Man Is Sailing, Fallen Angel General

There are too many unnecessary descriptions, which make it seem verbose and watery.

Do you want to use him to start a war? There is no way the aunt can save this son. The aunt is cold-blooded to begin with. She is not a crew member like Whitebeard, but a family member. The eldest son is just a tool.

Dolag, why did you bring him in?

It feels big and beautiful, especially when using fruits

Roger hasn't entered the New World and Garp is a naval hero?

The writing is good and the ideas are clear. Chased

I know that the author wants to describe the details of the changes in the heart, but the writing style is too green and feels about the same as a junior high school student's composition. The force is too strong and too much is not enough. There is no need to write like this. Moreover, the protagonist's strength has improved too fast. To forcibly improve it so much is a bit brainless. Let's take a look at a few more pictures.

I don't have much to say. Please update it quickly. At first glance, I like this kind of thing. So please update it quickly.

Well, not bad. After reading it, I feel that the author likes Mr. Zefa very much. I have read several other books. As for the ending, it is indeed rushed, but it is in line with the current situation. If it is more or less, the feeling will change a lot. I hope that the second part will be better.

Why don't you want the big turtle shell of the Yellow River and the gloomy black wood?

Ace: My sons, come and save your father!

Stop working on new books. Write this one faster, and the income will never be too low. I've ordered them all, and I'll give you a monthly pass...