Dou Qi World: Incubus Pretty Boy, Joining the Chat Group
斗气世界：魅魔正太，加入聊天群
- Status
- Completed
- Length
- 231k Words
- Genre
- Fanfiction
- Subgenre
- Anime Fanfiction
- Updated
- 2y ago
- Source
- Faloo
Synopsis
All-time: Reads, Flowers.
84Chapters
2.4MReads
33.7kFlowers
9.9Score
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Let's make a formation, and if there are any additions: Gu Xun'er, Xiao Yu, Xiao Mei, Ya Fei, Nalan Yanran, Yun Yun, Xuemei, Qing Lin, Xue Lan, Little Medical Fairy, Medusa, Hu Jia, Han Yue, Xiao Xue , Xuan Yi, Liu Fei, Ruo Lin, Xu Ni, Yao Ye, Yao Yue, Cao Ying, Ye Xinlan, Yue Mei, Ya Mei, Luman, Su Mei, Zi Yan, Mu Qingluan, Feng Qing'er, Tang Huo'er, Lin Fei...
This book does not give away a girl, nor does it favor the protagonist. I have also seen all your comments. Don't worry, there are arrangements. If you give a girl away, it will be a chance to cut off the beard. You can criticize me. There are also other cheats for Destiny Child. I have made arrangements for those. Even if the final arrangement may not be good, it will never be It will cause other Destiny Children to overgrow and threaten the protagonist. I am not very good at talking. Thank you all for your opinions. This is all for the good of this book. I would also like to thank you for your support and data. This is an opinion building. If you have any comments, just reply directly.
Author, please quickly change the height of Gouba. Either don't write the height or change the photo. What do you mean by the 1.7 Meter photo? King Kong Barbie, right? I can't bring any feeling into it.
The later part is okay, the treatment of Xiao Huohuo is the same as in the original work, it just has the extra attention of Xiao Xun'er. And after talking for a long time, Xiao still pretended to be this b. Shouldn't it be a direct suppression and overbearing? It just feels like I've talked a lot of nonsense, and it's all useless, you know. That part has no flavor at all.
The heroine is too vain. Although the protagonist is a succubus, falling in love with her upon meeting her seems too intellectual, and there is no sense of accomplishment in watching it without a strategy. In this way, your character will have no unique appeal, and readers will lose it as they watch it. The plot of the Little Medical Fairy is somewhat disrespectful of the original work. She is a doctor in a town, and all the male mercenaries in the town regard her as a goddess. They like to go to her for medical treatment. Do you think she has never touched a man? . . Of course, this is just a minor problem and it doesn't matter. The main reason is that your plot has no ups and downs and is not exciting. The only exciting thing is driving. However, your heroine has not written a distinctive feature. Please change it quickly, otherwise you will definitely not be satisfied with the subscription.
The writing was OK, the priorities were clear, and we didn't chat all the time. As for the lack of fighting skills? Aren't you a wind attribute? Spiral shuriken, big spiral wheel. Still don't know how to roll balls? When there is a strange fire, go to Pirates to learn the three-color Haki, wouldn't you add some dark blue? It shouldn't just be about improving your cultivation, right?
It's nice to see, I'm quite happy, there's no pressure to level up, and it's quite decisive in killing supporting characters and passers-by! As for the part about extinguishing the fire, I feel that the way you wrote it is no different from the original plot. When I watched the horse fight back then, I thought this episode was funny. In a fantasy world, people will destroy you in a matter of minutes. What qualifications do you have to pretend like this? Your protagonist should know the plot. Shouldn't we lead someone to kill them and then take away the ring and token?
The succubus flow has taken over all the worlds, martial arts and martial arts, period dramas and modern dramas have fallen, the sea of dead fire has completely fallen, and now the fantasy plane is also suffering from the succubus flow.
To tell a joke, a 13-year-old shota who is less than 1.7 Meters tall.
In fact, unless the protagonist of this kind of fan fiction has a very good character, don't deliberately belittle it from the commanding heights. It is better to write that the protagonist is much stronger than the protagonist of the original work. It is not that you are too ** but that I am too strong. Otherwise, it will be frustrating to criticize. After all, most of the protagonists in the fan fiction have very good characters. Sometimes they may collapse if they are poisoned.