him. Lin Fei seemed to be motionless, his body was blurred, and his aura suddenly became several times stronger. 5. There is definitely something wrong with the sentence description, although I am not good at reading. For example: Lin Fei knocked on the melon seeds and said: "How many days have your melon seeds been used? They have changed their taste!" Yu'er said vaguely: "I forgot to pay for the laundry last time." This choked Lin Fei so much! He held back and said: "I'll go, forget it, just wake up." Yu'erguan came over and said, "Where am I? Who are you! Lin Fei said solemnly: "Boy, you are in my world, in my mind...". Yu'erguan couldn't hear Lin Fei's nonsense, and laughed: "Then why do I think you are helpless against that red moon! Lin Fei said awkwardly: "Isn't that why I'm immobilizing you?" Yu'erguan looked at them motionless and asked: "Them? How are you? Lin Fei was no longer as cynical as before and said: "The great sage's body-holding technique! Yu'erguan said loudly: "Damn it, are you kidding! Lin Fei pointed at the sculptural Red Moon and Jade Masters and said, "I've fixed the golden elixir stage, do I need to lie to you? Yu'erguan smiled and said: "This is obviously the plot of a TV series, so I can just transfer it here." Lin Fei asked: "What is a TV series? Yu'erguan was also confused: "Nani? Lin Fei shook his head. Showing that he really doesn't know Yu'erguan said: "Then the time when you came is quite far away." 6. Look at this sentence. Is it the first person or the third person? For example: The days are as usual, Li Chenhao puts his arms around his girlfriend Jiamei and shows his affection in front of me. And I only have this Book of Destruction to kill time. Such comfortable days are always short-lived. Today will be a special day. For Chen Hao, even for me. All good days. 7. This I started to appear from Chapter 10 until the end. For example: I decided to follow them and go to the outside world to take a look. I have already seen through life and death, no matter where I go. In the end, I just asked: "Is there still a chance to return to Earth?" " 8. Summary: This book is not for ordinary people to read!

This book is not for ordinary people to read

I agree with the previous person's point of view, this book is really not for ordinary people to read. . . In any novel, you can use your imagination and innovate as much as you want in terms of the plot, but the basic wording and sentence making must still make the sentences smooth, right? I couldn't read this book after reading 2 chapters. The sentences are too fluent and the reading fluency is extremely poor. It's uncomfortable to read. Has the editor of Tomato really read this book? A rating of 9.7? How much money was lost?