Loans from the Underworld

The structure is quite good. The ending is just too rushed. If the ending can explain the previous content clearly. That would be awesome. Then go up the level of cultivating immortals and then go up. At the end. The protagonist attains enlightenment and becomes an immortal. Then you can move on to Season 2. Fairyland chapter. The only shortcoming is that the previous plot was not explained clearly. No more than one is enough. That would be perfect. It would be even more awesome if you write some more insights. In fact, the structure is very good. Then fill in some content carefully. It can be compared to mortals' cultivation of immortality. After saying this. His eyes were fixed on the three of them. Take a breath and suck all the pieces into your mouth. Why do you do this to me? Why? I kept roaring. Bai Wuchang said tremblingly. You, you. Who are you? Where is my black little brother? I laughed so loudly. But empty again. It's as if nothing exists. He said through gritted teeth. Already dead. Bai said. Not impossible. No. The small bones trembled and fell to the ground. Brother Hei is dead. My black brother is dead. It would be even worse to leave me alone. He gritted his teeth and said, "I want you to pay with your life." Jin Lao also didn't believe this fact. Why is this so? My benefactor is so powerful. How could I be killed by you? How do you know the whole thing is a conspiracy. I said, there are no eternal friends in the world, only eternal interests. When you surround me with your earnestness. Encourage me. Everything seemed so natural. But I felt like I was dreaming. At the moment of seizing the body, everything became clear. The three people said at the same time. Then pay with your life. At this moment. A strong wind rose. The aura of the three of them is rising steadily. And I sneered from the sidelines. Finally stopped pretending. A balloon is in my hand and slowly grows bigger. Getting bigger and bigger. My eyes were bloodshot. Constantly panting. Finally at some point. Yelled. Go ahead. Three points return to vitality. At that moment the heaven and earth split apart. The loud noise lasted for a long time. But at this moment, black clouds are pressing down on the city, threatening to destroy it. Jiutianxuanlei Shunzhi. The world is suddenly changing. And I was illuminated by a ray of light. Slowly getting higher and higher. The mountains and rivers are getting smaller and smaller. Where do I go when I am so insignificant? Sudden feeling. Dizzy. His vision went dark. I don't know how much time passed. Open slowly. I saw one person walking towards me. He spoke. Congratulations, fellow Taoist, for ascending to the immortal world. How does this end? I explained everything before. 🍉

The ending is not great. Not great, but the book as a whole is pretty good.

It's a pretty good book, but it's a pity that I haven't written any more later?

Good book. I like to read this kind of bullshit and snake-god stuff.

The front is good, but in the end, the author's IQ is not in the service area. It looks cute, eh

It looks good, but it's a bit short.