Comprehensive Comic: Death's Dimensional Journey

The protagonist was so poorly written by you. The battle between Uncle Ying and Michiko Nisigata treats the protagonist as a puppet puppet. You wrote the two of them too advancedly. In the final analysis, what they are fighting is just skills, which are far from magic. Writing this way will make it appear that your system is nothing more than that. To say that copying skills still requires upgrading, and copying Maoshan skills is not a complete copy, but is done in batches. Such restrictions are really evil, my heart

To be honest, what you write is like classical Chinese mixed with vernacular, plus the writing style of Western countries. In the first ten chapters, the main plot is not even explained, and the background of the characters is not introduced. What you write is not a novel, but more like a prose or a college entrance examination composition, which is more appropriate.

Every time I get one or two comments that make me not want to read them.

I don't understand, what is written here?

Thank you for your criticisms and corrections on this novel. I will read every comment carefully. I would also like to thank you for the monthly reward that I don't know which boss gave the author **. Thank you all. This is the first time that the author has received a reward. Special thanks to you for following the plot development. The basic outline has not changed, and the author has not yet formulated the next world. However, due to some of the regrets that the author himself wants to make up for as a reader, he will definitely write about the Dragon Clan and Pitch Black Bullet. Pitch Black Bullet may still start with the "Mu family" as the vanguard of traveling into this world. What he wants is a plot development that will truly change the status quo of Pitch Black Bullet. The previous head of the Mu family will not appear in the future timeline. You can understand it as the clone of the author who gave G to the protagonist. The Dragon World may be continued with different timeline branches of the main world view of this novel. After all, Kurumi Tokisaki, one of the most important female protagonists in this article, has the authority of the "pseudo" God of Time and Space. It may be more reasonable for subsequent overlapping timelines. The original CP may be removed. After all, in the eyes of the young author, Lu Mingfei, who did not save Eli Yi, does not deserve to be forgiven. No matter how good or perfect the subsequent work is, it will be impossible, and Xia Mi was the author's first uneasy feeling when he was still a young reader. A cute, beautiful school girl who looked like a fairy planted a seed in the young author's heart that would never bloom. In addition, I also dated a girl with a similar personality in high school, although it didn't end well. The above are some of the author's reverie about the subsequent plot of the novel. If you have better ideas, please contact me! In addition, if you still have regrettable characters, you can comment them and mark the source. The author will look at unfamiliar characters to supplement the article. Sincerely! Love you Mr. Whale